The full stops ("hits"?) are a nice contract to the straight-ahead feel the rest of the song.
There's some good imagery in the chorus and bride, fat getting fatter, thin wasting away,
playing games, laying tracks. Throw some of that goodness into the verses. Who/what is the "they"
in the second verse?
Paco - can't help but think of Primus with the cool bass line and unusual vocal attack in the verse.
I mean that in a nice way, in case it was unclear.
Then the chorus comes in with the organ and takes itin a different direction that's jarring a little. The bridge is a neat diversion. Quality guitar work as always.
Lyrics are good from an imagery perspective, and those images are well placed.
To me (and I'm just one asshole on the internet) it didn't seem like the end result (Once upon a time
I was just like you) followed from the rest of the song, which was the narrator giving a fat guy a hard time.
BSS - Your guitar tone is pretty great throughout here. I like the chorus with the harmonies,
and the "never according to plan, another day, fat man" is a nice turn.
That said, it takes a lot of energy (and multiple relistens) to make out a bunch of your lyrics. Good options
are posting your lyrics and/or adding some EQ/compression to make the lead vocals stand out.
Kenzie - Oh I dig me some ZZTop. Heh heh. Right down to the "howl howl." Attitude.
Gock block (small cowbell?) is a nice touch.
Harmonica solo fits perfectly. Lyrics are sparse, but that fits the style. Dig it.
If a blues band busted this out at a dive bar I might not even know it wasn't an old cover of something.
Cody - I also dig me some stripped down folk-country. Great song. Arrangement just what it needed. Djembe?
The chorus progression and the harmonies were a great changeup from the already good verse prog.
Lyrics are evocative and all flow logically but without being dull. Nice nice nice.
Supercar - Nice drums. I like how the riff reminds me of the BatMan theme. The arrangement is heavy and solid.
While the groove changes, it never stops being a groove. The lyrics are a bit of an enigma, I can't tell what
you're singing about. A car, a mechanic, reading a fable, fable not ending well.
The "let's just footnote everything" is kind of a neat phrase to throw in there. Appeals to my nerdy background.
I'm missing what ties it all together, and what it has to do with Fat Man.
But then I'm just some idiot on the internet. Despite the lack of undersanding I like the tune.
Radio Show - You have a great voice. Good blues tune to showcase it, too.
Neat song about your father, kind of cool that we know the backstory. Food imagery making me hungry.
I don't know a ton about the blues form, but I wouldn't have minded if arrangement on the chorus was
a little more different from the verses than it is. I bet some vocal harmonies would sound killer to fill it out there.
Well done.
Sausage - rockin the piezo acoustic (in parallel with a mic?), and though I usually don't care for that,
it fits with the rest of the tune. The syncopated groove is tight and lends itself well to the feel you're going for.
The chord progressions throughout are engaging and fit with the booze-hazy, TGIF cantina-by-the-sea.
Harmonies on the chorus are nice too. It all sort of reminds me of a vacation in Key Largo I took in college.
Lyrics don't demand too much from the listener (unless I'm missing some sort of deconstructionist undercurrent),
but that suits. The song gives energy rather than takes it away. Bet you could sell beer with this.
ADD - batman theme, nice. The low-fi angle grates on me (but that's just me). Feels sort of repetitive.
I got a rich/overconsumption is going to kill us sort of vibe from the lyrics (which I don't necessarily disagree
with) but just didn't get drawn in.
Probably not your fault.
TunersUnion - Most of what I love about all your songs is here - the consistent harmony, interesting chord
progressions, rhythmic as hell. I would have liked the vocals more forward in the mix -
the harmonies are so nice and lyrics good. I'd like it to be front and center with the rest of the song serving that.
I like the beginning and the end better than the fleshed-out middle part, I'm not sure why. Acoustic guitar solo is nice.
The lyrics make good pictures, of a disconnect with the world.
Pigfarmer - Kind of a downer song, but believable. Arrangement is pretty stripped down, not much to comment on.
Words are not terribly poetic but good images and it works since we've all teased the fat guy and then (most of us
at least) felt bad about it.
AdamDachis - And the flip side of that, playing the fat guy for laughs. Your imagery and detail is spot on.
Good voice, nice melancholy piano and pads arrangement.
GUNS - There's a lot going on in this arrangement. I like all the different textures,
contrast between classical acoustic, fuzzy bass synth, slap bass, piano bits, drum samples
I like how it opens up in the chorus.
Vocals are hard to listen to, the pitch is off.
Lyrics are straightforward, class warfare take on Fat Man. Starves under the poverty line is nice.
Johnny Cashpoint - Not sure if it's your accent or the arrangement but I get a total Pink Floyd
feel from this. Which is kind of cool. It builds nicely to the end.
Props for using "dysmorphia" and not making it sound strange. I like the lyrical approach,
as it's got a dark take on the psychology of being overweight and dieting.
Nobody, et al - Mine - wish I would have had more time to clean it up. Thanks for the kind words.
thanks for your review!
