Nur Ein X Round Two "Stolen Diary"

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j$ wrote:.. Get someone else who actually has an imagination to write the lyrics for you this time? ;p
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Also, a quick rules refresher for the newcomers or those who might need a reminder:

DJ Ranger Den, having been granted the year's first immunity, does not need to turn in a song for Round 2. She might turn one in anyway; that's up to her. If she does submit a song, it will be posted on the site and the judges may choose to review it, but it will not receive a ranking, and she cannot get immunity two weeks in a row.

Immunity is granted to the winners of Rounds 1 through 3. If you make it that far, your songs must stand on their own merits until the end of the competition, or until you get eliminated.

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Oh, good to hear about the title thing, I'd actually wondered that myself and noticed last round that one or two people didn't use the title verbatim. That makes sense to me, since there are plenty of songs out there where the title doesn't get mentioned in the song...

It's weird how different people react to titles. Last round, I hated the title, but other people loved it. I thought it was too limiting, but then I read Frankie Big Face's lyrics. This round a couple of people are complaining, but to me it's ripe... Definitely don't see why it'd be limited to a 14 y/o girl's perspective. Anyone could have a diary. The diary could contain nation secrets. Or it could be a serial killer's diary. Or a killer enchilada recipe. Course, I've now jinxed myself and probably won't finish :-)
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I had a lot of crazy ideas for who the diary could belong to (good ideas Josh/Zack) but I think I'm going with the 14 year old girl after all. And yeah, I'm definitely thinking about not including the actual title in the lyrics ... it seems like a title that would have to be shoehorned in. But might work nicely sung in the harmonies ...
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It would have been easier as "Stolen Diary". I was thinking of doing a dyslexic version "The Stolen Dairy" as a Nein if I have too much spare time.
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josh wrote:Oh, good to hear about the title thing, I'd actually wondered that myself and noticed last round that one or two people didn't use the title verbatim. That makes sense to me, since there are plenty of songs out there where the title doesn't get mentioned in the song...
There is also an illustrious Song Fight! tradition of parsing the title incorrectly (on purpose).
Octothorpe's first entry was "Been to China," and it was about packaging a bean and sending it to China.
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The IRC All-Stars' song for the "Need Stilts" fight had a bridge that morphed it into "Needs Tilt."

Probably a bunch of other fun examples of this out there.
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I also wanted to do a song about stolen cheese.

My favourite diary rhyme so far is:
Let's start the inquiry
Into the diary burgliary
Needless to say this is not in my song.
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I was going to rhyme "stolen diary" with "incendiary". Probably not wise though.
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Lunkhead wrote:I was going to rhyme "stolen diary" with "incendiary". Probably not wise though.
No. That would be stupid. "Stolen diary" sounds nothing like "wise".
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MichaelJSamuels wrote:So I'm curious to hear peoples' interpretations of the prompt's requirements in general (not just this round). So far I've been playing it safe and explicitly including the assigned titles in the lyrics, but how much leeway is this here? If song centers, for example, around a metaphor that's obviously tied into the title, does that suffice? What are some criteria we can use to judge whether we're still, in the judges views, writing to the prompt?

Obviously there're no hard and fast answers, but I'm interested to hear how everyone's been interpreting things.
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Doh! Been working up Secret Diary in lyrics, not Stolen.

But it's an easy swap, and hey, that just ratchets up the narrative tension even more. :D

Now about those harmonies...
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Rabid Garfunkel wrote:Doh! Been working up Secret Diary in lyrics, not Stolen.

But it's an easy swap, and hey, that just ratchets up the narrative tension even more. :D

Now about those harmonies...
Emphasis on the "harm," eh? :P
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Heh, bonus points if you say it like Inigo Montoya in the rhyming game scene with Fezzik... :twisted:
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Looks like I may have in fact jinxed myself. Don't really have much time between now and Sunday night :-/ High chance of no show...
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Sent mine in. Ooh wop-wop shoobedoo-wah! Nur Ein!
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I had to scratch my project and start over because I don't know what harmonies are the tempo was all wrong.
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In. Music kickin', vocals not so much. Hoping for drop-outs in the extreme.

Okay, wow, that sounded nothing at all like English Beat's "Noise in this world"
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I'm out. I never really got an idea for a song, so I've been trying to force myself to make one anyone. It's been going poorly and I'm not going to be done in time, and I'm not having any fun, so I'm calling it quits. Have fun y'all.
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Oh yeah, and there was actually a power outage a half hour ago that set me back a couple hours, which seemed like a good sign that it was time to throw in the towel. :D
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Out.

Wrong week of my life to do this, and next week probably would have been, too.

Apologies to anyone eliminated last week who might have had a spot if I had anticipated this, but I guess that's the game.

Have a good fight, all - I'll try to write reviews.

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Yikes, unexpected x2! More Monkey's Paw than meets the eye...
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Dang!

Having not one, but two former finalists drop out in Round 2 certainly casts a pall over the round. It also made things somewhat easier for the remaining competitiors. There will be only two judge eliminations this round. I'm looking forward to hearing the songs!

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