Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by Enter It In The Art Show » Wed May 31, 2017 10:00 am

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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by owl » Wed May 31, 2017 8:32 pm

First time reviewer. Took me a while to get around to this, sorry! Thank you all for your feedback!

Pigfarmer Jr.
I really like your use of the samples and the swirly synths--it created a great mood! It doesn't quite come together for me musically--I enjoyed the synth stuff but I found myself wishing the texture would change more throughout the course of the song, as it was in this kind of in-between space where it was not quite sparse enough to be ambient but not quite holding its ground as a more traditional instrumental. I enjoyed listening to it, but just didn't feel like I had enough to grab onto.

Lichen Throat
I quite like the instrumental part of this song, it's kind of experimental/weird and distinctive-sounding-- something about it reminds me a bit of a song called "When The Open Road Is Closing In" by the Magnetic Fields... those cool kind of angular riffs, I think, although it doesn't sound all that similar on the whole. It's a nice arrangement. As far as the way the vocals mesh with the music, what strikes me is that you seem to be quite often accenting your singing and playing on the same beats, rather than syncopating the vocal, which I personally think would be more pleasing; I think that unison thing would be more effective in much smaller doses, I did really like the lines "I'll be gone"/"Now I'm gone," which felt very poignant to me. I wasn't a big fan of the processed vocals, but it depends on what effect you're going for, I guess... I think the song would benefit from more decisive delivery (both rhythm and pitch). Even if the timing ends up somewhat off, I think a confident-sounding delivery would go a long way in making it feel "done."
I liked the lyrics at the beginning of Verse 2 a lot, very evocative.

WWF
Skillful vocal performance. I like the melody as well, very insistent and unsettling, with some unexpected shifts in there, but it did feel like it went on too long without changes to fully hold my attention. To me, that sort of continuous/repetitive vocal was crying out for a counterpoint melody coming in partway through the song to break it up, but I think some other structural or more dramatic arrangement change would be nice as well. Overall, I wasn't sure what aesthetic you were going for; the song felt like it could, at any point, either turn into a weird Laurie Anderson art song or a Disney soundtrack ballad, but wasn't quite odd enough for the former or epic enough for the latter (yet; but it could be). I'm not terribly into the dragon/prince/fantasy imagery in the lyrics, but that's my own personal preference! I think you definitely did a good job making a song with a strong, lovely melody and a memorable lyrical hook.

R. Mosquito
Goofy and fun, short and sweet. That ending reminded me of David Bowie. Not sure what to say about it, I don't really have any complaints but it sort of just felt like it was there and gone, a little thin in terms of content. Great job doing whatever it was you are doing though.

Johnny Cashpoint
I really dig the synths, I love that kind of dirty old Casio sounding synth playing the main riff and the filter sweepy whooshy texture one. Overall the song feels slightly too stately to me, I would have enjoyed this more with either a bit more or a lot less drive/energy, it currently occupies a sort of draggy midrange tempo-wise and I think it would be more effective either more washed out and slow, or faster and more frantic.
Some of the earlier lyrics felt a bit too straightforward/explicating but I liked this part of the lyrics:
"You talk of risk mitigation
But humankind is the contamination
Spread your disease til the galaxy's full of it
My death saves you money, just spare me the bullshit"
and "no AI in team" is a great line, too.
Your vocals are appealing, the "ahs" are nicely done.

Vowl Sounds
This is me! And Vom! I was coming off the tail end of a phlegmy cold when I recorded this and did want to redo the 1st chorus/bridge vocals (I thought they were pitchy but nobody has mentioned this so far). Waiting to see if we get additional feedback that I want to take into account, I appreciate all the feedback! I'm happy with how it has turned out so far, though--narcissistically, I will tell you my favorite things in this: the central lyrical conceit of zooming down from the rings of Saturn into wedding rings on a table, Vom's countermelody in the backing vocals, his strangely tasteful use of Omnichord in the chorus (how is that possible?), the slightly discordant ukulele walkdown I added in the 2nd verse. Oh, and making fun of Neil Degrasse Tyson.

2 guitars and a bass
Reminds me of the Doors! Nice moodiness, I liked the spoken word stuff. I enjoyed the vibe overall, but it felt a little tossed-off to me, like there's not quite enough there to be a song. That being said, I did enjoy listening to it.

Metaluna
This was my favorite entry, although it's very different from the style of music I typically listen to. Very nicely produced, gets right into the action with them harmonized metal guitars right off the bat, and I really liked the shift into the slow spacious chorus. If I'm going to nitpick, I thought the tone of the lead guitar in the slow part felt a little too cheesy-macho for the way the rest of the music felt at that point (works great in the louder parts though) but that's totally a matter of opinion. (Unlike all my other opinions, which are OBJECTIVE FACTS.)

WreckdoM
The sound/rhythm/tune of the "Oh Cassini" chorus reminds me of the Flaming Lips song "Yoshimi Battles The Pink Robots Pt. 1." I admire the weirdness of this song but I don't really get what this has to do with the prompt, and the vocal could use some work. It might sound cool super processed (+ vocoded, autotuned?). As is, it's kind of distracting. I do like the bubbly/bouncy instrumental once it gets into the 2nd half of the song. I think it has the potential to be an earworm but would need to be performed/produced more tightly to get there.

Huygens
The booming drums at the start sound huge and nice. I like the wailing lead guitar, but I'm not a fan of that metal chugging thing... I guess the song as a whole doesn't transcend the genre bias and make an emotional connection for me, which makes it hard for me to give any constructive criticism, sorry! I think you're doing what you do well but it's not a song I'm able to feel on a personal level.
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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by furrypedro » Fri Jun 02, 2017 7:16 am

Turns out vlc on my phone just didn't like the Huygens file. I've listened now, and so...

Huygens: interesting mix of sections. The percussion seems to get a bit thin when it transitions to the second section, mainly cos the opening beat is pretty beefy and cool. I'm not super into the melodramatic metal but there's is lots here I really like, such as the phat synth bass riff, and the atmospheric guitar wailing over the top. The mix is a bit muddy so the bass does get a little lost when it becomes very busy. I'd like it if you just looped the whole lot around a second time too cos it's quite short. Overall a couple of minor gripes but I thought it was really good and enjoyed it.
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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by Lunkhead » Fri Jun 02, 2017 9:21 am

Vowl Sounds wins, congrats!
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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by vowlvom » Fri Jun 02, 2017 11:50 am

Oh wow! Thanks! Hopefully we can get our double-act together for another entry soon. I'll be sticking around, anyways!
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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by owl » Fri Jun 02, 2017 12:21 pm

Awesome! Thanks! It can only go downhill from here.
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Re: Listen Through The Static For Your (Cassini Reviews)

Post by Enter It In The Art Show » Fri Jun 02, 2017 3:51 pm

2 guitars and a bass live - This actually sounds like it’s the audio from a film. A very trippy film. Haha! laughed at “please don’t probe me there.” Nice, you got me. I like the theremin-like synth sound’s tone, especially at the beginning. I would hire you to do voice-overs with the lower vocal. I liked this entry, very cool! Made me laugh as well as imagine all of the imagery that could have gone behind it quite vividly. Look forward to what else you submit in the future.

j$ - I like the beat programming, the intro could be sampled and turned into a real banger, y’dig? Anyway, oh! I like that piano that comes in at about 1:29. “Expected a timepiece, now be killed inhumanely” was a really great lyric, I don’t don’t fully understand it without further analysis, and I like it very much. I like how the synth trails off at the end and how raw it starts to sound in isolation. I loved the “ahh” section at 1:50, how the whole arrangement works together. One of my favorite songs I’ve heard from you since I discovered SF ten years ago. Fine job! And yes, there is no AI sin team.

Lichen Throat - Whoa! Major TMBG vibes on this one. Very Fingrtips. (Fingertips is in my top 20 songs of all time, btw.) Man, after listening more, my favorite element of the song is the organ-like synth underneath the main parts from time to time, 1:24 being the most pleasing to mine ears. My favorite point in the song was 1:35 where you say, “I’ll be gone” and how the melody of your vocal hang over and blend so well with the guitar and chord. I wish the “gone” would have hung on for a whole measure before the next phrase with the organ, I like that part so much. You did a good job of giving a musical representation of space and drifting through it. Excellent chord progression, 2:33 and the end were sweet. Loved how you chose to end it, with my favorite part of the song, even!

Metaluna - Dude, a man after my own musical haart. Yeah, yeah! 0:27, the chorus section, so good! Would love accentuate that even more, bring some of that back, please! Love the tone during the solo, enjoy the chord progression under the solo and how it quickly returns to the heaviness. Love the tone choices overall! Dude, the 2:20 section breakdown is many, many nice. Would love to hear it get even more heavy. I would very much like to collaborate on Bone Saw. But, I understand if you don’t want to necessarily/ don’t have time, just saying’, could be cool.

Pigfarmer Jr - I like the gated vocal synth stutters and the harmony and dissonance they create as they overlap and intertwine. I like the percussive shaker/hi-hat sounding effect throughout the first section keeping a tempo, even though, I think this song didn’t necessarily needs percussion. I wish the hi-hat shaker-like sound would have stayed when the reverse drums kicked in, but minor gripe. Nice! Liked the little satellite blip at the end, maybe signifying the last transmission or what have you. Nice, my friend.

R. Mosquito - Ok, ok, nice nice. Loved the rhyme with Cassini. The change was fantastic! Ending was perfect, loved that you wrote it from the perspective of the satellite who was reluctant to go on the mission, expecting a diminished experience but quickly saw the merit in the journey and objective. Clever, sir. Great vocal range as well, favorite part musically was the progression from 0:33 to 0:39 and then of course the guitar strumming under the change to the end. Well done, man. Very good stuff, someone needs to do an animation for that bad boy.

Vwl Snds - Great part writing in the intro. Voice is very nice! Love the “solar flares” line. Great lyricism, love the male vocal coming in, perfectly fits. I’ve been thinking of the Neil deGrasse Tyson lyric since the songs were dropped. Man, really superbly written song. Yes! When the snare comes back at 2:02 with the funkier groove. Much needed and appreciated. Just very smart decision making overall. Can’t say it enough, great songwriting. “Fill your mouth with butter”, haha! Love it. Wow guys, wow! Veteran songsmith caliber, truly talented and clever.

Wendy Wiseman - Ms. Wiseman, great voice you have! The way you handled that very difficult chromatic winding in the expertly crafted melody so effortlessly was very impressive and worked very well against the awesome arrangement. I love your use of accidentals that fit so naturally, you pulled off a John Williams level melody, and I mean that, truly. Great composition, obviously your forte. Oh wow, that harp arpeggio and flourish! Very much like that. Epic and evocative, love the dragon that lies in Saturn idea, you make me want to be crowned the Prince of Saturn. “Just keep your antennae pointed at us” is the most memorable line for me, love it. Seriously, can’t praise your composing ability and very obviously deep understanding of part writing and theory enough. In a decade of listening to SF, this is the most technically impressive composition I’ve ever heard, this could be a piece to study for composition students. Key changes, modulation, the list goes on. Bravo.

Wreckdom - Homie, I always look forward to your songs, your band name alone has made me laugh for a long time. Voted for you, yes I did. This song is fun, I love the Cassini lyrics, I don’t care if doesn't explicitly relates to a satellite, I get it. Downloading this one, my friend. I really like the synth at the beginning, and love the change and ending. Too short, sir! I don’t have much to say, I just very enjoyed this. Musically, it’s freakin’ cool, love the chord stabs under the second half and you made me laugh with your vocal delivery and samples of your own voice. Also like the kalimba, and the fact that you can hear the music quietly in the background under your last line. Never leave song fight alone, please.

Huygens was me.
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