Re: No sunlight in sight (Black Days reviews)
Posted: Thu Jun 08, 2017 11:04 am
Balance Lost—I didn’t like this the first time I heard it, but since then it’s become more enjoyable with every listen. Lots of good lyrical lines. Good rhythm, too. A couple of the lines (“but nothing got fixed” and “how the hell did they reach that conclusion”) seem to break the lyrical meter; was this intentional? I think the first instance works very well, but the second seems jarring. Good song overall.
dark side of the son—There’s a good song in here, but it needs to be chiseled out. I like the shifts to lower notes in the guitar/bass, and the vocal melody has lots of good spots. The looseness of the performance is an impediment to letting the song shine through.
Dollar Bill & the Inkpoints—You seem to have approached this song with deliberation and purpose, but I feel like something got lost in translation by the time it reached my ears. On the other hand, the instruments sound good, and the mixing is great.
Enter It in the Art Show—Pleasant to listen to. The drippy sounds are maybe a little too prominent. My favorite moments are when the melody on the low-pitched instrument resumes after a preceding period of tension.
Jan Krueger—Very well recorded and produced. As I listened, I wanted more variation (and maybe a tempo uptick rather than a perceived slowdown) between the chorus and the rest of the verses. The bridge sounded good and was a very welcome change, but it didn’t feel like quite enough. Definitely no complaints about any aspect of the performance.
Lichen Throat (me)—Thanks for all the mixing tips. This was the first time I had ever tried to use multiple vocal tracks, and obviously I didn’t really know what I was doing. I made a remix, incorporating many of the suggestions people have made: https://soundcloud.com/lichen-throat. The lyrics are based heavily on Daniel Defoe’s A Journal of the Plague Year, which I had recently read. Overall, I’m pretty happy with how this turned out, except that I don’t really like the chorus, and I think the tone of the bass was poorly chosen, which contributes to the muddiness that others have noted. Jan: Thanks for the offer; I would certainly be interested in more information about how to get more stability in the higher notes.
Metaluna—A younger version of me would have eaten this up with a soup spoon, and I still like it, even as a sedate middle-aged guy. Your performance and engineering skills are evident. I love the guitar tone that starts at 0:35. In general, the parts with discernable melody sound noticeably better than the parts without. I think it’s a little too long, but a fine song overall.
Pigfarmer Jr.—My favorite of your songs, and also my favorite of the week. Nothin’ fancy: just a solidly written and performed song that’s enjoyable all the way through.
Slickitude—This is pretty good, but something seems a little off. I don’t care for how the song trails off at the end of each verse. I do think, however, that the song is effective in evoking a feeling of dissatisfaction and resentment, as befits the genre you’ve chosen.
WreckdoM—I like the instrument (maybe a keyboard) that sounds like a distorted theremin. The rhythm is good, and I think it would have been well-suited to simply laying down a more conventional rap as the vocal track.
dark side of the son—There’s a good song in here, but it needs to be chiseled out. I like the shifts to lower notes in the guitar/bass, and the vocal melody has lots of good spots. The looseness of the performance is an impediment to letting the song shine through.
Dollar Bill & the Inkpoints—You seem to have approached this song with deliberation and purpose, but I feel like something got lost in translation by the time it reached my ears. On the other hand, the instruments sound good, and the mixing is great.
Enter It in the Art Show—Pleasant to listen to. The drippy sounds are maybe a little too prominent. My favorite moments are when the melody on the low-pitched instrument resumes after a preceding period of tension.
Jan Krueger—Very well recorded and produced. As I listened, I wanted more variation (and maybe a tempo uptick rather than a perceived slowdown) between the chorus and the rest of the verses. The bridge sounded good and was a very welcome change, but it didn’t feel like quite enough. Definitely no complaints about any aspect of the performance.
Lichen Throat (me)—Thanks for all the mixing tips. This was the first time I had ever tried to use multiple vocal tracks, and obviously I didn’t really know what I was doing. I made a remix, incorporating many of the suggestions people have made: https://soundcloud.com/lichen-throat. The lyrics are based heavily on Daniel Defoe’s A Journal of the Plague Year, which I had recently read. Overall, I’m pretty happy with how this turned out, except that I don’t really like the chorus, and I think the tone of the bass was poorly chosen, which contributes to the muddiness that others have noted. Jan: Thanks for the offer; I would certainly be interested in more information about how to get more stability in the higher notes.
Metaluna—A younger version of me would have eaten this up with a soup spoon, and I still like it, even as a sedate middle-aged guy. Your performance and engineering skills are evident. I love the guitar tone that starts at 0:35. In general, the parts with discernable melody sound noticeably better than the parts without. I think it’s a little too long, but a fine song overall.
Pigfarmer Jr.—My favorite of your songs, and also my favorite of the week. Nothin’ fancy: just a solidly written and performed song that’s enjoyable all the way through.
Slickitude—This is pretty good, but something seems a little off. I don’t care for how the song trails off at the end of each verse. I do think, however, that the song is effective in evoking a feeling of dissatisfaction and resentment, as befits the genre you’ve chosen.
WreckdoM—I like the instrument (maybe a keyboard) that sounds like a distorted theremin. The rhythm is good, and I think it would have been well-suited to simply laying down a more conventional rap as the vocal track.