It's a title AND a review! (Couldn't Have Been Worse)

[WesDavis]

I wrote the script and had my voice guy record the voice over part, then my boy played the boy. Thanks for the review.

Who is your voice-guy? He sounds similar to a voice that has narrated many video games including the one I mentioned.

I do like the story, I'm just trying to quiet down the neurons in my head that are firing when it hears that voice.

His name is Charlie Bennett. I found him on the internet. Not sure if he's done video game work but that would be cool if he's the same guy.

Eddie

Dude, Charlie Bennett....is dead.

[halen99]

>>>>Dude, Charlie Bennett.... is dead

See I can't stress this enough folks, Pursy is a dangerous game.

Eddie

[Dan-O from Five-O]

no, i was poking dan with a stick and hoping he'd melt down.

It's a French cooking method. Blue uses this technique right before he starts stirring the pot vigorously.

[Billy's Little Trip]

Blue and Dan-0 are the same person.

Now why in the world would anyone poke them self in the eye with a stick?

[thehipcola]

Disclaimer – this is listening 2nd time through on my laptop...so if i make a comment you think is stupid about your mix, it's probably because I can't hear things like that and I probably should just shut up. I probably won't though.

Some reviews....more later.


5900-N5
I'm not warmed up yet, but I think I dig this. I just can't think of why. If there was 10% more real music and a bit less supra-modulation on stuff making me feel dizzy, I'd probably more certain about it. I'm hooked by the fact I can almost make sense of the underlying music, but not really.

The Anchors
I totally listened to the end 'cuz I wanted to. I like it. I'm keeping it. So far, vote is going here. I think I'm hoping for a bit more singyness. But this is a cool tune.

The BeWells
What a sweet sounding recording! I like this a lot. I might vote for it. I'm definitely keeping it. Everything is well played, awesomely recorded and mixed with taste. Main vocals are particularly nice...not many singers who dabble in such a low register pull it off imo, and that's not the case here. Sweet!

Billie's Little Trip - I like the mix and rock. I like the arrangement. This tune has rockin' energy. I like it. I find the drums to be compressed a bit too much, but they are present and cooking. Specifically the snare drum sounds flappy, especially on the roll right at the end. But the song is fun and I'm keeping it.

Caravan Ray
I like the spacey space, but it's 12% too much for my tastes. The feel it gives is cool though. I dig that noise at the end too.

Carpetburn
This moves well. I find the main vocal loses my interest at times...I think it seems to me that it doesn't always hit what its trying to do. I like the song though.

Closest Dark Vepune Ind.
What a sweeping piece of music...I love it. Maybe a tad too long...and songishly, I'd like to feel more dynamic overall in the song. But it's totally awesome and very cool in its stylee. Keeper, possible vote.

Dangerous Croutons
I'm just thinking that I've been pretty happy with everything so far..and this is the next in a long line of pleasing (more or less), listens. Some elements I really like in this song.

The Darkest Daves
Huh. I like the gothy-ness of it, including the vocal treatment. The synth is a little to z3ta preset-ish for my tastes, but it's a cool, dark song that I'm going to keep. I like the ending.

DjBigDick
Hearing the stuttering DjBigDick at the beginning makes me want to bust out a hipcola track with samples of me saying my name. But I won't submit it.

DooRite N Rankestein
There were some cool parts in this unnecessarily long jam. I don't think I'd listen a third time though.



Eddie Lance
Yah....kind of cool in terms of overall idea. But kind of boring too. But somehow not as much as to say it's bad...even though there isn't much good stuff, but its not bad either...and of top of that the quirk factor is cool. So I'm keeping it.

Jeremy Bornstein
Yah....at some point I simply can't buy it, and thats happening right now. Sorry.


Flxxvm Florvm
Wasn't buying this until the chorus instrumental bit happened, which I really dag. The verse parts seem a bit stale in comparisson to the swell of the refrain which totally gets me. Im gettsed.

The Hell Yeahs
Nice to see THY's up in here and cooking as always. This is awesome. I love the snarl and the trashy sounds. I like the lead guitar/main vocal unison-y thing. Keeper for sure.


More to come, right now it's 300-in-IMAX time......

[halen99]

Disclaimer – this is listening 2nd time through on my laptop...so if i make a comment you think is stupid about your mix, it's probably because I can't hear things like that and I probably should just shut up. I probably won't though.

Eddie Lance
Yah....kind of cool in terms of overall idea. But kind of boring too. But somehow not as much as to say it's bad...even though there isn't much good stuff, but its not bad either...and of top of that the quirk factor is cool. So I'm keeping it.

Yo. Thanks for the review. But it wasn't that good of a review. I wouldn't go as far to say you did a bad job reviewing me. You did include me in your reviews which is nice. I'm glad I read it.

[lesChaps]

he does clearly sing "could have been worse" or something -

Laughable. He "clearly" sings the title or "something".

don't go blaming others for your lack of attention to detail.

Agreed.

Ok. This has all been good fun. But now it's blown out of proportion. I loved Dan-O's review. It was excellent. I responded to his question about the lyrics trying to point him to where the song title was mentioned or at least implied. THen the person who actually did the singing clarified further. I believe, that our intent was to be a helpful member of the community. Dan-O misunderstood our intent, and that's cool. But deserved a response. And in true Klownhole fashion, I responded with aggression. Because that's what I do. And Dan-O seemed to call into question our ability to spontaneously rock. And in true Blue fashion, he also attempted to help clear up the misunderstanding. Because he's a helper.

Why can't this just be about the rock? That's why we do this. And all this bickering is making baby Jesus cry.

I was actually just trying to get negative attention because I don't get enough at home.

Also, I thought Dan-O's calling us out (sort of) was adorable, by the way. It's songfight, not songsnuggle.

[lesChaps]

WTF is a "voice guy"? Where do I get one? I want one. I have nothing for him to do, I just want to tell people I have a "voice guy". It's got to impress the chicks - ...yeah, I'll buy you a drink, as soon as my "voice guy" gets here - just give him your order..."

Totally. Sign me up for one of them, too. Except I want a "voice gal". Something kind of husky, lots of sibilants. Meatwad could mix her into KH songs with some low, distant belltones. And at work I could send her to meetings in my place.

[Cärpetbürn]

Carpetburn... it doesn't always hit what its trying to do.

Haha, but the notes we're trying to hit are fuckin awesome! We sing in Kinsellanomics

Pretty much every review we've had has been fair and kind, thankyou all very much. You may learn to *love* the vocals, but probably won't. I think for a song written and recorded in 3hrs this ain't bad. Future ones will be more well thought out (and sung), we promise.

[thehipcola]

Yo. Thanks for the review. But it wasn't that good of a review. I wouldn't go as far to say you did a bad job reviewing me. You did include me in your reviews which is nice. I'm glad I read it.

awesome!

[nextbedtime]

who is this "Fine Tuvan Dining" band?

That'd be me and my pal Nina. My only other fight (which was solo) was "Influential Film".

[Dan-O from Five-O]

Did I ever mention how much I LOVE the review process?

Seriously, fun times.

[Meatwad]

Reviews -

5900: I'm reminded of Laurie Anderson, is that trite? I suspect it is. I hate it when a reviewer latches on to one effect or one riff and says "this sounds just like...". This has some cool sounds.

Anchors: I'm not a big alt fan, but this doesn't seem to be particularly good alternative music. Nice live sound though. If it's not live, then good job making it sound organic. Mostly harmless.

Bewells: Nice guitar work. Good progression. Good drums. This is nice. Good vocal work, harmonizing and everything. Good job. I'm saying 'good' a lot. Well done.

Billy's Little Trip: Now we are talking. Nice riff, cool guitar sound. You clearly wrote the music for this song title. Unlike other bastards I could mention. Excellent. Guitar solos. I don't support them, but I appreciate them in the spirit of pure rock. Fuckin A, a bass solo even. More of a breakdown than a solo. That's cool. We'll call it dynamics. Excellent.

Caravan Ray: I wonder what Blue thinks of all this reverb. There seems to be too many words to fit the parts. I like the sound though. The music reminds me of Sisters of Mercy - Floodland. A little. I'm not digging the vocals so much though.

Carpet Burn: Ah jeez, another one. Ok. Evaluate it on it's own merits. Nope, can't do it. Sorry. This isn't making me happy. I bet this is really good for this type of music. But I honestly don't know.

Chack: Bunch of moody fuckers on this fight. Nope, don't like it. Not much there.

Closest Dark Vepun Ind: Fuckin A. This is excellent. I think this is taking the vote away from Billy's Little Trip. For a second I thought it would be a Portishead type of thing. But it's not. That's cool though. It's still a great change of pace. And nicely done.

Dangerous Croutons: I like the gang-vocal approach. If this is building, it needs to start getting there. Waiting for it. Is this it? No. Waiting. Nope. Efx box masturbation.

Darkest Daves: I love big fuzzy keyboards. Great Berlin sound. Nice mopey melody. Awash in effects. Cool. Trying to sound tortured, that's good. This doesn't sound like Pet Shop Boys, but I wish it did. Now I want to listen to PSB now. Thanks, I needed some inspiration.

DJ Big Dick: Jesus. The worst of all worlds. Yoko Ono and Rap.

Doorite: Sorry. I dislike this type of music to the point where I can't objectively evaluate it. It's ok for me to take this approach, most of the reviews of our entries take the "not my kind of thing" approach.

Eddie Lance: This is cute. But not much there.

Fine Tuvan Dining: The lyrics really make this. Wait. No, the throat singing makes it. FNA, I love that. We keep trying to get our singer to do that, because he totally could. And loud too. He doesn't even need a PA and he can make feedback.

Flvxxvm Florvm: Fuzzy. Dynamics. That's cool. Is this supposed to be country-like? Hmm. Don't hate it.

Hell Yeahs: Feh. Just because there are female singers doesn't mean this isn't middle of the road. THis is fine though. I actually really like the drum mix.

Hoosier Daddy: This type of music requires the vocals to carry it. And these aren't executed so well.

Klownhole: Seriously, Les Chaps did a fantastic job on the vocals for this one. And despite accusations to the contrary, this came together very quickly and organically. It's like it was waiting to escape once the booze was in our veins. Got a new snare drum too. It's clangy.

Masterhyde: I don't support rap and hip-hop.

MC Eric B: This doesn't really stand out. Perhaps the lyrics carry it, but I'm not hearing it.

Melvin: Melvin always produces quality stuff. I'm not a big fan of this type of music. But I can tell this is really well done.

Mico Saudad: Nice vocal harmonizing. Nice attempt at buildup. Is that a round? This actually becomes much cooler than it seems at the beginning. LIke stairway to heaven.

Phils First Tambourine: Truth in advertising. Nice length.

Pig Pen: I hate this. Wait. THen you go do an Iron Butterfly thing. Nope, that doesn't save it.

Ross Durand: Nice guitar work. Vocals, lyrics, and music work well together. This is good.

Saint Cale: Interesting voice. Not much else going on.

Shael Riley: Nice organ. THis is ok. Pretty generic.

Shoe Horn TC: Sorry dudes, getting to the end of the list and this doesn't stand out. Except it's surprisingly long.

Shotpounder: Excellent. Tell me this was recorded with one mic in the middle of the room. And the room was really loud. Good energy. I like the drumming. I come from the John Bonham school of drumming, so more bass drum the better. This is great. I bet most hate it.

Sign Boy: Great sound. Boingo Primus kind of thing. Vocals aren't doing the music justice. Just kind of keeps doing this.

Superteen: Unfortunate way to end this excruciating fight.

[jeff robertson]

Flvxxvm Florvm: Fuzzy. Dynamics. That's cool. Is this supposed to be country-like? Hmm. Don't hate it.

It was supposed to sound like the Eagles.

[Meatwad]

Flvxxvm Florvm: Fuzzy. Dynamics. That's cool. Is this supposed to be country-like? Hmm. Don't hate it.

It was supposed to sound like the Eagles.

D'oh. Sorry. Didn't catch that.

[jeff robertson]

It was supposed to sound like the Eagles.

D'oh. Sorry. Didn't catch that.

Well, I don't think it sounds that much like them, the way it turned out. That was the goal though.

[Nigel (spOOn) Clements]

I'm hooked by the fact I can almost make sense of the underlying music, but not really.

Thanks dude, that's an almost perfect observation of where I am now, and where I want to go...

Most appreciated!

[Dan-O from Five-O]

Hoosier Daddy: This type of music requires the vocals to carry it. And these aren't executed so well.

I was actually waiting on this comment, because it's true and accurate. I wasn't very happy with the vocals either. The short excuse is they were done very late into an all night session that concluded the day the song was due. Admittedly not my best work. I will go back at some point and do them again.

Of course you could be talking about tonality, which I may not be able to fix. Could you clarify please?

[MintyHandy]

Here's the part where I stay up too late reviewing, instead of
getting sleep or writing songs. Reviews shall be short, but not
hostile, unless you done me wrong.

5900-N5
Silly, charming, endearing; I would have called this song
"futurepuppy". Did you swallow a theremin? Hereby voted "most
suited to the visualizations that appear in Windows Media Player
when you listen to mp3s."

The Anchors
Consider losing the slow intro; jump right into the beat. Consider
getting to the lyrics sooner; bored waiting for words. Are you
rapping or singing? I'm muckoo for melody, so this isn't working
for me, sorry.

The BeWells
The band is tight, the production values are solid, and your voice
is good; I'm just not buying the premise until the harmony kicks
in, and then it still feels less than complete. I want to hear you
sing higher, and I want to hear the sound of your heart hurting.
Also, your drummer is awesome.

Billy's Little Trip
Terrific job on this one! I'd like a little more melody in the main
verses, but the chorus is dead-on. Solid backing, compelling
(albeit sparse) harmonies. Perfect length, too. You know what I'd
change? I'd make it so that I wrote it. Possible vote.

Caravan Ray
Too wordy; I want to hear you sing, not talk. You also sound
sleepy, wish you'd done it in a higher register. No hook means no
love for me, I'm afraid; there's just nothing for me to hang my hat
on. I generally really like your stuff a lot, this one's an anomaly
for me. Sorry.

Carpetburn
Interesting staccato guitar intro, very bold; the potential for
innovation stops when your vocal starts, unfortunately. I was
hoping you'd be more in-your-face with a bold melody commitment.
Ends up too wishy-washy overall. Still, points for 80s-style angst,
the strawberry-flavored kind. Good solid band backing, too.

c hack
Can't hear a thing. Nope, nothing. I could turn it waaaaaaaay up,
but if it suddenly gets loud my kids might wake up, and I don't
know you well enough to trust that you won't do that to me. So I've
got no feedback for you, other than holding up my hearing aid and
saying "eh?"

Closest Dark Vepun ind.
As Steve Durand can tell you, I like winds, so I like this. Great
premise, too; this would make an, er, interesting Bond film
title track. Having said that, you don't have the vocal chops to
pull it off -- this needs mighty powerful pipes, yo. The
arrangement, however, occasionally leaps out of theme song and
hints at Arling & Cameron, so you get much love for that. Well
done.

Dangerous Croutons
Interesting. Atmospheric noodling with breathy unison singing. You
actually give futurepuppy -- I mean 5900-N5 -- a run for their
money on that Windows Media Player award thing I mentioned earlier.
Having said that, there's not much of a song going on here; kind of
like Pink Floyd without the meaning or the message. Not much else
to say, really.

The Darkest Daves
One of my roommates was in a goth band. I dug her, and I dug the
band, but that was back in the 90s -- arguably already a decade too
late -- and I've moved on. So has she; these days she's in a much,
much better goth band. In short, I have every reason to believe
you'll get better with time. Right now, you're vocally wallowing in
gothiness, and I'm just not buying the emotion. Less words, more
emotion, please. I like the arrangement, though, especially near
the end. Plus, you're named Dave, just like me (I'm kind of the
happiest Dave.)

DJ Big Dick
You know, for about ten seconds I was totally with you, and perked
up -- then it fell apart. You, sir, are closer to DJ Spooky than DJ
Shadow, and we're all the worse for it. Disjoined assembly of noise
does not a finely-crafted montage make. Looking forward to next
week, though.

DooRite + Rankenstein
Gee, you're talking. Interesting. Oh, now you're talking. Not so
interesting. Well, now you're talking. Ho hum. Shouldn't a beat
have kicked in here somewhere? Shouldn't you have a message to
deliver, yo? Ah, there we go, at 1:28. Please, next time start
there, and I'll do the same with my review. Once we get some meat,
it's pretty good eatin', but then around 2:08 you dip again --
should have heightened more, and brought it to a crescendo by the
close. Try again, though; want to hear more from you.

Eddie Lance
Yeah, I'm 25 seconds in, and there's no music. Abort. Oh, wait,
there's a piano. Hmm. Should I abort? Well, why not? There's
nothing to keep me listening, and it's already 55 seconds in. Even
the Windows Media Player visualization has very little to do. It
actually went out for coffee, I think. Car's coming. Hmm. I think
I've made my point. ABORT.

Jeremy Bornstein
Why aren't you in the voting list, sir? Hmm. Thank you for
submitting a song, instead of found dialog and sound effects. This
is charming and fun, although I think it might have been more fun
to do than to listen to. That droning deep voice can go, but
otherwise I wouldn't have changed it. Billy's Little Trip is too
good this week to get you a vote, but you're in the op half.

Flvxxvm Forvm
ATTACK OF THE TREBLE MONSTER. That aside, a simple and somewhat
vocally-uneven song, but in this quantity-over-quality group you're
pretty high up in the standings. In short, your guitar licks got my
attention, but your uneven vocals couldn't keep it. You're also
singing off the beat, which drives me crazy. Still, that guitar
sure is nice and hooky, so props.

The Hell Yeahs
Not quite manic enough, not guite gritty enough in the arrangement;
the lyrics are clever but unconvincing as presented. Lyrically this
is the theme to a grindhouse movie, but the delivery is PG-13. A
fine song in search of better execution, and that's still pretty
darn good.

Dan-O From Five-O
Almost there, so close. It needs a bouncier arrangement, or a hook;
it's a potentially fun bar-band song with an awkward delivery.
Lower the key so that you can hit the highs without straining.

Klownhole
If we took you and Paco Del Stinko and put you on stage together,
you would either suck balls or open a new chapter in the history of
music. You both deliver solid musical metalscapes with unabashedly
goofy lyrics, sung in a ha-ha-look-at-me-dance-for-you-now-DIE
style that I find I'm developing a growing affection for. Of
course, it's still all style, little substance -- but that's good
enough to get hot women into bed, and that's good enough to get
praise from me. Billy's still running off with the vote, though.

Masterhyde
Your backbeat is weaker than usual, and your rap is getting kind of
old. I said this a few fights ago, and I'll say it again: you've
got a solid thing going, now you need to find your personal hook.
Something that makes Masterhyde songs instantly recognizable, other
than "oh, this sounds just like his other songs." I hope you get
what I'm saying, because I think you're talented and more
consistent than many songfighters -- it's just time to kick it up a
few notches.

MC Eric B
First, the good news: you're starting to get confidence in your
vocal, and so your performance on this entry is a big improvement
for you, at least in the first third. Congratulations. Are you
still stealing/buying your beats?

Melvin
Radio-ready intro, that's for sure. Tight, tight, tight. I think
your voice could use a bit of chorus to sync with the arrangement.
Solid song, quite compelling, unexpected (and quite welcome)
direction on the harmonies. I'm especially enamored with with
waterfall-of-guitars sound. Here's the one thing I would improve:
take a risk and push your voice harder on the loud stuff; I don't
want it to crack, but I want it to come close. Also, don't change
the way you sing the soft stuff, it's perfect. Possible vote.

EDIT: Foo Fighters! THAT was who you reminded me of. Yeah.

Mico Saudad
Kind of starts falling apart vocally right at 1:00, which is a
shame because it gets interesting musically just before that point.
It's a good song, and I hesitate to downgrade the song because the
production is mediocre -- so I'll just say that I'd love to hear
this with a ban, and I wish it didn't get so boring by 1:50.

Phil's First Tambourine
Hehe. There are enough weak entries in this fight that I'm ranking
you surprisingly high for this.

PiGPEN
You started with a premise, then you executed it, and then you
submitted it. The litany of phrases; songs like this get written
here and there, and some get released, and once in a while they
take off (Billy Joel's We Didn't Start The Fire and Bob
Dylan's Subterranean Homesick Blues are two extremely
well-known examples) -- but this one is too whimsical to be taken
seriously and not clever enough by half. Still, as an exercise in
delivering on a premise, it's good enough for me. Also, I like your
voice.

Ross Durand
Not hooky enough, too wordy for my tastes. Predictable lyrics, too.
Nevertheless, fantastic arrangement, and I think if you'd kicked
off with the snare from the beginning, dropped the echo from your
voice and sung more/spoken less, I could have gotten behind this.
Also, it was screaming for a female harmony part. Top side of the
stack, but not good enough for a vote, sorry.

Saint Cale
Reminiscent of Ross Durand's entry, oddly enough. Unlike his, your
trouble is there's not enough "song" here; it's a sleepy --
althought tight -- rhythm section vamping until the singer hits the
stage, but look! She's already been here for five minutes! Having
said that, your voice is lovely (if a bit thin and passionless) and
I desperately wish you'd been the female harmony vocal that was
missing from Ross's song.

Shael Riley
The church organist goes disco! Skip the long intro next time, go
right to the vocal after four measures. Very disco vocal as well,
and interesting chord progression in the chorus -- nicely done with
that. The "mmm mmm" parts also quite effective. Overall I like
everything I'm hearing except: First, your main verses are
lyrically trying too hard to be clever, and second, your
arrangement needs to thicken up and heighten in the chorus and
bridge. That's it; good submission, and I hope you submit another.
All skate. Possible vote, except for the "Starbuck's" and "Dungeons
and Dragons" references.

ShoehornTC
Too slow, too slow, too slow. Nice harmonies, but kind of boring.
Still, I see where you were going (dreamy and atmospheric) so I'll
give you credit for that, and trust that over time you'll figure
out how to achieve that in production. On the chorus, someone's
voice should have gone way up. Needs a hook. Not bad, though, not
bad. Almost a possible vote. Should have been shorter.

ShotPounder
Awesome name aside, you're halfway between Klownhole and Billy's
Little Trip. Unfortunately, it's the worst of each. Still, props
for full vocal commitment, and for submitting what is (in this
particular fight) a solidly mid-pack entry. Listen to your track
and any recent Paco Del Stinko track back-to-back, and you'll
understand when I say your production is seriously lacking in
dynamic range. Please submit again!

signboy
So, you think you're Primus, do you? Primus doesn't work because
the songs are good; it's because Les Claypool developed that style
over a long period of time, and perfected it. You're not
displaying the vocal or bass chops to do what he does, so this
falls completely flat for me. I hope you'll submit more, but with
your own style.

Superteen
Superteen, come quick! A supervillian stole the knob that turns up the volumn on your song! What will we do, what will we do? Nothing, because (as with c hack) I can't trust that you won't suddenly get loud, and I don't want to wake up my kids. Sorry.

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Many entries, but relatively few I would give the nod to; perhaps I'm just cranky tonight. Giving it to Billy's Little Trip, though, because he delivered the goods, good enough to win in a better fight. He stole it from Melvin by virtue of the passion displayed, vocally and in the arrangement, although Melvin's entry was more polished from a production perspective. Some other solid entries, too, although a few folks that I normally enjoy disappointed me this week.

[MC Eric B]

MintyHandy - I am no longer using premade beats like I was before without modifications (I never stole any beats though). This is my first song on my new Casio keyboard. The keyboard comes with built-in beats, but my songs are still totally unique because of how I put it all together. The Casio by itself just loops the premade beat/chord which never changes, so that does not really make not a song. For example, to make the music for "Couldn't Have Been Worse" not just be just an endless boring loop, I:
Chose a tempo, added the Casio intro, chose the best note to start on, used the keyboard to change the chord progression during the song, used their "synchro/fill-in" as the chorus, and used their "ending" as an ending. I then did production in Pro Tools LE, like layering the chorus, EQ, and fading out the end. And, I write the lyrics and create a unique melody that is probably totally different than what somebody else would have done using the same basic Casio beat.

- MC Eric B

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MintyHandy wrote:

MC Eric B
First, the good news: you're starting to get confidence in your
vocal, and so your performance on this entry is a big improvement
for you, at least in the first third. Congratulations. Are you
still stealing/buying your beats?

[SaintCale_Trey]

it's a sleepy -- although tight -- rhythm section

This is no sort of insult to me (not that it was said insultingly) - I think that's a good description of what I was after.

The song really was written on a rainy Sunday morning, feeling low and down. The act of writing the song itself cheered me up a bit, but it's still a sleepy, sad sort of song. If the rhythm section's tight, then it has a chance to be a sleepy, sad, good sort of song.

It was a comfy song to work on. No virtuoso performances (from me, at least) here, but I'm cool with that, the song gets a mood across, and the whole process of writing it, recording it, and then listening to what other people have to say about it just makes me want to do it again, and do it better.

Hey look! Songfight works!

"Songwriter's block got you down? Give yourself a shot in the ass! Enter a SongFight, go nuts, and remember - you've only got THREE MORE DAYS UNTIL PEOPLE START CUTTING YOUR WORK TO PIECES! ... tick... tock... tick... tock..."

[Meatwad]

Hoosier Daddy: This type of music requires the vocals to carry it. And these aren't executed so well.

I was actually waiting on this comment, because it's true and accurate. I wasn't very happy with the vocals either. The short excuse is they were done very late into an all night session that concluded the day the song was due. Admittedly not my best work. I will go back at some point and do them again.

Of course you could be talking about tonality, which I may not be able to fix. Could you clarify please?

Hmm. I think it's the inconsistency. There are times when the tonality is fine, but others where it is rough. It does sound like a first rough take. Still trying out how the words fit. And for music like this, it seems the lyrics and vocals have to be strong.

Vocals freak me out. They are so hard to do. I am always in awe of anyone who can pull off a good vocal performance. Sound or words. I am always amazed when any of our singers can pull something together in the 30-45 minutes they are given to 'write' words and record.