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anti-m wrote:

olethros wrote:Renedo [REMOVED - admin]

Wha happen to Rendeo? I notice he/she's gone from the stream too...

Probably had something to do with this: http://songfight.net/forums/viewtopic.php?t=1957

(i.e. 2 instrumental tracks submitted minutes after the titles appeared.)

Caravanray wrote:I would like to party at Gert Mansion though.

Gert would be most pleased to have Mr Ray at the Mansion. There is much to do there and many a stiff drink.

On the other note in the review, we all have that spotted teenager in a black t-shirt in us. Gert's sure even Mr. Ray does. Gert loves Caravan Ray.

Look at that greasy bastid!

Caravanray wrote:The music sounds a bit sterile - I'd rather hear this dirtier and distorted.

PiGPEN likes his music clean.

andrew resit
--- lack of proper mp3 tags ---
+++ cool guitar tone +++
--- link to title = bupkis ---
--- the rhythm guitar strumming is really simplistic ----

the bradshaw ability
+++ rock! (if a little quiet/muddy) +++
+++ a cool, rockin'. straight-forward tune that makes me bob my head and dance at my desk +++
/// ... but nothing makes me go "cool!" ///

christos dimitrakakis
--- the guitar-work is rather sloppy and tentative ---
--- the vox are listless ---
+++ the whole mouth-solo is pretty cool +++

@eclectic sp00ns
/// hehe ///
+++ i like the clarinet patch bouncing around like that +++

gert
/// man, i wish i had real drums to get a sound like that... ///
+++ possibly the best line of the fight: "I'm an idiot savant / I pull my own strings" +++
+++ the vox treatment/delivery/mix is fantastic +++

jeff robertson
--- this starts out so cheap, almost joke-like; i think mostly it's the sound of you slapping the acoustic; it sounds like plastic ---
+++ ... but then about 0:35 it starts really rockin' out ///
+++ the tone of the electric guitars is perfect for this song +++
+++ the build for the solo is pretty damn cool +++

johnny cashpoint
+++ the "oooohs" are awesome +++
+++ i love it when you snarl! +++
/// that lead guitar part could use a little more variation ///
+++ this might just be my favorite j$ song +++

lyricburgler
/// i think this goes to show that jeff robertson is a rather talented lyricist ///
+++ breakdown at 1:13 = very cool +++
+++ i love that this is a completely different song than jeff's and works just well, maybe better +++

noah mclaughlin
+++ d-lusion continues to give me an awesome sound +++
--- rapid-fire lyrics are not my usual thing; some of it's a little looser than i would really like ---
/// i screwed up the backing vox in the last chorus; did anybody notice? ///

PiGPEN
+++ the disco groove is pretty cool in a retro way +++
--- the lack of clear enunciation in the vox is, however, deplorable ---

Steve Durand
+++ the music and melody is so cheery that i hate liking this song; but it's no good, i really like it +++
+++ the "ooh-la-la-la"s are great +++
/// this should be the theme-song for some late-70's/early 80's sitcom, and you should be getting mad royalties for it ///

Here is my appology of sorts, I've learned my lesson.

nyjm wrote:+++ the tone of the electric guitars is perfect for this song +++

Those guitars are played through a 4-watt practice amp. From WAL-MART.

*** warning: sort of explicit lyrics ***

I’m a little pissed. And very dirty. And Valentines day is coming. When will women learn that it’s personality that turns on, not some strong perfume, or makeup. I hate red lipstick, too much perfume and tweezed eyebrows. But how to tell her that...oh wait, i just realized that dirtbags and greaseballs aren't attracted to personality, they like strong perfume, makeup and large breasts (even if fake). I guess i'm not in the norm, here. Well I still like the latter...it all begins to make sense.

Ah-so, anyway….

Your name comes from how it shows up in my playlist. If you want to be recognized, it’s best to include your band name somewhere in the MP3. I’m not going to dig through the fight lists.

Christos Dimitrakakis
I like some of the classical guitar work but the song itself sounds like a bunch of noodling and a desperate attempt to work in the title, completely misguided and lacking any form, to the point where by the end you sound like a dying cat, thrashing all over strings and a soundhole. Maybe that was your point. Maybe you feel like you are a dying cat, dying of a broken heart.

Ecclectic Spoons
Ok. Let’s write a freakin little kids goof song and then talk about “Crack in My Heartâ€

andrew reist - this sounds like it has a ton of potential to lead into a cool song. too bad you forgot to actually write the song after the intro. i was all prepared to get into it, too.

the bradshaw ability - i don't really like the way the vocal melody follows the guitar so closely, but it's not bad. the doubled vocal lines are giving me a young fresh fellows vibe somehow. i hate the drums though -- "chh bupbup-chh bupbupbup-chh bupbup-etc."

christos dimitrakakis - very quiet. very moonlight sonataesque. very quiet.

@eclectic spoons - complete and utter shit. i can say nothing positive at all about this. and was it necessary to do all three songs?

gert - (hadn't gotten a chance to hear this before just now, due to a cd encoding malfunction.) this is really well-written, and most of the performance is great (i like the drums especially, and the guitar solo is mostly not bad exept when it gets all cheesy at the end). the keyboard part lends an unfortunate wuss factor to this, giving it basically a cheese-metal vibe. it's not just the keyboard, mostly i feel like the potential is there but your hearts (no pun) just aren't fully into it, and that kind of cheapens the effect.

jeff robertson - i'm not impressed by the singing here, but i like the writing here and most of the music. the long drawn-out wah chords during the guitar solo is probably the best part of the song (the guitar solo itself is neat too); during the singing the guitar riff is a bit too staccato i think.

johnny cashpoint - awesome. like a blend of horror punk with... something else. it turns out great though. i pretty much liked everything about this song. the phrase "a box-shaped heart" sounds really creative. it might not be, i'm trying not to read too deeply into it, but it sounds smart and that's all that matters, no?

lyricburglar - boy this song is pretty drum-intensive, and gets increasingly so closer to the end. if i get the concept correctly, this is thrown together at the last minute from stolen lyrics? pretty much it sounds like that, although it is fairly decent, considering.

noah mclaughlin - first of all, i'm sorry, but i've really got a bias against imitation bass. and it's pretty prominent here, the bass and drums slightly overpower the rest of the song. and it's too bad because i did enjoy the guitarring and singing.

PiGPEN - somehow i've got the feeling, if doctor john had made a sequel to his 'gris gris' album, but in a disco style, this song would have been on it. i'll leave it to your preference to decide whether this is a compliment or not, but i'd sure as hell have bought that record.

steve durand - this song is cute and well-performed and everything, but every time i hear it i can't get beyond the fact that the melody is totally nicked from that song from the care bears movie -- the one where the care bears and the kids meet the animals in the forest of feelings.

tviyh wrote:johnny cashpoint - the phrase "a box-shaped heart" sounds really creative. it might not be, i'm trying not to read too deeply into it, but it sounds smart and that's all that matters, no?

Absolutely. I must admit it's just a pun on 'Heart-shaped box' by Nirvana. But I liked the way it sounded so I left it in. Maybe my subconscious is really smart Thanks.

tviyh wrote: steve durand - this song is cute and well-performed and everything, but every time i hear it i can't get beyond the fact that the melody is totally nicked from that song from the care bears movie -- the one where the care bears and the kids meet the animals in the forest of feelings.

Having never been exposed to said movie, I can assure you that I didn't "nick" anything.

Steve

Crack In My Heart
instrumental clippingness. Clipping should equal redo. As an instrumental, doesn't really do anything for me in terms of the title...but that shouldn't be a surprise... It's a nice exercise in making sounds and using reverb.

The Bradshaw Ability
Hmm...not a bad song. Terrible production. At least I could hear your voice pretty well. Guitar playing was not bad. There are some timing issues here and there. The drum sounds are awful. I'd like you to spend some time learning how compression and eq works, because with a better handle on those things, this would rock.

Christos Dimitrakakis
Lovely guitar meanderings. Not always sold on the vocal with it. It feels like a tune that hasn't really come into its own yet. Perhaps thats intentional. There are some really beautiful guitar moments. You might consider working on finding a space for your voice in the mix...its muddy at times. The voitar thing...hmm. I think if all of the performances were more stable and decided, this would be an interesting piece of music. It all sounds kind of tentative.

@eclectic Spoons
There is something disturbingly awesome about this. Not much more to say.

Gert Thanks for the comments folks.

Jeff Robertson
My first listen to this was positive. Subsequent listenings have not been so much. I call this square blues. Some very cool guitar tones in there. Doesn't do much for me otherwise. The magic of this piece was all in the timing...which I'm sure we agree could use a bit of work. Still, made me smile.

J$
This might be my favourite J$ tune of all time. Great sounding drum loops. In fact the production is all farily good. Like the sound of your voice. The song needs more variation, imo. Ok, not my favourite, but definitely the best sounding J$ tune I've heard.

LyricBurgler
Hah...cute. Is this supposed to be cool? It's like a big steaming pile of muffled-ness. What good is stealing lyrics when you don't make them the focal point of the song you put 'em in? I figure you ought to be making awesome alternative versions of stuff you grab from the lyric thread, thereby incenting other SF'rs to drop their lyrics there early in the hopes of having the same happen to them......non? Anyhow, not good enough for me to put mine there early.

Noah McLaughlin
No sizzle in this mix. No punch. Vocals need compression or mic technique. Pretty vanilla all 'round. Nothing bad here, just nothing really interesting. The bass sound is actually not bad, and the performance is pretty good too. Is that french I'm hearing? If so, bonus points for you.

Pigpen
Unsurprisingly retarded.

Steve Durand
Great chord movement! Love the trumpet. This bops nicely. The mix needs some work, but the song shines through nonetheless. Sizzle on the top end, some punch in the lower register and the vocals, if worked on in terms of production, would really shine. Nice tune though. I always enjoy a Durand tune, this one is no different. I think its the horns. Love the horns.

TheHipCola wrote:Crack In My Heart
instrumental clippingness. Clipping should equal redo. As an instrumental, doesn't really do anything for me in terms of the title...but that shouldn't be a surprise... It's a nice exercise in making sounds and using reverb.

I'm not sure what clippingness means but I guess that's something people notice when they're good at this stuff ... if you mean productionwise clipping, then that's probably the problem with me never having recorded a real song before ... if you mean playingwise, it's because I suck at guitar. My next song has lyrics so that kind of takes the pressure off my guitar playing, but I'm not a stellar singer, so who know's what reviews it'll get.

Clipping is when something is to loud in volume and the track distorts digitally. Turning down the offending instrument can usually fix it, or some judicious eq and/or compression. It could also be an effect you're using with levels set to high. An admirable first real try then, for sure.

favorites from this fight: gert, burglar, j$
interesting, but no vote: noah, andrew, steven
jerks who consistently submit to multiple fights despite being asked not to: spoons

ok, my quickvote goes to j$. great guitar line & this feels like a new vocal style for you. good work.
gert came in 2nd.
-bill

Gert was particularly proud of Crack In My Heart, its newest child. Thank you for your votes, and the win.

Congrats Gert. I voted for you and was glad that you won.
I'm also really surprised that I got third place. Thanks to anyone who was crazy enough to vote for me

jolly roger wrote:I'm also really surprised that I got third place.

More surprising as you came fourth.

j$ wrote:

jolly roger wrote:I'm also really surprised that I got third place.

More surprising as you came fourth.

It's true. I wrote this message in about 10 seconds at school at lunch so I didn't have time to check ... sorry for the confusion ... not like it really mattered but whatever ... when's the new fight starting?

If voting is over, then why can I still see the voting page for last week's songs?
weird.

olethros wrote:If voting is over, then why can I still see the voting page for last week's songs?

it seems like no matter how may payraises the board approves for them, the fightmasters STILL insist on having "dayjobs" and "lives outside of this website". shameful, i know.

tviyh wrote: it seems like no matter how may payraises the board approves for them, the fightmasters STILL insist on having "dayjobs" and "lives outside of this website". shameful, i know.

haha... also 0 votes? hm... must endeavour to do a bit better next time