She Already Knows that you dig her song. Right?

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LML wrote:There is a bassline buried in there somewhere.
Oops. Sorry, I generally listen on little computer speakers, so that didn't help. Be glad to throw one your way, though, if you ever need/want one. :)
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Paco Del Stinko wrote: Billy's Little Trip - File under: About Frickin' Time! There's my rubber bass tone I love so much, against my better desires. I enjoy the menace here, despite no strong hooky-hooks. I was guessing LML before I even heard the song, am I right? Anyway, the song rocks enough to be a moody piece under some of your video experiments or in the scene while some crazy drives over to kill his obsession. Glad it's not me! Good warm up, now clobber it.
Thanks, it's good to be making music again! And I see this as being a fun video project too. In fact, I visualized it and made the music like I was scoring a movie. One of these days you're going to have to teach me how to pull away and how to incorporate a hook in songs like this. And no, LML didn't write this. A girl named ImpOnFire did, lol. She's not a member here.
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Only got a few minutes to review, so just cherry picking a few that I liked.

wages
The guitar intro on this was awesome, the flanger and progression work really well. I love the vocals. I might have left out the lead guitar line, it's a little distracting, seems like it's not really in key.. The big vocals and the finish at the end is just great. There's a lot of win in this, so vote.

LML
I think this could have benefited from a thicker distortion. I like the vocal line, and the lyrics. I'm listening on a laptop, so if there's bass in this, it's pretty thin. Update: I plugged my headphones in, and don't hear bass at all. I've found that even doing a simple bass line on the low E string on the guitar really helps add depth, I used this method on my "Fuck That" track, as my bass was elsewhere.

Walt Cronin
What's your recording process? Was this one mic, one guitar, and two guys done in one take? I really like the song, but the mix is all on the right. Ask around here, anyone should be able to help you sort out your recording system. Also, your guitar sounds a little out of tune? Were you capoed? Sometimes I have to retune to the capo depending on the guitar.

ChristopherCogott
I like the 60s/70s sort of feel of this. It's very lively. The vocal harmonies are incredible, very well done. Sounds like there's a little Weird Al in there? Solo smokes. Drums smoke. Awesome production. Great work!

MENBAH
I'm starting to run out of commentary, so much stuff in this fight is awesome. This track is great! I think it might have been a little cleaner with a less aggressive solo guitar tone. That delay effect seemed out of place with the rest of the track. Maybe reduce the delay and tone the distortion down to a fuzz? I love how the instrumentation and vocal harmonies build. Vote.

efemjay
This is awesome, sweet old-school rhyme. I love the lyrics, haha. Fantastic. Lots of people hate on the songfight rap, but this is really well done. I would totally buy this album. Vote.

Johnny Cashpoint
If the Clash and Culture Club had a melee in the studio, this is what might come out. The mix seems thin, lots of highs and mids, not a lot of low end definition, but it somehow seems appropriate for the content. Well played, sir, or ma'am as the case may be.

Paco
I really like the bass sound on this. Stylistically, this is a little eclectic for my taste, but the instrumentation and production is top notch, as always.

[Signboy ft. Realist]
Great collab. Epic sax. Love the bassline. Thought it was gonna be a reggae thing at first, but it turns into a jazz odyssey from the future. What does it sound like with a big delay/echo on the vocal? I thnk it would contribute to the overall etherealness of the track. I'd like to hear that. Vote.

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Jesus, there's some good songs in here. Maybe because it's Thanksgiving. Maybe it's because I'm listening with my "good" studio headphones and not the earbuds I usually use for casual internet listening.

Barely Adequate - good lyrics

BLT - Nice riffage. Some of the guitars sound like they are run through a wah-wah but not rocking it back and forth just using it as a filter; I always like the way that makes the guitars "taste". I also assumed, after all your pre-fight comments about some crazy chick writing your song, that it must be somebody on here. Maybe your friend *should* submit songs under her own name. Are these drums EZdrummer or Jamstix? I need to buy one of those, I do.

Christoper Cogott - This rocks and pops in just the right way, makes me wish I'd had more girlfriends in high school so I could have made out with them listening to this.

LML - The guitar has me going "I am still livin' with your ghost / lonely and dreamin' of the west coast". The singing is pretty good. I'd like to hear background vocals, especially on the chorus. Somewhere you said something about having a Texas accent in real life.. I don't think I can tell from your singing voice. I wouldn't mind if you let it shine through but it's fine either way.
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jeff robertson wrote: BLT - Nice riffage. Some of the guitars sound like they are run through a wah-wah but not rocking it back and forth just using it as a filter; I always like the way that makes the guitars "taste". I also assumed, after all your pre-fight comments about some crazy chick writing your song, that it must be somebody on here. Maybe your friend *should* submit songs under her own name. Are these drums EZdrummer or Jamstix? I need to buy one of those, I do.
Yeah, I like playing with that guitar tone too every once in a while, and yes, that is exactly what I did. I remember the first time it really caught my ear years ago was in a Corrosion of Conformity song "clean my wounds". And ImpOnFire just writes. I couldn't even get her to do back up vocals, but did get her to do the spoken part in the bridge. Maybe that will loosen her up a little. I think she has an adorable voice, but she thinks she sounds like a member of the lollipop guild, lol. Thanks, Jeff. :wink:
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I would like to apologise for not getting reviews done for this fight. It will happen but not before the voting deadline. Don't worry, the songs I vote for never win anyway :)

For the record, on my song it's a ukulele played through a 'Kurt Cobain' filter, not an electric guitar, which explains the high-end/oh my god my ears comments. I turned on the effect at the last minute when i realised a) that the verse chords were unconsciously quite close to 'In Bloom' and b) that being 'In Bloom' suited the lyrical idea of the song very well.

Me and my wacky ideas.

Oh and also, the drums are sampled from several Slits songs, the Slits when Palmolive played with them, when they were the mightiest band of all time, ever. Again it seemed appropriate for a feminist punk song.

So yes, reviews will come but you must wait.
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My Texan accent is very light so if I were to try and put it into my singing it would have to be a song with a country swing, and since I never listen to country or know any popular riffs from country, it would be damn hard to do. Down here people tell me I have no accent but I know better. However like I said, it's fairly light because I was raised by television.

On another note, I don't know the lyrics to Teenage Dirtbag, so the lyrics weren't influenced by that song at all. Pure coincidence I have to say, though I have heard the song once or twice in movies and I liked the riff too. I'm sad that you guys think that it sounds like a shit poor sister to those songs, but I tried, and if that isn't enough then I'm not going to destroy myself over it.

It seems people prefer I sing to demo songs on yamaha keyboards than me singing to guitar. Lol. Guess I need to learn how to program electronica music.

Also, I actually do have a bass line. But once again it sucks ASS so I buried it. Completely. I now realize it wasn't even loud enough to hear in the master version of the song. You've been spared. Believe me.
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Happy thanksgiving everybody -

Don't Tell Betsy - Simple and smiley. "future.. she's already there" is nice. Interleaving guitar lines are simple but they work together well. I wish the bridge didn't start with the same two chords as the verses, it wanted much more of a contrast. And by the time we get to the last verse, it's too many times to hear that simple melody, even with the extra licks thrown in.

Paco del Stinko - Yep, sounds like you! I like these lyrics.

noah mclaughlin - Nice timbre. When you get to the 3/4 time and were hitting on quarters, I reallyreallyreally wanted to hear 8th note pickup hits in the drums and things, like, 1 2 &3& 1 2 &3& ... some of the time changes work and some don't. But I think the song structure is a good experiment. Now as for the lyrics - love em.

Gooey Caramel Centaur - " .. show up with the rose" is a nice moment. I like the quickness of the verse delivery. Something about the chorus drops a little energy compared to the verse? The bridge lyrics don't do much for me. Not really enough is all going on here.

efemjay - The chorus is a hook! Story's kinda grainy.

Josho - Small size.

Thornberry - Another simple smiley one. I like the synth washes in the background. Think it's a download, because of the overall sound.

Signboy feat. Realist - Like the band and the groove. Vocals are smooth. Nice performance and nice instrumental stuff.

Wages - Did you just make the words "styling gel" sound grungy? Huh. Ok, this turned out seeming longer than it is.

Christopher Cogott - Great groove, I dig this kind of thing. Your lines with the psychic ability are making me laugh, and the chorus is double groovy. "Nostradamus" yeah. Download, vote. Love the way this is about already knowing without trying to be clever about it - you win. The percolating synth is just icing.

Barely Adequate - I'm going to download this too. The funky-spooky-spare arrangement is great. I'm going to do a tuba thing sometime too because of this.

Panna Cotta Army - What's with all the smiley grooves this fight? The organ lines are the highlight in this track. Download.

Flvxxvm Fkorvm - I like this kind of thing. Mythic and drony and all those open strings.

MENBAH! - Sounds like the most elaborate of the fight on first listen. Certainly, the most elaborate vocal phrasing built into it. Nice job with that. Lyrics work well too.

Walt Cronin - By verse 2 I'm predicting that no melody variation is ever coming, or anything much else to change it up. Yep. At 1:39 I'm looking for the exit, with 1:00 to go. Music shouldn't be this repetitive.

deetak - Commanded my attention.

DuToVa - the groove is a little heavy, plodding, not really grooving. The chords are thick and I'm not sure that's the best. 4:14 seems too long. There's stuff to like in the soundscape. I don't think this one is going to stand up as well to repeated listens as your other stuff I've liked, so no download.

Billy's Little Trip - Hey! How's it hanging? Around 1:00 I was waiting to see what you'd step the level up to, and what you did at 1:05 or whatever I really liked. Cool that you go on without letting it back down. I think the vocals are a big part of making it happen. Download. Yeah, cool middle too. In a way though, I'm sorry when I see them pull out the gun - did I really need to know the plot literally? Not sure.

LML - Good beats. The way you're using your voice sounds good. The teen-girl lyrics aren't my thing. Melodies repeat too much on the way to the end.

Weakest Suit - Ha! Great snarky vocal layers and great snarky delivery and great with the ring on the finger and THAT gets really groovy. Download for sure. Vote I think as well. I like the phrasing of your verses and the way the verse and chorus just go ahead and say the same damn thing. Yeah!

Johnny Cashpoint - Oh, man. I know a gigging teenager who wants to be a boy. She's serious - at first thought she was gay but figured it otherwise at 15 or so. She's actually being allowed to live as a boy in school and stuff. I should be saying "he", but it's really hard. She's so tiny! It's like, shake her by the shoulders, "You cannot be a man! You can only be the littlest, littlest boy!" Tough life. The songs aren't (far as I can tell) all about that. They're pretty decent actually. The kid LOVES to gig.

Kasper - You're out-rocked in this fight.

Votes for the two smiliest grooviest straight-up-est I said she already knows dammit songs.
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Thank you all for your feedback.
To:
efemjay
nym
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paco del stinko
mike lamb
elaine di masi
Thank you! You were especially helpful in that you took the time to give real constructive critisizms along with something postive to say.
There were others on the "welcome home frank" that did the same. Some people come across as a bit mean-spirited while others are just excellent with their critiques.I will get an electric tuner, get my stereo working and perhaps return one day..
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Random notes I typed up this week while listening.

Barely Adequate - Some great lyrics. Percussion is a little too busy in places. This is a great example of a song that doesn't progress a story, but doesn't need to either; the great lyrics and perfect delivery is enough to entertain for 2+ minutes.

Billy's Little Trip - Great atmosphere in the intro with the percussion and bassline. I'd like to hear a little more separation between the two vocals in the "don't break her heart" bit, maybe with EQ or effects. Vocal track in general feels a little over reverb-y, or maybe just the wrong setting? I love the delivery on the "weren't fuckin true!" line. After all that buildup, I'm left wanting more to happen in the end, but it just sort of ends. Not sure what I'd suggest as an alternate ending.

Christopher Cogott - This is excellent! I love the "personal modern-day Nostradamus" line. Excellent harmonies. The little touches like the cowbell and handclapps could be a little louder, I think. I love the way the percussion builds through the song. Fake drums? If so: people, this is how to do fake drums! My only knock would be that the acoustic guitar sounds very thin and direct-y. I love the guitar solo.

Deetak - A little abstract for my taste. Your vocal delivery meshes well with the content. I don't have anything else to add that hasn't already been addressed.

donttellbetsy - This has a nice live feel to it. Lyrically not much grabbing my attention. Seems a little overlong. I really like intertwined guitar bits. Some backing vocals would really help fill this out. In my head the "figured out/figured out/figured out", "find love/find love/find love" bit is two overlapping voices panned apart in the stereo field. Could have ended with the breakdown at 3:00 and not lost anything.

DuToVa - Nice, driving sound. I like the building atmosphere in the intro. I might trim some (all?) of the beginning of the first verse, 40 seconds is a little long to wait for the vocals to kick in. Bring up the sweepy noise in the prechourus in the mix. Chorus is lacking in hook, and feels like it's about twice as long as it should be. Some fantastic background synthy noises swirling around in the background. The final chorus does ramp up a little, that's a nice change. This is a good song, but it would be even better tightened up to about 3 minutes.

efemjay - Intro could be half the length without losing anything. Some nice rhymes and excellent flow. Yeah, this is foot-tapping. I feel like I want a little more of a transition ramp up from the verse to the chorus, at least in the first verse. I like the breakdown at the end. I think it would be a little more effective if the "shoulda kept it in my pants. Or at least took my cellphone _out_ of my pants" bit came at the end. I like the contrast of that line vs. the "I truly have remorse!" one. Yeah I like this one a lot. Nice Clarissa Explains it All reference.

Flvxxvm Florvm - I like the lyric, and it's supported well by the instrumentation. I particularly like the drone-y bits underneath.

Gooey Caramel Centaur - Guitar and drums sound a little distant. There's a looseness here that undermines the force of the lyric. It feels like the drums are following, instead of leading, if that makes sense. I really like the idea of the overlapping voices on "she already knows", but try treating them with EQ/effects to separate them more from the lead vocal.

Johnny Cashpoint - Bonus points for the unique take on the title. Some great lyrics in here. Vocals are often lost in the mix and hard to make out in places.

josho - Mildly amusing, but wears out its welcome long before the end. Besides, wouldn't have making the song shorter only serve to reinforce the joke?

lml - I like the intro, just jump right in. I think it would help break up the monotony of the drums a lot if they dropped out before the start of each verse, like they come in in the intro. Great story here, and the guitar and vocal delivery really serve it well.

membah - I like the line "no word from his ass at all", but you need to sell it more in the delivery. Mix-wise, the bass is a little too dominant. The acoustic guitar is buried, why? The "la la la"s are a nice touch. This does a decent job of progressing the story, but it's like a movie with no plot twist.

noah mclaughlin - I love your voice in this, reminds me (in a good way) of Jim Ellison. The transition to 3/4 is little awkward, but I like the contrast of the parts. There's a low bass bit that's too low for my headphones. The "anaphora" line is a little too meta for my taste.

Paco del Stinko - Paco del Rocko! Can't say I'd change a thing on the production side. Lyrics aren't quite grabbing me.

panna cotta army - Great drum sound! This is a great mix. There are a lot of parts here, and they manage to stay out of each others' way. Good stuff.

Marianna Cervantes - Man that is a tasty bassline. I also love the sax weaving in and out, without taking over the track. Vocals could be a little more present. I like the change to "she doesn't know". Also an excellent
example of how to do fake drums right!

thornberry - Runner-up for tasty bass. Production is top-notch. Something about the progression and/or rhythm is very I've-heard-this-before-somewhere. The "with you in the end/need to transcend" line makes me cringe, which is not good since it happens twice. I like the backwards change, and the swirly synthy breakdown. Goes on a little too long in the outro, I was waiting for it to kick back up again, and was disappointed when it didn't.

Wages - Intro feels very cliche- mid 90s alt-rock. That's probably a problem on my end, but it's an immediate turn-off. I like the ramp up in the chorus section, I think I can hear how this sounded in your head, and I'd like to hear a fleshed-out version with drums and distorted guitar. I keep hearing it as "the game's still a foot", you should play with that more. You know, "The game's still afoot, but she won't give an inch" that kind of thing.

Name - %T - Are my headphones broken, or is the right channel blinking in and out? Lyrically, this doesn't go anywhere, and the music is not strong enough to sustain interest for the rest of the track. After the first 40 seconds, I feel like I've heard all I'm going to hear. I'd like to hear this fleshed out with more of a story in the verses. How did she learn these lessons? What happened to her?

The Weakest Suit - Catchy and driving. The "ring upon finger" bit repeats a little too often, but maybe that's part of the joke? I like the change-up at 2 minutes in. Ugh, the machine-gun snare fills at 2:10 and 2:20. Too long at nearly three-and-a-half minutes. Could be at least a minute shorter without losing anything.
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nyjm wrote: efemjay
/// genre bias: not generally being a fan of rap, you have to do something exceptional to grab me ///
+++ props for the social justice topic +++
--- sonically repetitive: move that outro break down up and develop it more ---
Thank you for the genre-bias disclaimer. Part of that goes into the "sonically repetitive" criticism, too, because hip-hop (at least the kind I do) isn't going to have drastic changes within the body of each verse. But your criticism is appreciated and valid nonetheless, because there is more I could have done... I could have varied the drums more, changed the bassline a bit here or there, etc. If the song was longer, I'd leave the outro where it is as a bridge to the third verse. Thanks again for the honest review.
signboy wrote: Efemjay
the beatz need to be lower, and a touch lowpass filtered. They get in the way of the vocals. I'm not really a fan of the old-school rhyme scheme, but you pull it off well.
It's funny you say this because I was worried about the vocals being mixed too loud. Thanks again for the disclaimer; it's gratifying to know someone can appreciate my song even if they don't like the style.
oddbod wrote: efemjay - I'm strangely attracted to the weird organ which gives this track it's character. Otherwise I find there's not too much that takes this out of the generic/run of the mill. But it's tight and well put together and the rhymes are fun - Orientation/Laurie&Jason is my particular favourite.
I'm glad you liked the organ and even gladder you picked out a favorite rhyme. The track is sort of blandish, I guess; laid back. Some people like that, others find it "generic" like you did.
MENBAH! wrote: efemjay: Can’t think of anything that put me off at all. Vote.
Glad you liked it!
bdog5778 wrote: efemjay

Nice production. Nice lyrical cadences. LOVE the keyboard. Don't care for the "uh-huh"s. The bike horn is excellent. The gronky outro is sweet, too. Not a fan of this style, but you've done here, you've done well.
This was a very satisfying review! You said what you liked and what you didn't, and seemed to enjoy the song even though you're not a fan of the style. I couldn't ask for more.
Paco Del Stinko wrote: efemjay - I have like, two rap CDs in my collection, minus Beastie Boys (of course) but this reminds me of Digital Underground Sex Packets which I love. The goof move of the guy leaving his phone on is so delightfully embarrasing. Nice beat and loops, open and airy, a nice hint of mystery. I enjoy your delivery and the skippity-bippity ending sounds like something I'd do. Not that that makes it good!
I have loads of respect for you as a musician, so for you to like the track (and to say why) means a lot. Though I wasn't going for a Sex Packets-like sound here, I can definitely see what you mean, in terms of the tones used.
Mike Lamb wrote: efemjay
This is awesome, sweet old-school rhyme. I love the lyrics, haha. Fantastic. Lots of people hate on the songfight rap, but this is really well done. I would totally buy this album. Vote.
Wow, that was a head-swelling review. Thank you.
ElaineDiMasi wrote: efemjay - The chorus is a hook! Story's kinda grainy.
I don't really get what you're saying here, but thanks for listening.
irwin wrote: efemjay - Intro could be half the length without losing anything. Some nice rhymes and excellent flow. Yeah, this is foot-tapping. I feel like I want a little more of a transition ramp up from the verse to the chorus, at least in the first verse. I like the breakdown at the end. I think it would be a little more effective if the "shoulda kept it in my pants. Or at least took my cellphone _out_ of my pants" bit came at the end. I like the contrast of that line vs. the "I truly have remorse!" one. Yeah I like this one a lot. Nice Clarissa Explains it All reference.
Another very gratifying and helpful review. Glad you liked it; even gladder you offered ideas for improvement and some different takes on how things could be arranged more effectively.

THANK YOU to everyone who reviewed or even listened to my song. I am already a SongFight junky now, and I'm tweaking waiting for them to post the next song title!!!
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ElaineDiMasi wrote: Billy's Little Trip - Hey! How's it hanging? Around 1:00 I was waiting to see what you'd step the level up to, and what you did at 1:05 or whatever I really liked. Cool that you go on without letting it back down. I think the vocals are a big part of making it happen. Download. Yeah, cool middle too. In a way though, I'm sorry when I see them pull out the gun - did I really need to know the plot literally? Not sure.
Hey there to you too, gorgeous lady. And it's hangin' just fine, thank you, lol.
And a good point on the gun. It was pretty well implied and probably would have been better left for the listener to imagine. Truth is, I don't think I really drove the final punchline home like the story reads, I need to work on things like that. Thanks for the review, Lainey Loo. :wink:
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irwin wrote:Billy's Little Trip - Great atmosphere in the intro with the percussion and bassline. I'd like to hear a little more separation between the two vocals in the "don't break her heart" bit, maybe with EQ or effects. Vocal track in general feels a little over reverb-y, or maybe just the wrong setting? I love the delivery on the "weren't fuckin true!" line. After all that buildup, I'm left wanting more to happen in the end, but it just sort of ends. Not sure what I'd suggest as an alternate ending.
Yeah, I generally pan the double vocals out, but this time I ran them both up the center because I had the other vocals panned out. Ah, just trying something different, you know, throw it at the wall to see what sticks? I guess that didn't stick, lol. The reverbiness was intentional for the mood. But I may have over did it. As far as the ending, it would have been better with something bigger with more bang at the end I think too. Thanks for the review.
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Re: She Already Knows that you dig her song. Right?

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Ugh. Too many songs. I swore to myself that I'd finish, though...

MENBAH!

This is a real mongrel of a song. Piano, fretless bass, psychedelic guitar solo, whimsical storytelling. I like it. I wish the background vox were a little louder. It seems like the fretless bass doesn't quite come in on the beat...or something. My brain may be out of sync at this point, though (it's 3 a.m....don't say "and I must be lonely" or I'll kick you in the gizzard). Solid entry.


Noah McLaughlin

More mongrel-ness: Lo-fi Irish drinking song fronted by Neil Diamond. Eminently likeable. Not my thing, mind you, but I could drink to it. This fight seems to have a lot of songs with sing-along harmonies. Sweetness.


Paco del Stinko

Up with the vocals (ever so slightly) and down with the snare. The second-best production on this fight....nice. Crazy tune. All jazzed up and caffeinated with eleventy-billion parts. It's like an "As Seen on TV" product: "But wait, there's more!" Maximalist.


Panna Cotta Army

The best production on this fight. More mutt-dom with '60s pop organ and country harmonica. You guys are nuts. Doesn't move me. LOVE the tone on the snare...probably because it's the one I always go for: equal parts "thwack" on top and chain sound on bottom.


Signboy

Attention people of Earth: You will never be funky enough for Signboy! NEVER!!!

Haha. That bass is "off the hook" as the kids say (or do they? I'm getting old). I was going to say that the singer needs to be less tentative, but I think that she just needs to be up more in the mix. Technically excellent -just doesn't get my heart going pitter-pat.


Thornberry

Love that opening groove! Love it! Bridge = weak in comparison. I definitely enjoy the ethereal chorus. Different direction than I might have expected. Again, vox need to be louder in the mix or more processed or something. The background vox on the chorus need to be more intelligible. Whatever is happening at 1:20 is wicked cool. At around 2:30, the drums need to pick up to give the song energy again. They're still following the ethereal chorus, but they totally need to get going. Otherwise, it's just kind of a minute and thirty seconds of slow fizzle decompression. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy all of the melodies -the drums just need to be propelling things along here.


Wages

Is there any panning going on here? Sounds like everything is stacked on top of each other in the mix. I like the flanged acoustic, but it seems to be causing the mix to pump and/or its ducking your voice. Are you referencing Dexter Morgan, blood-spatter specialist? Goodness gracious. Love the lead/fills. Oh, look, more harmonies. Held 'em for last didn't you? Hehe. I certainly didn't expect them. Don't know that I care for the little ad lib vox at the end. More 'verb on the vox. This is good.


Walt Cronin

All the same mix issues others have noted -DITTO. I still like the melody, though. You could have cut out around 1:45 without anyone being upset. I think that sometimes we all get scared to make it shorter than 2 minutes long. I like a certain amount of punk rock, though, and I've gotta say that there's something to be said for leaving people wanting more. I like this song -it seems like something that they would play at the club after the lights have come up and they're seeing everybody out for the night.


Weakest Suit

No me gusta! Melody and lyrics causing bile to rise in my throat. The best/worst pop songs have an insanely catchy hook that sticks in your brain. This is one of those, only I just don't like it. Everything's in place, though, and I'm sure it'll work for some.


If I'd voted in time, I would have voted for Josho. So, Josho, mentally add +1 to your vote total. I have some great footage of my buddy flirting with this girl after he's had a few too many. I will edit this video and add your song as the soundtrack. Bwahahaha!
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