Search Your Feelings (Father & Child Reunion Reviews)

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Search your feelings. You know it to be true.

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Please post your lyrics in "Ye Olde Lyric Archive" if you'd like us reviewers to snark about them appropriately. :D
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Man, some great submissions this week. Loving them so far,
Sausage i like this sound! reminds me of your Fat Man, (which is one of my favorite songs ever!)
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Cody – Its nice to hear the experimentation trek you’re going on, last week James B now its Brian J. Generally speaking, you’ve been at your strongest when doing progressive country. If you like the new stuff, you’ll have to keep at it because its not there yet. But throw one of your progco creations out there once in a while too, ok?

KC – Like opening a box of Twinkies, you know what you’re getting with Dr. Ken and the Chickens. Blues based rock and roll. Excellent production too. But why not stretch out a bit – try something different like maybe a bass based tune. I’m not criticizing because its all good, but I would like to hear what it sounds like if you break out of the influence of Chuck Berry.

Milton – I'm not a veteran around here, so listen when they chime in. From my perspective, the vocals are nice because the intonation and the voice is nice. The keys are good, the lyrics ok. I'm into RISC lyrics - real short and sweet, but thats me. I realize its the first time you've entered so here's the nub: keep producing clean material (vocals not buried, instruments not buried, etc) like you are, they like that here. But do add some more interest to the mix, maybe some bass, or harmonies during the chorus where you want to emphasize something. Also, don't get gimmicky with the panning, as there were places where the vocals came out of one channel. They need to be front and center. The song is long and sparsely instrumented, so the lyrics must be powerful. Try them out on someone without the music and see their reaction. You won't please everyone here, no matter how good you think your song is. But be true to your own style and don't look to us for affirmation. My only admonition is to stay positive and use the feedback to become a better producer/songwriter, not build your ego. You're new here so I went long on the general stuff. Here's the specifics: The song does stay with you and I hear you working the vocals and piano to good effect, but it just sounds unfinished – lacking depth. I don’t mean sonically, but its too empty. Even when theres more than just vocals and keys, I still hear only vocals and keys. I don’t know if “staying with you” is a good or bad thing though. I know there have been some times when I wrote a song that I hated later but couldn’t get out of my head.

G…S. – I don’t know why, but I hear a Ross Durand influence here?

Nobody – I was feeling pretty good lately. But even though its about cowboys and such, its still has that melancholy feel to it. Very nice my friend, very nice.

pDs – When I need a good time, I call up pDs. There’s nothing better than hearing you exterminating bad stuff with your theramin. It must be nice to have full command of production tools like you have. I’m hoping to get there myself someday.

BSS – This is nice. I think I like this as good as anything done with the chick singer. The subtle background delay sounds layer things nicely. It has a late ‘60s feel to it, were you trying for that?

Hblt – Geez, Mott the Hoople reborn. Were the drums recorded live? I’d vote for you at a battle of the bands.

BLZO – OMG: David Bowie reborn. This fight is insane – an early ‘70s redux. I’m shaking with it now. This is very launchable into the upper regions of voting.

WrDm – And another retro journey, this could have been done by the Tubes. This goes into the all time favorites bin. I’ve got a great big grin on my face while I type this. Absolutely AWESOME … and a baby’s arm holding an apple.

Sep – Will it ever end – early Genesis. What a masterful setting – goth, castles and a Steve Hackett guitar.

MySk – No, it will not end. Moby Grape from ’68. I didn’t think I’d like the cussing and all, but they don’t detract like I thought they might. Really nice job.

TripleB – Ok, it finally ends. I hate to say it, but I am getting used to your style and … kind of like it. No, I won’t admit I said that in public no matter how many wet rag dolls you hit me with.

SD – Yes its been a long time. Either you are a mental case or a genius. One way or another you’re one of a kind. I vote for genius.

Brownie – Way good. Not quite a dance tune, but a toe tapper. I’m ok with it.

Greg – Stoned swaying music. A great beginning, confusing ending (too abrupt) and ok in between. I got lost after the first verse.

Ssg – My first real try with a DAW and drum software. Until now, I’ve been recording directly into a digital recorder. I’m really impressed at how much better I can get the production, while I’m still trying to improve the songwriting.
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G…S. – I don’t know why, but I hear a Ross Durand influence here?
I won't deny it, Ross is one of my favorites. I'm curious what it is, if you ever figure out why. We are both fathers, we both use our kids sometimes in recordings, we're both in California. Anything beyond that?
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EvelBist wrote:Cody – Its nice to hear the experimentation trek you’re going on, last week James B now its Brian J. Generally speaking, you’ve been at your strongest when doing progressive country. If you like the new stuff, you’ll have to keep at it because its not there yet. But throw one of your progco creations out there once in a while too, ok?
Next fight, I'm doing a country song! I wanted to record a rock song with live drums because I've never tracked live drums before and I have a punk band coming to my home next week to record.. Love your subm,ission this week along with a few others
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EvelBist wrote:Cody – Its nice to hear the experimentation trek you’re going on, last week James B now its Brian J. Generally speaking, you’ve been at your strongest when doing progressive country. If you like the new stuff, you’ll have to keep at it because its not there yet. But throw one of your progco creations out there once in a while too, ok?
Do me a favor, if you have some time, listen to my song (FCR-U)on repeat a few times and give me another opinion. its a pretty damn catchy song :)
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Milton – I would have liked to see the lyrics. The song does stay with you and I hear you working the vocals and piano to good effect, but it just sounds unfinished – lacking depth. I don’t mean sonically, but its too empty. Even when theres more than just vocals and keys, I still hear only vocals and keys. I don’t know if “staying with you” is a good or bad thing though. I know there have been some times when I wrote a song when I hated it but couldn’t get it out of my head.
Lyrics are up now if you want to take a look at them. Sorry I couldn't get them up sooner. I had trouble creating an account on the boards until just now. Thanks for the review. I know what your talking about with the lack of depth. I'm gonna work on that for the next fight.
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Just want to say that nobodyetal figured out the inspiration for my song. He wins a prize. Any others that may be curious need to figure it out for themelves, if'n they bother to care. :)

I will listen and post reviews over the next few days.
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Paco Del Stinko wrote:Just want to say that nobodyetal figured out the inspiration for my song. He wins a prize. Any others that may be curious need to figure it out for themelves, if'n they bother to care. :)

I will listen and post reviews over the next few days.
I never read lyrics until I hear a song multiple times and want to know more about it. I listened to your song yesterday and knew exactly where your inspiration came from. We seem to connect on a strange level, which is probably why we work so well together. If you look in the art archive, I accidentally submitted my art as "Father And Son Reunion", lol. Then fixed it and resent it with the correct title. History shows again and again how nature points up the folly of man. :P
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Berkeley Social Scene
pitchy vocals, but emotional performance, nice 3/4 feel and good arrangement. Abandonment, he's talking to his father after not seeing him for his whole life? Or he's asking for a (re)union?

boblazo
funky, kind of dark yearning. The choruses have a nice feel, the harmonies are subtle but work well. The bridge might be a bit sparse, seems like it's not as well thought out as the rest of the tune. But I really like the vibe you put out here.

Brown Word and the Big Whine
Synth is too loud compared to the vocal again. But then it morphs into a really cool electro groove for that chorus bit, which disappears for the second verse. Verse lyrics are contradictory descriptions of the father, which makes me think of the things an orphan imagines about a missing father, or the things one's mother might say about an absent father depending on her mood. It fits together in a neat way.

Cody Walker Jr.
AC/DC rather than James Brown - but a much better impression this time around. Seriously, you nailed the style to a T, down to the riff breakdown and the explosions at the end. I like how you rhymed "child support" with "day in court." Also cool how much fun you seemed to have with this.

Greggers Inc.
dictionary-introspective mood tune. I'm torn. The approach is unexpected and struck me as clever at first, but it teeters on the edge of being pretentious. It's fairly well executed though. I like how the guitars play with each other, and the vocals are well performed.

G.U.N.S.
samples of kids, w some tasty guitar. I like the choruses, but the vocals don't seem to blend somehow. I don't know if it's because they're panned to hard to each side? It gets less noticeable on further listens so maybe it's not so bad. I like the vocals - the kid voice is an interesting addition, which freshens this fight up. The vocals give the impression of a Count of Monte Cristo-style drama where the son and father are separated for some political reason, and they end up enemies. But I like villains and intrigue so I'm probably reading too much into it. :D

Hoblit
sounds like the guitars wanted to have the song about 5bpm faster than the drums. Boom-chuck breakdown at the bridge is a neat changeup. A little loose and grungy for my taste. The lyrics don't have a whole lot of imagery in them to grab me. I respect your rhyming "communion" with "reunion" and not making it sound awkward.

The Kenzie Chickens
Straight-ahead Bluesy rock. Yay cowbell. Vocals could be tighter rhythmically, and louder in the mix. The story isn't bad either. And the fact that it's a narrator telling a story is a nice changeup from the narrative in most of the rest of the entries (including mine).

Mickey Skylark
congrats on the win last week! Vocals are Dylan-esque somehow. So's the song structure, but the arrangement takes it somewhere else. Lyrics are a pretty harsh painting of the narrator's jerk of a father. I liked how the lyrics held off from rhyming in places. Drew attention nicely to the content. Guitarwork was pretty nice as well.

Milton
Ben Folds. Vocals a little pitchy in places, and very sweet in others. Not much arrangement to comment on, but G&P > G&G. The Pamphlets bit is clever. The shouted chorus at the end seems kind of ugly compared to everything else. The lyrics strike me as a fairly poetic musing on stepping out of our fathers' (in the general sense) shadows. I'm missing the "reunion" connection, but not too shabby overall.

Mr. Beany Bellows Balefully
Kind of a celtic dirge theme. I could hear this in Bb with a bagpipe and drum corp behind it. Sorry your accompaniment didn't work out. I would really have liked to hear that. Nice take on the villain as the regular person driven to extremes.

Nobody, et al.
my song. Dedicated to all the road-warrior dads out there, cowboys or otherwise. Wish I was a little better at the harmonica.

In retrospect, I need to put more empty silence after a melancholy song so that the nice somber mood I create doesn't get immediately destroyed by:
Paco del Stinko
- Just kidding Paco. This is a really cool song/arrangement, I dig the theremin which gives it a 70s horror B-movie feel. The changeup on the chorus is great. La la la!! Theremin solo! I like the lyrics too, your word choice is nice to conjure images. But that may be because I know what you're writing about. I won't spoil it for everyones else.

sausage
Nice feel to this tune. The echoey distorted guitar sits really nicely in the mix sort of floating atop the rhythm section, and the vocals fit. Something about this (the tone or the progression, I'm not sure which) harkens back to your Fat Man entry, which I don't mind at all. I wondered if anybody would take a spritual tack with this song prompt, seems almost begging for it. The second verse sounds a little bit thrown together, but I like the chorus a lot. Another feel-good tune from Sausage(TM). :-)

Sep
The backing track is nice and atmospheric in an electonic way. The vocals are a little off, I think it's the way you're scooping (is that the right word?) - gliding from note to note rather than singing each distinct notes. Post your lyrics?

Steve Durand
I like the trumpets, and the laid-back happy feel. You throw out all the classic (I'm going to use that word rather than "cliched" because I like it) father images, riding without training wheels, etc. Nice to have a happy fatherhood song after hearing about all the deadbeats! :-)

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...I think I actually LIKE this week's submission. I must be growing as a person. Starts with a spacy homage-to-Cygnus-X1 intro. Then morphs into a groove that's totally solid, with the uncomfortable home-for-Thanksgiving monologue/argument and the turducken bit at the end is frickin hilarious.
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hi everyone.. first off, wow, I'm honored to be tied for first in last week's entry. (I say "I" but I really mean 'we' as 'mickey skylark' is in effect , me and hoops, i'm the principal songwriter, rhythm guitar player and singer but he's the production genius behind how it sounds...)

anyway, can't wait to dig in and hear everyones entries this week- work is kind of crazy tho so it'll probably have to wait a few days - should be able to do it on the weekend tho!
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Milton: A Whole lot of piano here. I'd like to hear some other instruments.

Sep: Droning and depressing just like I like it.

Bob Lazo:
We'll vote for you.

Gregger's Inc.: Interesting. Guitar got a bit meandering at times.

Hoblit: Strong guitar.

Mr. Beaney: Not for me.

GUNS:
Very interesting...Gotta have a place for this on the interwebs or some video or something.

Wreckdom:
Bizarre and bombastic...Held my interest all the way baby.

CodyWalkerJr.:
Sound like AC/DC, and well done so. Like another poster...We loved your "Fat Man" song in this household.

Mickey Skylark: Pretty good.

Berkley Social Science: I've heard better from you.

Brown Word: Nope.

Nobody et al:
Nice sounding vocals, good lyrics, nice images, good song. You got our vote.

Sausage: Wasn't into guitar sound. Would rather hear a guitar sound from a real amp. Not as convenient though.

Steve Durand: decent.

Paco Del Stinko: Creative.

The Kenzie Chickens:
Good feel. I'm a sucker for that vibe. Cowbell gets in the way of the mix.
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The Kenzie Chickens: BTW...We voted for you too!
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AC/DC rather than James Brown - but a much better impression this time around. Seriously, you nailed the style to a T, down to the riff breakdown and the explosions at the end. I like how you rhymed "child support" with "day in court." Also cool how much fun you seemed to have with this.

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Thanks brother. My main goal right now is to get good production from different genres of music besides acoustic driven stuff. I'll do a country song next week :)
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[quote="boblazoCodyWalkerJr.:[/u][/b] We loved your "Fat Man" song in this household.

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Thank you, i really enjoy that song, i play it out live a lot, (As long as there arent any uptight overweight fellas in the room)
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BSS – Pretty and dreamy song. Makes me think of Pink Floyd sort of. I like.

Bob Lazo - I like this. Great bassline, and I really like the key change building up to chorus. Nice breakdown. This song has all the right peices.

Brown Word – The synth in the verse got way blown up in the mix, and that makes me sad. Technical difficulties (synth pooping out intermittantly, note to self, never turn a track all the way up if you can’t hear it, make sure the instrument is actually loaded…), and didn’t pick up on it till it was rendered and sent off. Of course the remix is much more civilized but post-deadline, fffffffuuu… Oh well, I had great fun with this, delving into multi-tracking vox, applying automation, navigating continuous system crashes  etc. Each song a new learning experience. Can’t wait till the next title (new system in the works too, less crashy)!

Cody Walker Jr. - Rowdy cock-rock all the way. This is awesome!!!

Greggers Inc. - Brooding and sad. Like the vintage guitars weaving throughout. Extremely short, but nice.

GUNS - Oh cute, a kid singing! Kudos for that. Father child trade-off vox are neat. Not a big fan of the harmonies though, the high voice is not good. I don’t like the guitar solo either.

Hoblit - Rockin’ number here. Aggressive snotty vox, yes! Anthemic Mud Honey-soundin’ breakdown. Was it recorded in a garage? I hope so because it’s awesome.

Kenzie Chickens – What can I say, I like the Chickens. For the kinda sad lyrics (I read most of the lyrics first before hearing the songs) this song is upbeat. You could play any number of venues here in Austin, it would fit right in.

Mickey Skylark – You are the boss. Not Bruce Springsteen, but a classy, classic style, slick sound, great instrumentation, and your voice is right on. The song is well-put together, catchy and listenable. The cursing is totally appropriate, in my opinion.

Milton - Very beautiful introduction and lovely pianos throughout. The vox sound really strained though.

Mr. Beany – Not sure if it was intentional but this song is very creepy, and that I like about it.

Nobody et. al. – So good. You consistently bring great tunes to the fight. Well played, well put-together, sounds great. Could go into the ol’ iPod with this one. In fact I’m gonna play it over after I go to this meeting (I’m at work).

Paco Del Stinko – Yes!!! This is my favorite, soundwise, storywise, structurewise. Forboding and threatening against happy and silly, awesome guitars, use of theramin, nice production, expressive good-sounding vox.

Sausage – I like your music, it really reminds me of the 70’s arena rock. My dad would like this, and that’s not a bad thing cause my dad rocks. I don’t like to ding a good tune because of faulty production, but this sounds great and that really helps bring out the songwriting and musicianship that I think has gotten obscured in some of your past submissions, so keep it comin’.

Sep - Neat sounding synths in the bridge. Sort of mushy sound quality, maybe it’s my headphones. Vox could be a bit stronger and more on key.

Steve Durand – This has sweet lyrics :) and I really love the brass. It is nice to hear a happy father/child song. Despite my sort of lonesome tune, my dad and I get along great. So this sort of brings a happy tear, in fact I might send Dad a link so he can enjoy it too.

WreckdoM – We had a blast making this one! I am surprised no one has noticed our blatant opening homage ;) Man was it fun being there while Geoff recorded that ending bit… tough to keep a straight face that’s for sure.
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Reviews: Father and Child Reunion -- By billymojo

Good to hear all the different emotions and memories expressed in this fight. Steve Durand and Mickey Skylark back-to-back again, please. It means I gotta actually listen to and read the lyrics. Not my usual thing; I’m more of an “it’s got a beat and you can dance to it” kind of listener. So, I won’t be attempting any discreet critical analysis of lyrical content. More likely I’ll try to express how the lyric, coupled with the music, makes me feel.

Mr. Beany BB: A cappella is a tough format. I salute you. This is a nice tune; sad and cuts right to the subject at hand. The political and personal statements are nicely combined. Political statements in popular music often go all preachy and that didn’t happen here. Very effective touch not identifying the narrator until the end; you’ve drawn us in, then given voice to a person better known as evildoer.

G.U.N.S.: I’m growing fond of your open vocal harmonies, open meaning (to me) that you omit notes that could be included between the notes you sing. Beautiful guitar tones and some smokin’ playin’. Touching refrain. Not sure how I feel about child’s vocal but I’m glad somebody went that route.

Boblazo: Super fine pop tune, right from the top. That first chord change hooked me completely. And lead vocal is delivered with subtle confidence. I like everything about this. I could go on. Ipod ready. My fave this week.

Paco: No, I don’t know the inspiration. But I’d like to. This tune is great fun to listen to, but lacking context I’m a bit lost. I love the guitar lick at 2:38. The theremin (or whatever you call it) is a nice touch. After hearing more of your stuff I’ve become comfortable with the unusual juxtaposition of your vocal style and backing tracks. This is an ambitious effort and sounds really, really good.

Nobody: Another worthy effort. Your style is one that (for me) can be grating. (Depending on my mood, of course.) Many “singer-songwriters” turn too sweet or deep for my taste instead of just telling the story. (Good gawd but there’s a zillion young wannabes out there who want their art to be significant, but can’t pull it off. Personal note: I grew up listening to early Dylan, lots of wannabes, and walked that same road, penning some lousy tunes. I wouldn’t compose today if Songfight didn’t require original material.) You walked that line here without crossing over. Modest and gentle are words that come to mind here. Your vocals are quietly confident and assured. I wouldn’t call this an ambitious work, but it doesn’t need to be. The story, and the emotions therein, speak for themselves. The last minute or so is well constructed, so that even though the tune runs long, its not merely by repetition.

Brown Word/Big Whine: The synth line that begins and ends the song sets the theme. But things get lost somehow. For instance, at 2:34, an entirely new part is introduced. And things get a bit drifty from there on. So, I’m not crazy about the composition. On the plus side, I love all the chromatic percussion. You’ve a real knack for that.

Berkeley: Everything you submit shows effort. Thanks for never mailing it in. This, for me, is one of your better compositions. Slow tempo is risky and tune could have become ponderous, but the synth figure (featured at the fade) keeps things flowing. I gotta remember that when I attempt a slow number.

WreckdoM: This is fantastic. I’m just a big dumbass fanboy for your stuff. The overall sound is huge with massive bottom end. And since you’re in Texas, you know of the story you tell, not just making up the football vs. wrestling bit. Your Wish You Would was a funny song. You may have meant to be humorous here, but the effect is ominous, scary and beautiful, and foreshadows a violent end to the day.

Sep: Some nice layering, and I like addition of parts as the tune progresses, especially at 1:52. But overall, the composition is not interesting enough to hold me. Vocal is very pitchy in parts, I assume intentionally, and I’m not sure what effect you are going after with that.

Cody: Great fun. And why not? Music can be fun, serious, derivative, boldly original, or whatever pleases the artist at a particular time. But after this and last week’s fight I’m ready for you to focus a little and get back to what you do best: polka. Keep it comin’ bro.

Hoblit: I’ve got no reason not to like this tune. It sounds good. So what’s my problem? It might be as simple and stupid as expecting an angsty lyric when hearing this kind of backing track. Might be the ponderous riff at the beginning and end; tune really kicks in at 0:32.

Greggers: Well, you’ve got the seed of a song here that’s worth finishing, although there’s nothing unique about the chord progression to make tune stand out. Your vocals are worthy. Keep writing and submitting tunes.

Mickey Skylark: A tectonic shift in mood from last week. Impressive. And as I mentioned in a prior post (and emailed to my brother today after he commented your tune was his fave this week) this is the tune I would have written if I had the talent and the desire to write a personal and true story. “Go fuck yourself!” Sometimes it’s just gotta be said. Beautiful recording by the way. Nice chord change around the “Go fuck yourself” line. And the signature guitar lick, and other guitaring is well done. Love the ending too. Maybe bring up the back vox a bit, but that’s a mere trifle.

Milton: I’m mixed up here. The last verse begins to tell a story, right? Parts of the song appear earnest, and others parts humorous, like the pamphlets verse. But I’m no deep thinker here. Your voice has the timbre to sing an emotional tune. Consider additional accompaniment on your next submission.

Steve Durand: Lovely lighthearted tune. Are the horns live? Either way, they sound terrific. The whole recording sounds terrific.

Sausage: An excellent composition, perhaps the best of the litter this week. Catches that anthem feel from the 70’sand kept my attention throughout. Back vox fit right in. And I’ve come to appreciate your lead vocals. My only quibble would be that the lead guitar might be more effective if it were to weave in and out of the mix. I could listen to this all day.

Kenzie Chickens: Gotta fess up. I kinda mailed this in. Inspired by Wish You Would by Tuners Union and Future Boy, I spent way, way, WAY too much time this week on a vocal piece, a bit of an homage to “In My Room” by the Beach Boys. I’ll spare the details and will only say that I wouldn’t wish that 3:15 on any of you, and I have a delusionally positive opinion of my own work. So I ditched it and retreated to more friendly terrain. The influences for this tune should be fairly obvious.
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Re: Search Your Feelings (Father & Child Reunion Reviews)

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Hblt – Geez, Mott the Hoople reborn. Were the drums recorded live? I’d vote for you at a battle of the bands.

Thank you, you got what I was doing. I was going for big, loud, angry, and just a little formulaic cheese. The drums were tracked, but recorded as a whole, not individually tracked by piece. I appreciate your review and I'm glad you have verfied one of my goals with this song.

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sounds like the guitars wanted to have the song about 5bpm faster than the drums. Boom-chuck breakdown at the bridge is a neat changeup. A little loose and grungy for my taste. The lyrics don't have a whole lot of imagery in them to grab me. I respect your rhyming "communion" with "reunion" and not making it sound awkward.


I couldn't make the triplets possible if I sped it up. I mean, maybe I could but it would have been a lot harder for me to do in under a week if I had to play the verse and chorus parts faster. Thanks for the 'neat' compliment at the bridge. I wanted to leave the listener thinking 'punk' even after all of the big rock cheese. The lyrics are hard to portray without the actual real life back story. Which there is one. No, I'll spare you the drama. :) Thanks for the listen and the review.

Hoblit: Strong guitar.

Thank you.

Hoblit - Rockin’ number here. Aggressive snotty vox, yes! Anthemic Mud Honey-soundin’ breakdown. Was it recorded in a garage? I hope so because it’s awesome.

Ha, no it was not but you, like EvelBist, totally got what I was trying to accomplish. I've been secretly listening to some cheese rock and old Jane's Addiction in a sort of attempt to get back to my roots. I need to start somewhere if I'm going to start Songfighting again. Thank you very much, I do appreciate it. I specifically dig the "Aggressive snotty vox, yes!" compliment. As I was tellin' nobodyetal, I wanted to leave the listener with 'PUNK' after all of the garage rock.

Hoblit: I’ve got no reason not to like this tune. It sounds good. So what’s my problem? It might be as simple and stupid as expecting an angsty lyric when hearing this kind of backing track. Might be the ponderous riff at the beginning and end; tune really kicks in at 0:32.

The lyric IS angsty. As I covered with nobodyetal, there is a real life back story to the lyrics. I suppose I didn't convey that well enough but the lyric and vocals are trying to portray a 'defensive' type attitude. I'll spare everybody the actual drama but know that I didn't want to come off na nana boo boo TOO much, but I did want to be a little stand offish. Thanks for the review and I do appreciate your review and participation in this thread. :)
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From the reviews so far, I do believe I hit the nail on the head with my work this week. That is rare. So I'm a bit giddy about getting it right. Obviously, any song written and recorded under a week isn't going to be SPOT on but I pat myself on the back enough to keep up the encouragement.

It's nice to submit again and I want to get back into the swing of things. I miss Songfight!

I'll post reviews within the next two days.

Thanks to everyone who has listened and participated. I do think most of the submissions are pretty good quality and listenable. So there's that!
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Re: Search Your Feelings (Father & Child Reunion Reviews)

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Mickey Skylark: Maybe bring up the back vox a bit, but that’s a mere trifle.
Thank you for the kind review. I would have brought up the backing vocals but there aren't any :)
There probably should have been.
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Re: Search Your Feelings (Father & Child Reunion Reviews)

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hoops wrote:
Mickey Skylark: Maybe bring up the back vox a bit, but that’s a mere trifle.
Thank you for the kind review. I would have brought up the backing vocals but there aren't any :)
There probably should have been.
Well, that's awkward.
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Re: Search Your Feelings (Father & Child Reunion Reviews)

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Billymojo wrote:
hoops wrote:
Mickey Skylark: Maybe bring up the back vox a bit, but that’s a mere trifle.
Thank you for the kind review. I would have brought up the backing vocals but there aren't any :)
There probably should have been.
Well, that's awkward.
Yes, you really need to do something about those voices in your head.
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