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reviews done on second listen.

tmk - this song feels like it's all in the upper registers, for some reason. these vox are very nice. smooth. "body" doesn't fit rhythmically. nice, i like it a lot. the main problem would be my perceived lack of a bottom end.

paco - nice guitar stuff later on there (ebow?). the chorus is good. in general i like all the parts but i feel like there's something missing.

eidolon - hmm, too much sliding between notes for my tastes on the vox. not sure if i know the gist of these lyrics. pretty good tho.

flvxxvm - that was a fun guitar intro. this reminds me of something like little axe, maybe. dirty, effected blues. definitely ends too many lines with the word "now". the segue from solo back to verse guitar/bass sounded good!

jr - vocal needs more presence, like compression or some such. it's buried, like you're afraid to let us hear it. guitar change aroun 1:30 is fun. that vocal is definitely indistinct, had to look at the words to tell what the demon voice was saying.

ephedream - teach you to write lyrics without knowing what a word means :) i totally don't like the directness of the lyrics. "tools and implements"? yuk. music is good but i don't really want to listen to it.

swil - this is nice. the problem with instrumental tracks at sf, as you probably know, is that there's really no way to know if it was written for the fight. does this song say "convalescence"? dunno. nice downtempo tho.

wes - this song totally overuses the little guitar arpeggio. it's cute 'n all, but it comes in too often. the "ahh ahh ahh" section is nice, with the instrumental interplay 'n that.

booty - great. why "booty chesterfield"? i like the repeated guitar riff a lot. nice increase in energy there. the album is "dongfight", eh? subliminal messages?

caravanray - this is a lot of fun. woulda been good for jb's children song comp a while back since that was even for sick kids. the keyboard riff there is very catchy.

melvin - "are you still choking, or convalescing"? does that make sense? pretty nice sound. it doesn't seem much like new ground, though. still, toe tappin n all that.

damien - not sure about these sounds - it's like the speakers are popping. a bewildering array of interesting sounds, but in the end it doesn't stick with me.

steve durand - ouch! great horns as usual. i guess your character hasn't learned anything in this story. fun tho. enjoyable. vox are sometimes a little shaky.

blt - i think maybe we can hear too much of the room in the vox? not sure where "effervescence" comes into it. it feels pasted in just so something rhymes. the bass is good stuff there.

masterhyde - yesterday when i heard this i didn't like it much in the beginning, but i really enjoyed it by the end. nice rap, nice flow, good instrumentation. is this one of the artists that uses music somebody else made? i think not fading the last chorus would be a better choice.

disciples - what's going on? too much beer means that the instruments aren't together? too much breathing coming through in the vox recording. i can't get into this.

cranial - what's these odd piggy noises? they don't seem to fit. the vocals also don't have enough energy to match the music. Very monotonous. "They have no stars on hearts"? What? Stop saying that over and over, it's getting annoying. There's like 4 minutes of the same thing, yarg.

worms - This is nice, particularly the extended "ba ba ba" outro. It doesn't really leave a big impression, but I like it while I'm listening.

steve hand puppet - this reminds me of the talented max eider - have you heard him? the sound in this is a little thin. actually sounds like a demo rather than a produced song. i guess we're not really voting on production, but i'd really like to hear a full version of this. "best friends with the ceiling" is a great line. also i like your bandname.

spinlock - vocal cadences are way stilted and awkward. the chorus isn't as much but still.

zoosn - why are the vocals panned so hard to one side then the other? that's very distracting on headphones. you can pan them, but not this much. this is another one where the vocals have no energy compared to the music.

atonal - i played synth on this one, after wages asked for help on the board. i like it, although i'd prefer if the guitar in the verses wasn't quite that choppy. am working on re-mixing it. this was an enjoyable collab & am looking forward to future ones. the bassline really is nice too, blt.

jimt - nice sound! very evocative of the classic folk recordings in style. and in topic. this is good!

ross - not sure if i like the vocal tone, but i really like the guitar rhythm. you know, another person singing a little higher the same words in additon to yours might sound really good, a la simon & garfunkel or something. great organ! good song with a lot of potential.

mceric - emo rap! heh. the parts where you're singing (chorus) sound like you're trying to hard to sound a particular way. english patient reference is good. you know, i might suggest seeking a collaborator for the chorus parts - a different voice would do this well. the raps are pretty good tho some bits are awkward.

klownhole - heh the beginning made me think of the simpsons for some reason. good sludgy stuff. the vocals might be too clean. the end gets kinda silly, but that's probably not bad.

favorites: tmk, paco, swil (no vote), booty, caravan ray, melvin, masterhyde, steve hp, atonal, jimt

my vote - think i'm gonna vote for booty.
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HeuristicsInc wrote: blt - i think maybe we can hear too much of the room in the vox? not sure where "effervescence" comes into it. it feels pasted in just so something rhymes. the bass is good stuff there.
LOL, that's what you call making it work, my friend. I used effervescence to describe liveliness. If you read or listen to the metaphorical meaning of my chorus, you'll see I'm describing the end of old and the start of new (for lack of a better description). Glad you liked the bass, it was fun. Thanks Bill. :wink:
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I know, but what I was saying was I think it doesn't work; it's stretching too much. You're welcome anyway :)
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HeuristicsInc wrote: spinlock - vocal cadences are way stilted and awkward. the chorus isn't as much but still.
You're right. I'm quite ashamed of my singing here. Is it more the performance or the music that was the problem, d'you think? We've gone for a style that suits the singing better for "get a life" but I'd rather fix the singing than write songs around crap performance :S
Thanks for the review.
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Could be the performance, maybe, but I think it really starts with the lyrics, and being more mindful of the number of syllables you're trying to put in each line and the stresses on each word.

e.g. natural stresses:
He THREW the last LETter aWAY
(maybe)
but your stresses:
He threw THE last letTER aWAY
it comes out sounding odd, and stilted, because it's not really how people talk.

And:
It was finally ending to----day
seems that instead of a long pause, there should be another syllable in this line with the stress in the right place, like perhaps, "It was finally ending on this day" or something. Which is also somewhat stilted. Mind you, I've often done this myself, so I know where you're coming from.

The guitar strumming pattern might be throwing it off too, I'm not sure...
Hope that helps - you shouldn't be ashamed, it's not that bad, but I know what you mean! I've had some embarrassing vox here myself :)
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HeuristicsInc wrote:
booty - great. why "booty chesterfield"? i like the repeated guitar riff a lot. nice increase in energy there. the album is "dongfight", eh? subliminal messages?
Thanks for the kind words. Where does it say "dongfight"? This is news to me. Should I be worried about my drummer staring at my ass when we play live?
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booty wrote:
HeuristicsInc wrote:
booty - great. why "booty chesterfield"? i like the repeated guitar riff a lot. nice increase in energy there. the album is "dongfight", eh? subliminal messages?
Thanks for the kind words. Where does it say "dongfight"? This is news to me. Should I be worried about my drummer staring at my ass when we play live?
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You shouldn't gives directions to your past...
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Atonal Coil Bros: The breakdown at around 1.55 sounds okay, kinda nice in a jangly 80's way, the rest of this song is pretty bad, nothing seems to flow nicely and the guitar is an abomination.

Billy's Little Trip: funky guitar sound. The vocals are okay, you sound like a young King Arthur. I like technical drums and these are pretty basic but they sound pretty good and the fills are cool. all round solid 1993-sounding tune, nice one.

Booty Chesterfield Trio: who is this again? this is sleazy good. I fuckin love cowbell, and then when you start to sound like Pavement I start really getting in to it. The second section reminds me a lot of the ending to 'Fight this Generation', and its discordant drive is most pleasing, like a turbo sonofsupercar. Good outro

Caravan Ray: Just when you thought Caravan Ray couldn't get any gayer, here we have a perfect slice of twee tractor pop. This sounds like if you had collaborated with Damien Verrett, but also again it reminds me of the chirpier Pavement songs. possible keeper, really nice dude. Actually, no, I just thought, have you listened to the new Gruff Rhys album Candylion at all? That's what this is like, and I fucking love SFA (for whom Mr Rhys sings) so kudos-a-rama!

Cranial Biffida: I must admit that I think this is a really impressive piece of recording. I don't want to like the gothic overtones but here I find the crushing combination of a frankly disturbingly heavy band with all manner of horrific war and industrial samples, as well as the alien vocoder saying what I can only imagine to be something fucking dark, creates some incredibly vivid imagery. I think this is quite a coup as I've never been able to fully appreciate your songs before but this one is very compelling. On occasion the synthesizer tends to add a slight 80's horror vibe but the rest of the arrangement and structure are able to pull it back to a less comical direction. good work. that is intense.

Damien Verrett: Your song is a really nice antidote to the previous one, brings me back to reality. I am so pleased with how much better you are at recording and producing, and writing for that matter, since you started songfighting. I like lots of your songs but this has yet more fidelity and depth than I've heard from you so far. I'm hearing the influence of Islands and Sufjan Stevens in there; on occasion I'm ashamed to admit that sometimes I feel all the ideas fall over themselves to be heard, a couple of bars of one section the on to the next and it would have been nice to just settle into the groove for a moment. I'm sure I'll get over that after a few more listens, and I love the recorder. A splendid song.

The Disciples of Beer: I remember when we were 17 we'd dust off the bongos, plug into our 4-track and smoke a bowl, and it's almost like somebody stole the tapes and posted them on songfight. Only this sounds less like Zero7. Because of this I'm gonna assume that you made a night of this song and had a laugh and a funky jam, which is cool, I envy you cos I tend to do all my recording alone these days. However, there is a good reason those tapes we made never left my room.

Eidolon: For what this is the playing is all good and recording is loud and clear, so the song shines through well. It all seems pretty well written, can't find any holes in it, but at the same times I'm not feeling it. I guess it doesn't take the melody twists I hope it will, not like say Thanks For The Frisbee.

ephedream: Woah there, I didn't have both hands ready to rock and surely there is too much rock for one hand in this track. It's the embodiment of a throbbing sweaty cock, and a leering tongue breathing down my neck. I feel violated just listening to it. Less sexual healing, more like surprise sex!

Flvxxvm Florvm: I've heard some big hitters in this fight so far, and I can't say that this makes the grade. It has a bit of quality to be sure, you've got what it takes to melt more than enough faces in this room, and that bass is a bit of a monster. The song itself doesn't hold up too bad too, but if I heard anyone singing like that in this country I'd think they were taking the piss plus the guitar, which does sound ripping and dirty in parts, is horrible and bitty a lot of the time.

Jim Tyrrell: ...and now, it's time for the silky smooth tones of JT himself on 95.3MW so just sit back, relax and let this one guide you home.....................................oww, sax solo.....I'll let it slide :) . Afternoon delight.

Jolly Roger: See now, this here is an interesting specimen, it's like a zeitgeist of early 90's fuzzcore, and there's even some doom/sludge/grind thrown in for fun. I'm on the fence about the recording, it's a bit lo-fi, mainly with the vocals, but on the other hand that's just perfect and the main thing is that I like the verses and the choruses. The guitar parts do their job without being overly inspiring but it all bounces along in an exuberant grimey way, much like Ash back when they were good.

Klownhole: This style is a really good foil for post-rock/soundtrack bands. It's overblown and pompous but in a total contrast to the overbearing earnestness of post-rock you make a complete mockery of rock. In The NUTS!!! yay.

Masterhyde: If I heard this arrangement in any other style or song in this fight I'd be disappointed at the production but it works here. The main reason being that the vocals are solid as a rock, the flow's good, the tone sits nicely in the mix and it's not abrasive or weak at any point. They are pretty much able to carry the track on their own which definitely helps to make a song stick out.

MC Eric B: Hearing this makes me wish I'd not listened to the song in alphabetical order as the unfortunate placing of you right after Masterhyde really softens the impact of the track. Whatever I said about that track mainly applies here, except of course that the vocals sound very different. I think Masterhyde pips you there as he sounds less nerdy and gave a stronger delivery.

Melvin: I know what I want my headstone to say, erm, but I can't remember right now. Changin the subject, you know all those wannabe-emo bands like Fallout Boy and Panic at the Disco? well the reason they're rubbish is cos A) they sing like Elton John and B) their amps only go up to 3. You have the advantage of having an amp that goes up to 11, I'm not sure it goes all the way up this time but as those monkeys on your back Weezer always used to say "if it's too loud, turn it down", but not too far down and you've not got the balance wrong yet. The backing vocals are great where you do that desperate monologue, they make the track give it the flavour that makes this different from your other songs where the main melody and structure make it a cracking recording like your other songs. Your life is an epic novel. (ps. I've listened to your Big Success a lot, that chorus is great as is the whole song, with the original verse vocals btw, I can't wait till season comes back around so you can do another summer anthem.)

Paco Del Stinko: Holy McGodickle! I've never heard Paco jangle like this before, and being the predictable hack that I am I love it. This is the tune I've been waiting for from you, the melodic twists I mentioned in Eidolon's review are all present here where I found them a bit lacking in previous efforts. This is like a melange of all my favourite american indie bands; The clear jangle of American football, wobbly space guitar of The Flaming Lips, a rousing GBV chorus and lo-fi Pavement-y ramblings inbetween. Sweet as a nut. Kept, and maybe voted for? lets listen on...

Ross Durand: The opening acoustic strum reminded me of Thanks for the Frisbee and that first click /clap had me smiling broadly. This is a touch of class, tight and melodic with a really engaging structure. When it gets going it reminds me a lot of Cat Stevens. Your voice sounds a bit strange in places, maybe you're straining a bit or something but it goes a bit nasal when you stretch, it's a minor thing. The 'doos' are cool and when they first came in I thought they were kazoos which got me excited but the slow realisation was cool too.

Spinlock: A quick Ziggy Stardust steal perhaps? This is a pretty good recording but the soft rock drumming, though quite nicely done, is making this sound a bit like the 'Doctors' theme tune. you know? Neighbours has ended and that distinctive drum roll kicks in that just makes you wish there were more Quincy re-runs to go round. The chorus unfortunately does little to dispel the daytime telly vibe which is a shame cos this song felt like it had a lot of potential. I still think you do though (and when I say potential, I mean of course for it to go in the direction I wanted it to go, which is techy, pretty and a bit quirky) so I'm interested to hear what else you can write, especially cos your vocals are a refreshing change from all these hammy american accents, hehe.

Steve Durand: My first impression is that I like the vocal style you've opted for this week, maybe only because the lower range your occupying makes you sound more cabaret than sesame street. I like the persistent groove, and of course the brass as always is beyond reproach, but it's the lyrics that do it for me here. That's an acheivement as I'm not usually inclined to listen that hard to the lyrics let alone really enjoy them on first listen, but you've got a complementary blend of drama and comedy that I can't help but like.

Steve Hand Puppet and His Poorly Considered Solo Effort: Let's find out how poorly considered this effort is.....well, it's not GnG, or more to the point boring GnG, so points for that. Aaah, I see what you've done, you've lowered my expectations so I'm pleased when this isn't incredibly shoddy, clever. Well, I've seen through your ruse :wink: , and it's okay. This is average, certainly nothing to be ashamed of.

Swilington: I don't know why I was expecting this to sound like some kind of country rock band(!?!?), I must have confused you with...someone. Anyway, when I get ethereal pads and ambient breaks floating down the speakers it's considerably more welcome. I like how this has Ulrich Schnauss-like sounds and melodies but Aim style beats on it; I'll keep it but I wish it was longer, this could have been 7 minutes long and been awesome, especially as it starts to get layered in the last 30 seconds. More please.

Those Meddling Kids: I wrote this in my head without any instruments, that doesn't often happen. It took about 3 days start to finish and I like it, I wish I did more songs that were listenable like this one.

Wes Davis: This is one of my favourites of the fight, it's all good, but it's mainly the ideas that you've used in it than the how the song actually goes. You manage to play duff notes without making the guitar sound bad.

wormsweater: It'd be weird streaming all your songs in the archive, there's such a strange mix of tracks that are so different in quality and style, and then to hear this. How can someone who made this make all that other stuff, I think it's great, kind of adds value to your quality tunes. I wasn't expecting the jazzy undertones from you but it's cool, and the general tune and arrangment is, in places, absolutely beautiful. The widdling makes it sound a bit wanky but whenever one of those high-reverb sounds and really tight minimalist drum rolls happens it sends shivers down my spine. good ones.

Zoosneakers: Aah, the last song, it's good to be here, it feels like I've just seen Mallrats and the 90's indie chug is asking me politely to leave the theatre. This is like the pacemaker in a marathon, you're not taking part, you're just sending everybody on their way. job done. fade to black.

That was impressive, there are more good songs than okay and bad put together
I'm gonna decide who to vote for between Paco, Swilington, Booty and Damien. It is hard for me not to include Caravan Ray in that list as well as Wormsweater, Wes, Jim, Cranial Biffida, Ross and Steve, Mel. and Masterhyde and JR. That's an album worth listening to right there. I'd put TMK at number 6 8)
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Furrypedro wrote: Ross Durand: The opening acoustic strum reminded me of Thanks for the Frisbee ...
Funny. At one point as the song developed I had experimented witha double tracked vocal and wrote to my brother that I thought I had accidentally written a TFTF song.
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Furrypedro wrote: Caravan Ray: Just when you thought Caravan Ray couldn't get any gayer, ...
:? Well, considering this was written for, and recorded with my daughter...I sort of thought it is one of the less gay things I have ever done. It's just my attempt at being The Wiggles - and I won't stand for anyone saying there is anything gay about 4 men in coloured skivvies.
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Not in it, not trying to win it, but reviewing anyway. Kids are asleep, wife is babysitting for another couple, and I'm eating tortellini out of the pot. For your sanity and mine, each review gets no more words than there are entrants. Just keepin' it real -- real brief.

Zoosneakers
Strong backing track; the vocal was good for a kick-off, but I wish you'd started singing at some point. At least something blowed up good.

Damien Verrett
Loose timing, odd clicks and hums in the recording, arrangement is all over the map -- but whimsical and pleasant nonetheless. I like the banjo and recorder.

Billy's Little Trip
I'm not a fan of your singing accent ("yowoo" instead of "you", for instance) and there's no hook, but solidly done and good production values throughout.

Ross Durand (possible vote)
My first thought: Neil Young, in the lyric phrasing. Strong song, well crafted, begging for better vocal and heavy drums. Lyrics and phrasing my favorite parts.

MC Eric B
No more reviews for you until you're recording your own beats and/or singing.

Flvxxvm Florvm
Me likey distortion. Me likely drums recorded in tomb. Me hate distorted vocal treatment. Me looking for hook, not finding. Lead guitar way too loud.

Those Meddling Kids
Guitar noodling without a strong foundation; you need a rhythm section boost, stat. Enjoyable, if mellow, vocals and lyrics. Great background music, but needs more energy.

Paco Del Stinko (possible vote)
Bouncing between Pink Floyd and Too Much Joy; you switched each time I got settled, which kept me from loving it, but I still liked it.

Masterhyde
Reminds me of your entry last week. You continue to deliver solid stuff, but I think it's time for you to stretch; next week, push yourself.

Jolly Roger
The phrase "run of the mill" comes to mind. Solid, competent, but ultimately uninspiring garage band stuff.

ephedream
SO MUCH LOUDER THAN THE OTHER ENTRIES. Too much vocal gimmick, not enough hooky chorus; see White Zombie for guidance. Not bad, though, not bad.

Wes Davis (possible vote)
Lovely voice, solid guitar. However, there's an email from Avril Lavigne in your mailbox. Subject "Re: Why'd you have to go and make things so complicated?"

Swilington
This is well-crafted, lovely, too short, and certainly evokes the title for me. I won't vote for your instrumental, but I will praise it highly.

Jim Tyrrell
Work on your vocal accuracy (pitch) and I'll like your future submissions more. Nice arrangement. Makes me think a bit of Harry Chapin. Needs a hook.

Steve Hand Puppet Blah Blah Blah
Needs more voice; too far in the weeds. Decent arrangement, but a bit slow. Mostly forgettable. Forget tender vocals; next time, rock.

Klownhole (possible vote)
Brutal honesty in your opening -- followed by a terrific song! Strutting around owning your style, full commitment; it worked beautifully. Hooray! Hooray! I really enjoyed this.

Caravan Ray (possible vote)
Bit of a Masterhyde vibe. This is very sweet and charming; I wish I'd written it. La la la la la la la!

Booty Chesterfield Trio
Not funky enough to be truly funky; good start, but work the band harder. Too casual in the vocal for my taste. You need backup singers.

Eidolon
Melody mostly suceeds, but misses badly in parts ("wa-a-a-a-y", for instance); with a strong chorus, this might have been a contender. As is, a bit boring.

The Disciples of Beer
This sounds like a great song, that only exists in the form of a first draft improvised into a handheld recorder. Hints of genius in this.

Steve Durand (possible vote)
Backing bass like the Munster's theme, astounding and amazing brass, but vocal is awkward. Please collaborate with a vocalist who can sing like you can blow.

Atonal Coil Bros.
Tempo's too slow, vocal's too lazy and melody sounds improvised. Stunted chorus doesn't win me over. Still, I look forward to your next entry.

Wormsweater
Suddenly it's the 80s, and I'm stocking shelves in a drug store to this song. Solid musicianship, smokey vocals, needing only a hook and some energy.

Spinlock (possible vote)
Get a pop filter, watch your syllable emphasis, drum timing problems -- but your chorus hook, voice and lyrics win me over. Nice work on this one.

Melvin (possible vote)
Weezer after a long day. Wanted: faster tempo and energetic vocal. Oh, there it is, at 1:28. Should have started with this energy. Solid, nice work.

Cranial Biffida
Compelling opening. As with ephedream's entry, too much vocal, not enough hook. Kraftwerk's doing death metal now, apparently. I bet the kids these days'll love it.

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Not sure who's getting my vote this week; I need to sleep on it, I think. A lot of great entries, lots of keepers, but no tippy-top standout.
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MintyHandy wrote:Wes Davis (possible vote)
Lovely voice, solid guitar. However, there's an email from Avril Lavigne in your mailbox. Subject "Re: Why'd you have to go and make things so complicated?"
Oh my god, I didn't even catch that. Dang it! I will never look at that song the same way again.

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Caravan Ray wrote:
Furrypedro wrote: Caravan Ray: Just when you thought Caravan Ray couldn't get any gayer, ...
:? Well, considering this was written for, and recorded with my daughter...I sort of thought it is one of the less gay things I have ever done. It's just my attempt at being The Wiggles - and I won't stand for anyone saying there is anything gay about 4 men in coloured skivvies.
What if I meant gay in the original sense of the word? Sorry if I hit a nerve there. If it's any consolation I really like the song

MintyHandy wrote:Paco Del Stinko you switched each time I got settled, which kept me from loving it,

Right, carrying on from the conversation about repitition and stuff from earlier, I find that these kind of comments are a symptom of Songfight where we tend to listen to songs once or twice before reviewing (that's not a dig at you Minty, I do it too). This makes it really difficult to pick up on some of the more subtle and intricate elements in the songs and I for one think this is a real shame as it stifles some of the finer points of songwriting. In this particular example (which applies to Damien Verretts entry this week too) I have found throughout the reviews that some of us feel the songs suffer from having too many ideas; while I may agree that the catchiness may suffer because of this my feeling is that of all the factors in judging good songs catchiness is way way down the list. Some songs are boring and no amount of listening will cure that, whereas if a song is too busy (for your taste) then repeated listens will only serve to benefit your appreciation of it as the elements reveal themselves in greater depth with each repetition. I can hear people saying "I shouldn't have to make the effort", but why? why shouldn't you go back and listen to that section you liked again, after the work that has gone into the song, meet the author halfway, it's then that the other parts that may not have grabbed attention first start to seep into your consciousness. Whenever I've attempted to do this I have been rewarded 9 times out of 10; I think it's the difference between looking in a shop window and actually going through the front door.
I'd be interested to see what would happen to the voting if this fight were a month long, I predict that Paco and Damien would be more successful, whereas say, Ephedream would start to lose it's edge a bit. What's your opinion of the whole "rewards repeated listens" phenomenon? Any SF songs that you wish you'd voted for in retrospect? share your thoughts.
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Depends if you want an interesting song. Aphex twin is very interesting, but most of the time not something I want to listen to. Busted, on the other hand, didn't take long before I couldn't spot any new production effects or layers of complexity. But when I want some whiny needy immature melodic twaddle to sing along to, it still hits the spot.

And in retrospect I wish I'd voted for Melvin. It didn't get any better with repeated listenings, but I just kept wanting to hear it again.
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booty wrote:Where does it say "dongfight"?
Album name in the ID3 tags (MP3 file's informational tags, the player displays them). Could be a typo ("s" is right next to "d") or it could not :)
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HeuristicsInc wrote:
booty wrote:Where does it say "dongfight"?
Album name in the ID3 tags (MP3 file's informational tags, the player displays them). Could be a typo ("s" is right next to "d") or it could not :)
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I, for one, was hoping it was on purpose. I loved the fact that it was for dongfight.
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WesDavis wrote:
HeuristicsInc wrote:
booty wrote:Where does it say "dongfight"?
Album name in the ID3 tags (MP3 file's informational tags, the player displays them). Could be a typo ("s" is right next to "d") or it could not :)
-bill
I, for one, was hoping it was on purpose. I loved the fact that it was for dongfight.
You'll have to talk to the drummer. My bet is that it is purppose. Hell, then again, it kind of makes sense. We are the Chesty Booterfields.
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Thanks for the reviews and comments, people. Yes, that is my E-bow debut and the clean guitar is a Telecaster. No Rickenbacker in the arsenal, although maybe one day...

Pedro - Sometimes the thing in the shop window has to attract you enough to enter the shop or you'll walk on by, and sometimes you find a gem buried in the back of the dusty old antiques emporium. But I hear what yer saying.
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wormsweater wrote:
SDurand – She attacked you in a fit of pee!? Gross!
That's "Fit of pique"

Sorry for the pronunciation.



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Post by ephedream »

wormsweater wrote: F-a-Dream – You know what I say-a to you? Ephe-you, and you’re-a crappy songe!
Nice review, warmNsweaty. mehbe u should save those wordsmithing skillzors for lyrics instead of rephuse like that one above? I mighta screwed up the meaning of the title....but atleest I put pen2paper about somethign.....it's awful safe to doodle a pretty instrumental for songfight...

Not too bent 'bout it though...listening to yer tune, annit says alot...we won't be double-billing it anytime soon anywheres....couldn't really get much more opposite, huh? up yours too.

as for real reviews...thanks for them, every1! gr8 comments overall...
Mine are comign...just a little late though...prolly tommorw....
pump it up!
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