We were young, we were wild, we were beautiful With art bombs in our hearts Love was the light we were reaching for To burn us up And blow us apart Younger and wilder, more beautiful With art bombs in our hearts Out of the light we were reaching for We were born to run And never get far You left you...

Ryan Dawson -- The intro has a different tempo, which is slightly disconcerting. Good song; the verse builds well. By about 2:16 the song needs a change. Your voice has strong and tender qualities, but it feels slightly strained and tense, as if suffering from stage fright (which I doubt is the cas...

Pass me over I’m too easy Look right through me Flesh and bone No more use, I’m Just too broken Squeezed of blood, I’m Just a stone All my empty All my lonely All my hopeless, shaking rage Desperation Reach for something Wish you violently away I forgive you It’s not easy Burned in anger Torn apart ...

Enjoyed listening to all the entries. Ryan Dawson Well played acoustic tune. Nice tone on the guitar. Lyrics very poetic. Was this direct with vsts or just close miced? Thanks! Glad you liked my song. My tech is very primitive. I don't have any way to record on my computer. I used a Zoom Q3 to reco...

Schlimminy Cricket Ryan Dawson “click record” sound at the beginning… I like the inclusion. Did you record guitar and vocals simultaneously? Lyrically profound, even if by accident. No denying the overall skill/talent here. The soft touch on the guitar at the end and the ending chord choice itself....

Do the dead believe, Alone on autumn-bitter streets In grave machines behind fog lights, What the dying see In the doorways of their dreams In the fever throes of night? Stars deliver me my Immortality in Sparrows’ memories of time When the red thief comes And the dead hearts drum I will rise again ...

Ryan Dawson Very nice guitar playing. Not bad singing. Did you record the guitar and vocals together live? Anyway, sounds good. I think this could benefit from some simple accompaniment, maybe some occasional flute or violin or cello or something. There's a really horrible digital distortion/noise ...

Overcast (Shelter) All the ruthless smiles The toothless miles I walked To win your heart In the listless eyes Of suicides Love is a liar’s art Did you grow much fonder When we were apart? Overcast in June The lasting moon undone Behind your sky With my shard wings fledged Razor-edged I’m ready enou...

Thank you! I will do my best.

Hello, all! I'm new to Song Fight. "Overcast" is the first fight I've entered so far. I've been writing music for about 25 years, and I play 4 instruments. I'm also a writer, and I published my book, The King's Eagle , last year. My next one, Melidora , will be available early next year. H...