The John McCain story (Left/Right reviews)
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Straight from the horse's mouth of god.
And now, the moment you've all been waiting for, my reviews:
15-16 Puzzle --- I like the slightly broken sounding music box or whatever it is. It does seem to be a bit loud though. I'm not sure why you decided to put the vocal behind it in the mix. I agree with Frankie that the vocal needs to go somewhere else in range. I do appreciate the defeated/pathetic quality you've got going in the delivery. It occassionally sounds like you are going to start crying.
Baker --- Um. Unless you can be incredibly clever you should not write lyrics like this. Also, your delivery is godawful.
Down With Gender --- Hooray for gimmick! Sounds like you had a lot of fun with pitch bend on this one. I'd actually find it a much more interesting piece without the hard panned "left right" voice. Of course, then people would bitch about it not being related to the title. What you need to do to succeed on Songfight is to take this kind of hard core glitchiness and use it as an element in a pop song so that the general audience can more easily digest it. Then, you won't get such scathing reviews. If you want to continue doing things that do not resemble pop songs, then you should expect to continue getting nasty reviews.
Future Boy --- It's perty. I am enamoured with my occassionally out-of-tune voice.
Hobbes --- Hey, it's the melody to Brick! Hey, it sounds like Weezer! It's not that I mind the influences it's just that it would appear you need to be more aware of them and work on trying to be a bit more unique. In all fairness, the little synth breakdown in the middle isn't either of those but also isn't super original. All of that said, I like the song and am downloading it, but please make a mix where the auto-tune is either not used or has the speed of correction turned down. Also, continue to enter Songfight, thank you.
Jeremy Martin --- It's catchy. I don't like the stuffy sounding vocals, but that's purely a production issue. I really don't have too many complaints about this song. It's not making me piss my pants with joy, however.
Josh Woodward --- Your guitar playing is good and well recorded as usual. I don't really understand what the song is about. I might be able to connect with the apparent anger of the singer better if I was more acquainted with the person he is singing about. All of the complaints are, in a way, not specific enough so they just sound empty. Other lyrical complaints: "mommy and daddy" "see you later player hater" and pretty much the whole chorus. Also, how does Left/Right qualify as an appropriate title for your song?
Level Nivelo --- I thought it was a very quaint composition and I like the sound of your MIDI piano. All the rest of the reviewers can stuff it.
Max the Cat --- Lots of cool stuff going on in here. You seem to have exactly the right kind of voice for this kind of thing. I am jealous of it.
Neil Thrun Etc --- You put my attempts at crappy guy and guitar to shame. Probably because you are the real thing.
Poor History --- Stop. Just stop.
TVs Kyle --- This is fun and quirky, I like it. You have a very goofy voice, keep it. I'm not totally convinced that the real percussion you are using is the right choice. It doesn't quite gel with the synth instruments.
Wreckdom --- Damn kids, this is almost a proper song. I like the accordion a lot and GW at the end.
My vote goes to Max. The Cat.
15-16 Puzzle --- I like the slightly broken sounding music box or whatever it is. It does seem to be a bit loud though. I'm not sure why you decided to put the vocal behind it in the mix. I agree with Frankie that the vocal needs to go somewhere else in range. I do appreciate the defeated/pathetic quality you've got going in the delivery. It occassionally sounds like you are going to start crying.
Baker --- Um. Unless you can be incredibly clever you should not write lyrics like this. Also, your delivery is godawful.
Down With Gender --- Hooray for gimmick! Sounds like you had a lot of fun with pitch bend on this one. I'd actually find it a much more interesting piece without the hard panned "left right" voice. Of course, then people would bitch about it not being related to the title. What you need to do to succeed on Songfight is to take this kind of hard core glitchiness and use it as an element in a pop song so that the general audience can more easily digest it. Then, you won't get such scathing reviews. If you want to continue doing things that do not resemble pop songs, then you should expect to continue getting nasty reviews.
Future Boy --- It's perty. I am enamoured with my occassionally out-of-tune voice.
Hobbes --- Hey, it's the melody to Brick! Hey, it sounds like Weezer! It's not that I mind the influences it's just that it would appear you need to be more aware of them and work on trying to be a bit more unique. In all fairness, the little synth breakdown in the middle isn't either of those but also isn't super original. All of that said, I like the song and am downloading it, but please make a mix where the auto-tune is either not used or has the speed of correction turned down. Also, continue to enter Songfight, thank you.
Jeremy Martin --- It's catchy. I don't like the stuffy sounding vocals, but that's purely a production issue. I really don't have too many complaints about this song. It's not making me piss my pants with joy, however.
Josh Woodward --- Your guitar playing is good and well recorded as usual. I don't really understand what the song is about. I might be able to connect with the apparent anger of the singer better if I was more acquainted with the person he is singing about. All of the complaints are, in a way, not specific enough so they just sound empty. Other lyrical complaints: "mommy and daddy" "see you later player hater" and pretty much the whole chorus. Also, how does Left/Right qualify as an appropriate title for your song?
Level Nivelo --- I thought it was a very quaint composition and I like the sound of your MIDI piano. All the rest of the reviewers can stuff it.
Max the Cat --- Lots of cool stuff going on in here. You seem to have exactly the right kind of voice for this kind of thing. I am jealous of it.
Neil Thrun Etc --- You put my attempts at crappy guy and guitar to shame. Probably because you are the real thing.
Poor History --- Stop. Just stop.
TVs Kyle --- This is fun and quirky, I like it. You have a very goofy voice, keep it. I'm not totally convinced that the real percussion you are using is the right choice. It doesn't quite gel with the synth instruments.
Wreckdom --- Damn kids, this is almost a proper song. I like the accordion a lot and GW at the end.
My vote goes to Max. The Cat.
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Re: Straight from the horse's mouth of god.
Hey At least I dont put your attempts at being a total pansy to shame. BURN!Future Boy wrote:Neil Thrun Etc --- You put my attempts at crappy guy and guitar to shame. Probably because you are the real thing
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- Ibárruri
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1: hobbes, josh, kyle, jeremy
2: neil, futureboy, max
my favorites this week are jeremy and hobbes... i think i'm gonna vote for hobbes. calvin says i should.
-bill
2: neil, futureboy, max
my favorites this week are jeremy and hobbes... i think i'm gonna vote for hobbes. calvin says i should.
-bill
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- Ibárruri
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whoa, josh woodward did not win.
congrats hobbes for being the first fighter to beat him (right?).
heh, and also wreckdom
-bill
congrats hobbes for being the first fighter to beat him (right?).
heh, and also wreckdom

-bill
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- de Gaulle
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Heh, I've lost tons of fights. I don't mind getting my ass kicked by a good song.HeuristicsInc wrote:whoa, josh woodward did not win.
congrats hobbes for being the first fighter to beat him (right?).
That... on the other hand...HeuristicsInc wrote:heh, and also wreckdom

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- Ibárruri
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ooh. you just won so often i forgot
my apologies, but still, congrats to hobbes.
-bill

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- Karski
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Come on now, there's only so much Schlotz the songfight community can take. Eventually, they'll grow tired and bored of safe songs and they'll crave something to surprise and entertain them. When that day comes, many of them will go away, but for those that remain, there will be WreckdoM...and it will be good. Amen.joshw wrote:Heh, I've lost tons of fights. I don't mind getting my ass kicked by a good song.HeuristicsInc wrote:whoa, josh woodward did not win.
congrats hobbes for being the first fighter to beat him (right?).
That... on the other hand...HeuristicsInc wrote:heh, and also wreckdom
Thanks for all the votes Everyone! You Rock!