Pixelated Pipe Dreams (Digital Chimera Reviews)

Dan Wrekenhaus 2 · Post by **Dan Wrekenhaus 2** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:10 am

15-16 puzzle
PostPosted: Tue Apr 05, 2005 10:46 pm Post subject:
Dan Wrekenhaus 2 wrote:
are you being mean or funny?

Both.

Although, I respect you for your SK-1 reverence, I prefer someone else's interpretation of "funny" for confirmation of this. So far, your funny has only been funny for me once.

erik · Post by **erik** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:21 am

It's always good to get a second opinion on whether something is funny or not.

*blink*

Dan Wrekenhaus 2 · Post by **Dan Wrekenhaus 2** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 12:26 am

15-16 puzzle wrote:
Dan Wrekenhaus 2 wrote:Again, I wasn;t trying to argue a meaning or definition. I would say my faith in the chair to hold me up is based on evidence. Please note, the sentence started with "I."
I used google to find definitions for faith.

I was wondering if perhaps you were using the 7th definition, which refers to a character from Buffy the Vampire Slayer played by Eliza Dushku,

I know that this is conversation is about religion, but I thought I would ask if people were using one of the non-religious definitions.

I have started 4 sentences with "I".

This, too, was funny. Touche.

*performs action*

erik · Post by **erik** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 1:06 am

Reviews, because this is a review thread:

Tuba Toothpaste: The chords and melody (and the arrangement too) just sound so uninspired, like they're just enough to be placeholders for the words. Whatever the lyrics are specifically about (beyond playing computer games), I have no clue, so it's totally not interesting to me. It's a generic novelty song, and it's not doing anything for me.

Noise Brigade: hmmmm, will this be lame techno... hmmmm, okay, it's kind of upbeat videogame music-style electronica. This was unexpected, from the intro. I need more powerups or something, I think I missed a golden coin I needed to get to the next level, maybe. This repeats too much without enough variation, and either has tempo issues, or you wanted it to sound like it has tempo issues. Neither of these are good things. This song is really just one riff at heart, and there's not enough here for me to enjoy this song.

X-Tokyo-River-God: Whoa, wtf is going on. This is freaky. I wish this was mixed a bit better, just something to make the vocals sound less dry and sit better in the mix. Shorter would have been better on this one. This one starts to wear out it's welcome. I think I might have liked this song, if it was less than one minute long.

Noah McLaughlin: gawd, start already. It's taking too long for the song to kick in. Okay, is that it? Bad drums and a computer generated voice? This lacks groove, heart, soul, interesting sounds, tension, and feeling. This is very unenjoyable.

Dan Werkenhorse: The music could be a kind of cool start of a song if there wasn't that joke-rap thing in the beginning, and then again at the middle. There are interesting noises here and it is funky, but then the vocals are 1) ridiculous and 2) mixed to a level where you can't tell what is being said. This could have been a sexy number, if you rapped something kinda seriously, much slower, and then had a proper chorus which repeated often with a cool hook. I don't care for this song.

Network Cowboy: Shades of "On the Darkside" starting to poke through the piano intro. Okay, get to the song. This is too noodly for my tastes, the non-twinkly-synth instrument, whatever it is, doesn't seem to have a clear idea of what it's supposed to be doing in the song, it just seems added so that the whole thing doesn't seem like one long piano solo. This felt like it went on forever, and there was no real rising action or reason to believe that the song was supposed to be over, it just kind of felt like you didn't want to be playing anymore. This song, I also do not like it.

Nex-Gen Herd: The bad 80's rap part sounds so uninspired. Get excited about something when you sing, even if you aren't the greatest vocalist ever. That would help. The chorus is better than the verses, but that vocoder is just a crutch, it seems. Eeeek, the return to the verse just reminds me how bad that part is. Too noveltyish. Wow, this is the perfect length for this song though. I really was going to poo-poo you up and down, but this length is a good one. I still don't like the song, though.

Andre Was Here at Midnight: Man, whoa. Tempo issues, pitch issues, prosody issues. It sounds like you're completely making up the melody and words on the spot, and that you have no idea when the chorus is coming. Gawd, this is all over the place. I don't like this song.

nyjm · Post by **nyjm** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 1:39 am

15-16 puzzle wrote:Noah McLaughlin: This lacks groove, heart, soul, interesting sounds, tension, and feeling. This is very unenjoyable.

i'm not usually in the habit of explaining or defending my songs, but the lack of heart and soul was partly the point this piece (i won't call it a "song"): the dehumanizing of human ideas. could use some more oomph, though, you're right.

Dan Wrekenhaus 2 · Post by **Dan Wrekenhaus 2** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 7:37 am

Dan Werkenhorse: The music could be a kind of cool start of a song if there wasn't that joke-rap thing in the beginning, and then again at the middle. There are interesting noises here and it is funky, but then the vocals are 1) ridiculous and 2) mixed to a level where you can't tell what is being said. This could have been a sexy number, if you rapped something kinda seriously, much slower, and then had a proper chorus which repeated often with a cool hook. I don't care for this song.

Duely noted, and thank you.

Daj Werkenhorse 1 · Post by **Daj Werkenhorse 1** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 4:47 pm

Dan Wrekenhaus 2 wrote:
Dan Werkenhorse: The music could be a kind of cool start of a song if there wasn't that joke-rap thing in the beginning, and then again at the middle. There are interesting noises here and it is funky, but then the vocals are 1) ridiculous and 2) mixed to a level where you can't tell what is being said. This could have been a sexy number, if you rapped something kinda seriously, much slower, and then had a proper chorus which repeated often with a cool hook. I don't care for this song.
Duely noted, and thank you.

DAN: Needs to make more songs with rapping, because it's a heck of a lot more interesting than acoustic sap!

NeilThrun · Post by **NeilThrun** » Wed Apr 06, 2005 6:03 pm

Dan Wrekenhaus 2 wrote:
NeilThrun wrote: Dan werken horse-Intro is too long, but i suppose thats artistic. Nice vocal effect and rap. Cuts out early, and you really lost the momentum of the song. But still its cool.
In seriousness I ask: "too long" as in it's not interesting the whole time, or you're just not a fan of long intro's?

It didn't hold my interest. If your intro is long and good, then I wont notice how long it is. So in other words, since the intro was long and uninteresting i spent most of it wondering when the intro would be over.

Niveous wrote:Dan Wrekenhaus 2. Here's an excerpt from the old SF Forum guidelines which might help:

Keep in mind, especially if you are a newbie, that not all reviews or posts will be constructive or positive. In fact, you may experience a short hazing period, typical of many public boards. We are an established community, and you are, well, to put it bluntly... fresh meat. It's all in good fun though. Unless you actually ARE an asshole, don't let Blue get to you. Keep in mind that we are used to ripping each other a new one on a daily basis - it's not about you. If you have the fortitude to ride it out, you will very likely earn a place in our hearts.

Who the fuck wrote that crap.

Bolio · Post by **Bolio** » Thu Apr 07, 2005 12:34 pm

No time to fully review this fight (hey, 3 out of 4 ain't bad.) Vote goes to AWHAM for the potential. A little editing on the vox (few really bad notes) & remix (some things are obviously too loud) would make this a very good song imo.

drë · Post by **drë** » Thu Apr 07, 2005 5:13 pm

Network Cowboy
--At first it was not appealing at all. sounded lame
++ Later realized how it ties into the title
-- but then I got board, and took a nap
vote: no – unless you played the piano with your toes

Nex-Gen Herd
++-- ok song, nothing pop out though
++ ok chorus is happening
-- needs more singing like the chorus, and less rapping
vote: no - non energetic rapping,

Noise Brigade
?? Is this a cheap CCS imitation without the singing?
++ fun and melodic
++ would sound kick ass inside of an elevator… seriously.
Vote: maybe – “we’re sorry your song has been disqualified, as I got no fucking idea if it took you a week or a year to finish” – I like it though.

Noah McLaughlin
++ those are some deep thoughts
-- it gave me a headache
-- Hawkins voices is too loud
-- too long
vote: no – never liked Stephen Hawkins to begin with

x-tokyo-river-god
++ intriguing, ear catching intro
-- and then the vocals came in
-- a bit to sci-fi for my taste
++ like the experimentation
++ like the overall feel and background noise(music ?)
?? next time bring the vocal down a bit, and softened them out, their too harsh
vote: no - too sci-fi channel for me, like the experimentation thought.

Dan Werkenhorse
++ dark growling bass
++ like the moodiness, and darkness of the song.
++ interesting lyrics
-- vocals sound like a 12 year old
-- goes nowhere after a while (even if it’s a 2 minute song)
vote: maybe - overall music has good energy

Song Fight Orchestra
++ Like the low dark creepy vocals
++ music is ok , chorus even better
-- SFO standard. not long enough (Erick ? you should make a full song out of this, has good beat/groove)
vote: maybe - probably the best “put together” song in the entire fight .

Tuba Toothpaste
?? intro guitar rhythm, sounds very SF familiar
++ good vocals (giving the rest of the competition)
-- stale music
-- could use more melody?
vote: no – lame music

Andre Was Here at Midnight – have I mentioned how hard and unnatural is for me to sing?