I tried to get into these songs in order to do a decent review, and actually pay attention to the lyrics, which doesn't come easily to me necessarily. We're all here to get better, right?
BSS - riffy electric intro, I like the solo break, it's got sort of a pentatonic feel. The chorus is a little awkward the first time, but by the end I'm bobbing my head. The synth at the end sort of comes out of nowhere. Guitarwork is pretty darn tight.
Lyrically, I'm not connecting to it. There's not much in the way of imagery to draw me in. Swearing like a sailor is not a bad one - I at least get a mental image of a drunk popeye. I'd encourage you to go in that direction more
ChocChip - There's some neat concepts here, with a sort of Flaming Lips vibe. The sweepy synth and backwards guitar parts are a nice contrast to the acoustic strumming. You knocked this out in a day? KISS principle worked in your favor.
Lyrically, it's pretty simple, and you manage to say a lot in few words, which always earns my respect.
CodyWalkerJr - Long tune, but I didn't mind a bit. Pretty straightforward progression and arrangement, but that suits things really well. Banjo and (slide?) guitar give it a nice country twang.
But the lyrics are where it's at in this tune. There was enough in the imagery and form (and deviation from it, like where he hits the guy with the wrench) to keep my interest. I seriously chuckled a couple times. I particularly liked "angrily began to clob me." I only wish there would have been a word to end the song that rhymed with "robbed me."
DougFunnie - backing track could have been a little more interesting, but the rap wasn't bad.
Lyric-wise, it's a good narrative. I can see the little scrappy kid spazzing out trying to bluff the bullies.
LonBobby - I seriously dig this track. The melody fits your chord progression in a really nice way. The chorus is cool. I like the breakdown around 2 minutes and how it grows/fades from there. I'll be grooving on this later when I'm writing SQL code.
Lyrically, I like it too. What's the "dooble from within" line? I'm missing that reference. The "novocaine" rhyme is clever too. I can see the narrator beating himself up over his internal conflict, but the beating up doesn't amount to much. Anyway that's what I got out of it. Nice tune.
Lookouts - I like how the song starts - "big fat kid" and the chorus isn't bad but then it seems like it should develop and go somewhere from there and does not.
Lyrically, I like the get-back-up-and-get-him theme, but it gets repetitive. There's no second verse or bridge to develop the theme. I'd be interested in hearing a more developed version of this.
Paco - loud, gritty and energetic as always! I like the slightly dissonant bits you throw in; keeps it from getting too repetitive. You're a pretty damn good guitar player too.
Lyrically, I'm always a fan of the three-different-scenarios-that-apply-to-the-main-theme. And all in the context of a self-destructive narrator which makes it interesting to listen to. Some good images there, but could benefit from more showing less telling.
Sausage - I like the phased bass. Then the quacky piezo-acoustic actually fits well and kicks it up a notch. The vocals come in and don't quite fit somehow (though it fits better the more I listen to the song). It either gets better or I get used to it as the song goes on.
Lyrically it's kind of fun how you dropped some other songfighters' names. I like the "sold in cans of tofu" line. Weird expression, which is why it works I think.
S&F - sample riffs are kind of cool, vocal could be higher in the mix. Rap bits go back and forth between tight and loose. Quick delivery vs legato phrasing is an interesting style
Lyrically, I'm impressed at using all the -eet words in the first rap set, but the sex focus just isn't my thing in songwriting. The rapper questing for a good beat is an interesting motif for the second rap bit, unique play on the song prompt but it lacks the cleverness and imagery of the first rap bit.
By about 4 minutes I sort of lose interest but I like the back and forth between the two MC's.
Sky - I've got no room to criticize anyone for poor production but it's distracting from the song. The acoustic guitar, electric, bass, drums, and vocals are all trying to occupy the same space in the mix. However, like somebody else said, there seems to be a pretty decent song under it. You can all play your instruments. The chorus is good; interesting chord progression there.
Lyrics-wise: The lyrics take a lot of effort to understand as the singer could use a little more diction and the vocals could be higher in the mix. Broken sidewalks covered in gray, trying not to pray is a good image. I get a theme of a crisis of faith in a breakup. Post the lyrics so we reviewers can do this justice?
Nobody - this is me. Do as I say, not as I do, heh heh. Glad you guys liked the tune.
"Writing a poem without form is like playing tennis without a net." - Robert Frost (horribly paraphrased because I'm too lazy to google it)