Re: Nur Ein X - Round Three
Posted: Wed May 13, 2015 10:00 am
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Thank you. I appreciate that muchly.Generic wrote:...I'm disappointed to see DJ Ranger Den go out on such an entertaining gamble...
There is only one Iris song that I care about.
I sincerely hope you are sincere, as I meant no offense.Caravan Ray wrote:Manhattan Glutton: A masterpiece. despite the worst accents I have ever heard in my life.
Well - maybe 'masterpiece' was a bit strong - but I did enjoy it very much and rated it accordingly.Manhattan Glutton wrote:I sincerely hope you are sincere, as I meant no offense.Caravan Ray wrote:Manhattan Glutton: A masterpiece. despite the worst accents I have ever heard in my life.
Some might wonder why I would make such an incredibly clever and risky track that only one judge might "get". Well, I have vacation coming up and would have to drop out anyway.
I was surprised how well everyone did with the lyrics. I was expecting to hear some bad "clangers" with inappropriate terms thrown in (there were one or two - will get to those later) - but overall, most nailed it.frankie big face wrote:Thank you! I was wondering if my references would make sense to a "local." The names of those places and things (Julian Rocks! Tuckaroo! Broken Head!) are so vivid and evocative—the lyric almost wrote itself. But I didn't know if it would work for you—that was the risk. I just knew I wanted to use the word "defenestrate"—that was my starting point for the whole song and concept.Caravan Ray wrote: Frankie Big Face: This is pretty cool. Great job on the lyrics
Glad you liked the song.
I think the mot du jour is 'Get a room'! In the losers' annex. Zah-ing!Caravan Ray wrote:Well - maybe 'masterpiece' was a bit strong - but I did enjoy it very much and rated it accordingly.Manhattan Glutton wrote:I sincerely hope you are sincere, as I meant no offense.Caravan Ray wrote:Manhattan Glutton: A masterpiece. despite the worst accents I have ever heard in my life.
Some might wonder why I would make such an incredibly clever and risky track that only one judge might "get". Well, I have vacation coming up and would have to drop out anyway.
True - the accents were appalling - but I at least found it very funny. I played it to a few blokes in the pub last night, and all agreed it was a pretty good parody of me. It even came on in my car while my 10 y.o. daughter was with me - i let her hear the first few lines before I pressed 'skip' (I didn't tell her what it was, she just knew it was one of the songs I was judging) - and she thought it was hilarious, and instantly picked up that it was someone pretending to be me.
The interesting thing to me was noticing the difference between what you wrote, and what I might write. It was very similar to something that I might write, in style and structure and content - but I couldn't help noticing every now and again bits where I would think "I would have done that bit differently". It sort of sounds like a first draft of something I might do (and I assume it really didn't get past first draft stage with you either). A 2nd draft would tighten it up and make sure every single line had a joke in it.
So - I think you achieved what you set out for. Job well done.
The next round challenge was going to be 'Make Caravan Ray sound like the sappy old Grandad pussy he really is' ... but looks like we've been pre-empted Quick, judges, to the judge-cave to see if Plan B - "don't let us down" - is a goer ...Caravan Ray wrote:I was surprised how well everyone did with the lyrics. I was expecting to hear some bad "clangers" with inappropriate terms thrown in (there were one or two - will get to those later) - but overall, most nailed it.frankie big face wrote:Thank you! I was wondering if my references would make sense to a "local." The names of those places and things (Julian Rocks! Tuckaroo! Broken Head!) are so vivid and evocative—the lyric almost wrote itself. But I didn't know if it would work for you—that was the risk. I just knew I wanted to use the word "defenestrate"—that was my starting point for the whole song and concept.Caravan Ray wrote: Frankie Big Face: This is pretty cool. Great job on the lyrics
Glad you liked the song.
And FBF nailed it in particular. Julian Rocks and Broken Head were both appropriate and well used. Extra points for mention of the lighthouse - that is the most iconic feature of Byron, and generally should always be mentioned to set the feeling of place for it.
"Tuckeroo" was an interesting choice. At first it jarred a little, not because it wasn't biogeographically correct - more that it is not a tree you ever hear sung about. It is fairly ubiquitous in the area, but it is not a particularly impressive or memorable tree. I suspect that outside of people (like me) that actually go out and identify trees professionally, or are just really into trees - many locals may not even know what it is. Aust. folk/country songs often mention the iconic species like coolibah, or mulga, or mallee, or red gum, or blue gum or just the generic 'wattle' - but these can all get quite cliched. I am pretty sure I have mentioned jacaranda or mango trees in songs in the past to evoke the sense of suburban Brisbane - more cliches. 'Tuckeroo' works because it is the right tree in the right place - and isn't a cliche. And it is a nice name.
So yes - your lyrics worked perfectly to evoke the sense of place. And It is probably your lack of detailed knowledge of the place that kept you from falling into the cliche trap.
First off, excellent! Makes me very happy. The last thing I wanted to do was sound misinformed or, worse, that I was making fun of the place. I chose my reference points carefully and well, apparently! (Kudos to the Wikipedia entry. )Caravan Ray wrote: And FBF nailed it in particular.
"Tuckeroo" was an interesting choice. .
Maybe you should treat yourself to the new Whine-a-tron 5000 VST. You must be exhausted from using the real thing so muchfrankie big face wrote:JIf I had, say, used a VST for the didgeridoo, I would have chosen a higher key ...
I, on the other hand, was so sure there must have been some sort of soon-to-be-corrected math error, that I haven't even started my song for this week.à tous les monsieurs wrote:Thanks for the unexpected win. Not to be self-deprecating, but I did not expect this entry would do anything but just get me by to the next round. No plans of winning immunity as is evidenced by the fact that I completed a song entitled "Banshee" on Tuesday night. Had I known immunity was coming I would have taken the Nur Ein week off (following FBFs personal recommendation)
Ya know, its funny you said that, because I was considering starting a thread with "fixed" songs. Songs that we redid or put finishing touches on during our extra time to make them sound more like what we were going for. Anyone else interested in posting tracks in a thread like that?frankie big face wrote:I remixed this song. Nothing major - just fixed a few things that were bothering me. You may like it more now.