your brine has shriveled my cucumber! (pickle juice reviews)

wages · Post by **wages** » Tue Feb 14, 2006 9:08 pm

Show me the pickles!

wages · Post by **wages** » Wed Feb 15, 2006 1:12 pm

Wages
I feel like this is my best submission (virtually no tempo problems or much in the way of f**ked guitar parts; vox is mostly "on"; and it's got that ending!). But, no drums or bass. I hope it's "good enough".

......the reviews........

Asperse
An instrumental that needs "more" to be more.

Cannon Dastanya
Smurgen durgen smiler disfungeratior?

DJ Big Dick
It's link a bonus track from a techno album.

DJ Snyder
Another bonus track, but this one's a little better. Nice groove.

Jim Fallope & His Fallopian Dudes
They might be They Might Be Giants. S'ok. I really don't care for the (is it a synthesized xylophone?).

Johnny Cashpoint
Alphabetically, the best one yet, but not YOUR best one yet. It seems to have too much going on. I'm guessing you didn't fully "produce" this track...ran outta time?

MC Paul Denyer
I feel like I'm listening to Final Fantasy LLXII's soundtrack.

Ratt Poizon
Another distorted voice tune! Wooo hooo! So far, the best one (sorry Johnny!). Cool quirky rockabilly weirdness!

Stubby Phillips Feat Dr Water
Your verses, much like mine, need some work on the structure or melody. I like your guitar soloing and the bass rocks.

Tom DG
"We need more voice!"
"I just can't duue it, I don't have the power!"
"Dammit Jim, I'm a doctor not a record producer!"

Sorry if the reviews seem short, I just didn't feel like I had much to say. I think this was the experimental songfight this week.

My vote: Ratt Poizon with Johnny Cashpoint coming in #2.

asperse · Post by **asperse** » Wed Feb 15, 2006 1:14 pm

yea, it's pretty sparce thanks for the review.
asperse

asperse · Post by **asperse** » Wed Feb 15, 2006 3:07 pm

reviews - songfight - pickle juice - 2-15-06

asperse - well this is my song, and for a quick little project i'm pretty happy with it. it's not great but it's okay.
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cannondaystana -
the vocals sound drunk or crazy, or both. the music is pretty typical of like a march or like a graduation song... the song is interesting at firts but doesn't really do too much for me, seems like you where having fun tough, which i can dig.

** (out of 5 *'s)

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djbigdick-
nice begining. this is quite chaotic and i like it so far. 20 seconds in and my ears feel like they've been through a fucking war. the beat is nice and the switches are even better.at about 38 seconds you do some wicked stuff. nice reverse tracking dude the end is the worst part.

*** (out of 5 *'s)
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dj snyder
this is nice. the table work (wether simulated or live ) is nice. the beats are very good. those are sounding like genuine scratches yea, they are and they're great. this is a great song. i really would like to do somethings with you in the future if you're interested

**** (out of 5 *'s)
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jimfallopie......
lol. this is very whimsical and the music is nice. lol. seiosly people are staring at me. this song does make me laugh a lot. it makes me think of a childrens show. the song doesn't really change a whole heck of a lot, but it's going somewhere.... the chorous is nice. the vocals seem a little more serios at that point. the hand drums/sequenced handdrums sound nice. good work.
***1/2 (out of 5 *'s)

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johnny cash point
the vocal delivery is pretty unique. the song is pretty interesting. the pickle juice oh yea yea is pretty different. the off kilter a bit vocal rythm is great. this song also is pretyt whimsical, not as funny as jf, but it's still a pretty nice song. decent job.
***(out of 5 *'s)
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mc paul denyer
we do need more pickle juic. this song makes me think of sifil and oli. the weed refernces are nice. the song is pretty decent but doesn't grab me by the nuts. the voice isactually very good, your singing is nice as hell. nice voice. the synth beats and stuff sound pretty decent. as the story develops the song goes from decent to pretty good. don't tie a nuse just yet, you may have talent. pickle juice will return.
***1/4 (out of 5 *'s)

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rat poizon
fucking hilarious. i love the slowed vocals, did you just record them at double speed and then slow em down? or is that a pitch bender or something? its pretty cool tough. get er done yehaw pretty funny shit. seems like you where having a lot of fun there. the production is pretty good. is that a dan electro guitar? it sure sounds like one. the new vocal stylings at 128 are nice. dude, i've worked in food service for so many years that this song is just awsome to me. lol. not sure what to give it as a rating. let me try to find the bad parts.... ... hmm... its really jsut a good song, not too many problems, it's pretty dynamic.. holly shit that ending is insane.
**** (out of 5 *'s)
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stubby ......
the voice is pretty good. i'm not sure how well pickle juice and jelly will go together. the guitar wah/echo thing thats ever so subtle is nice. i'd maybe like it just a little louder. not a bad song, not great either. keep fighting.
**1/2 (out of 5 *'s)
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tomdg
the guitar sounds a little strange in the recording. the vocals are a little nervous sounding, like you where recording in your apartment really late at night and you didn't want your neigbors to hear. i'm not saying you need to belt the vocals, but they sound a little held / forced back/down. just trying to help, not tyrying to be mean. this song has potential the guitar progression is pretty nice. i'd maybe mic the acoustic next time and use the built in pick up (which it sounds liek your using) as an aditive to the more natural sound of a mic being recorded in a room. bathrooms are a good place if you ahve an acoustic electric and you can have a clean channel and the reverbed mic one. don't stop making music, i'm sure you can do better.
**1/4 (out of 5 *'s)
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wages
something different, which is nice. the vocals are very nicely delivered, kinda goofy when your singing like a woman though, if that was you aim you did very well, it isn't lol funny, just goofy thats all, which is nice. the guitar is pretty good, very well recorded, tomdg the way his guitar sounds it sounds like it was recorded with a mic (maybe i'm wrong, i'm no experet) but htis is a decently good song
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lot of realy good songs! alot of folks i haven't heard yet ( i ussualy only review the song i'm in cause of the time it takes)

thanks for sharing your souls folks
asperse

not 100% sure who i'll vote for one of the guys who got a 4* for sure. i'm gonna listen to them again 2marrow

TH89 · Post by **TH89** » Wed Feb 15, 2006 6:12 pm

Asperse--hate to say it, but those are sim scratches, which I'm doing until my new needle arrives in the mail. I'm not nearly that dextrous on the real thing.

--DJS

Ratt Poizon · Post by **Ratt Poizon** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 1:07 am

Tom DG
This is a song I supose. It sounds kind of distorted and poppy... that could be my 12 year old duct taped headphones though. I can't really make the lyrics out.. which isn't bad, but when it's just singing and a guitar that's kind of the point, isn't it? this is alright.

DJ Snyder
Everyone likes this sort of music, don't they. It's pretty good... not my cup of milwaukee's best if you know what I mean. I like the "pickles"

Wages
I really like this. I like the guitar. I play guitar. I like the singing. and the lyrics. I also like it when people say "balls." good fn' job.

Johnny Cashpoint
I like this. I like all the differnent stuff that's happening. I wish I could pull off some stuff like that. bababababa haha! good job.

MC Paul Denyer
I really don't like computer techno stuff. this is ok though... I supose.

DJ Big Dick
I said before I don't like computer techno stuff, but this is pretty fucking cool. I like weird stuff. good job. yes. thumbs up.

Jim Fallope and his Fallopian Dudes
I like the chimes/flutes or whatever that is. singing is kinda gay. that's ok though. it fits with the chimes/flutes. this is ok.

Canyon Dastanya
sounds kinda familiar. yes. I like this. drinking is fun isn't it? Kinda reminds me of Mr. Bungle stuff. I like mr. bungle. probably could have had more stuff going on... however this could be comedy through repetition... if so... good job... thumbs up.

Stubby Phillips Feat. Dr. Water
I really like this. pretty good. for some reason it reminds me of a happy nin song or something. very good job. guitar solo could have been a little more metal though.

Aspers
ohh, ok... mostly computer generated stuff, huh? interesting. ahh! an instrumental... I like this. you have some balls. most people will probably be angry at you for no lyrics. I think this is good though. reminds me of zoogz rift.

RattPoizon
I made this. I'm sorry. I like it though. considering the main vocals were through a (guitar) pitch shifter that was 5 steps down, it's in tune enough, isn't it? obviously, I was also drunk. I'm very impressed with the entries.. for a while I lost hope in most of the people on here... I'm more into the music from the other side of the fence. I'm not sure who I'd vote for....probably aspers, stubby, or wages.. if I wasn't in love with myself, that is. good job fellahs! we need to concentrate our efforts on deathmetal though. hopefully I will try that next week.

Ratt Poizon · Post by **Ratt Poizon** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 1:15 am

also.... the picture used for pickle juice really suits the begining of my song doesn't it? the beer can opening... haha! alright.

wages · Post by **wages** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 7:44 am

Jarsh wrote:Wages
I really like this. I like the guitar. I play guitar. I like the singing. and the lyrics. I also like it when people say "balls." good fn' job.

This is the single greatest review I've ever received! And this coming from the guy I voted for....your check's in the mail.

Denyer · Post by **Denyer** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 5:03 pm

Aspers
For the first minute I thought this wasn't interesting enough to move as slow as it does but then it turned out to be a very nice instrumental.

Cannon Dastanya
Chords sound familiar but I don't know from where. Singing is not entertaining. A minute 50 of nothing. "LOL IM DRUNK CHECK IT OUT" isn't a song.

DJ Big Dick
A fun fruity loops song and I like it. The loud part at the end does not sound good.

DJ Snyder
Pretty okay. I'd rather see it develope into something other than scratching.

Jim Fallope and his Fallopian Dudes
Better than I was expecting from the band name. Good singing. Music is good but that main loop needs a holiday sometime in the song.

Johnny Cashpoint
A real song :]. My favourite part is the last 15 seconds. And the part where you sing differently but I forget where that is.

MC Paul Denyer
I think this is clearly the best song in the fight, a definite winner, everyone else go home and take a copy of this song with you because you'll want to show your friends.

RattPoizon
Good. I like the vocals which have not been pitch shifted better. Poison is spelled with an s.

Stubby Phillips feat. Dr. Water
Easy vote. I can't tell if the vocalist is a man or a woman. This is one of the best songs I've heard on songfight.

Tomdg
Sing into your microphone next time. I'm sure this is great for sealing the deal with some lovely chickenheads, but if you are going to record a song you need to sing more confidently.

Wages
Fun but long. I wasn't really paying attention but I think the guitar didn't change until the end but since I didn't notice it couldn't have been too bad.

Overall I really liked this fight but I don't think most people will.

The Anchors · Post by **The Anchors** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 5:08 pm

I think it's DJ Big DICK....

Denyer · Post by **Denyer** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 5:11 pm

Then SongFight got it wrong (or edited the swear) because I copied it off the song page.

TH89 · Post by **TH89** » Thu Feb 16, 2006 7:26 pm

Denyer wrote:DJ Snyder
Pretty okay. I'd rather see it develope into something other than scratching.

Yeah. I sort of submitted the song not as something I thought had a shot at winning, but rather as a little interlude to keep things interesting. I'll try to put more structure into further entries.

tomdg · Post by **tomdg** » Fri Feb 17, 2006 12:17 am

Asperse - nice tune, it works for me although I can't figure out the link with the title

Cannon Dastanya - can't make out the lyrics until the end starting "it's 2am". But I think that's the point, it's the incomprehensible blethering of someone who'd rather be asleep, and for that it works pretty well. But I like the way it ends.

DJBig - short and noisy. A bit too complex for me, but I like the voice at the start - like a homage to Kraftwerk.

DJ Snyder - nice scratching and "samples", fits together really well.

Jim Fallope - this is a great song, very funny, and would have been my vote but for one song which came later. I like the beat, the rhythm, the airy feel to the verse, and then the distorted, out-of-key feel in the chorus - great recording, great words, great fun.

Johnny Cashpoint - I like the theme of this song, although I can't quite get how it all fits together. The "James Blunt" verse stands out for me, as I posted on your FAWM site - very harsh but funny.

MC Paul Denyer - I agree with your comment on this. This is fantastic, it gets my vote easily. I love the cheezy beat and electronic chorus, I love the way you use your Australian accent, both in the chorus (by contrast with the rest of the chorus) and in the verses. I like the way you deliver the lines, reminds me a bit of the Pet Shop Boys - spoken deadpan but with a rhythm. The lyric is great, particularly from where he starts trying to grow pickes - hilarious, I keep singing it to myself. And I like the way you shift the emphasis between the "pickle" and "juice" in the title. Silly song perhaps, but absolutely brilliant. I must keep this one!

RattPoizon - very metal name, bizarre country song to start with! I like what you do with the vocal at the start. The sung vocal is nice when you get there - some people really hate pickles, don't know why but you're addressing a real phenomenon. What happens with the thrash bit at the end I have no idea!

Stubby Phillips - nice song, particularly the chorus - nice tune. I like the way you sing it too, the song sounds a bit sanity-challenged and the voice seems to fit that. Like the way it ends too, with the repeated last line and guitar - nice structure.

tomdg - what the *** is this all about?!?

Ok, Asperse hit the nail on the head about the recording "techniques", or rather lack of. I only had 10 minutes and my son was trying to get to sleep at the time and I'm new to this recording lark anyway and it shows but hey. Those are good tips though, I'll try it out next time (I hear shrieks of anguish here - next time? Please God no!) Took about 20 minutes to write. If anyone cares the lyrics are on the song's <a href="http://www.fawm.org/songs.php?id=1004">FAWM page</a>.

Wages - very funny (and bitchy). I like the contrast in voices. Perhaps goes on a little too long but great idea. Like the rough-and-ready recording feel to it.

Ratt Poizon · Post by **Ratt Poizon** » Fri Feb 17, 2006 12:52 am

Denyer wrote: Poison is spelled with an s.

Holy shit, YOU'RE RIGHT!!! I just looked it up.... and rat only has one "t." man, is my face red! how embarassing...

j$ · Post by j$ » Fri Feb 17, 2006 6:35 am

tomdg wrote:Johnny Cashpoint - I like the theme of this song, although I can't quite get how it all fits together.

Do you mean the music or the lyric? It's a pretty standard verse chorus verse chorus bridge chorus to end strucutre. Lyrically, my standard reply to this sort of enquiry is 'if you don't get it, doesn't mean neccessarily there's nothing to get'.

This song is about how leftovers should be left over. Not all by-prodcuts must be used. 1st verse - sets up concepts of what I'm going to discussing in context of the title. Each line refers specifically to one of the verses. 2nd verse - distaste of pickle juice. James Blunt verse - distaste of musical pickle juice. Last verse - distaste of romantic pickle juice. Revealin' perhaps why the character has a beef about left-overs. Simple.

Although if you're accusing me of being seemingly random, I would take a close look at your lyric for this fight first

tomdg · Post by **tomdg** » Fri Feb 17, 2006 2:25 pm

Hi. I couldn't understand how the lyrics related to one another, but I get it now. It's very clever, too clever for me I think, but as you say that's my problem not yours!

And yes, fair point - at any level it makes infinity times more sense than my lyric. I'm glad you understood it

asperse · Post by **asperse** » Fri Feb 17, 2006 2:35 pm

i'm sorry did someone say they may vote for me? man, they must have been drunk or stoned. lol. but yea, the relation to the song title is a bit tricky as it's instrumental. i like to think the music (all samples from the home(bass and a drum) mostly bass samples)) reminds me of something sour and fluid. maybe like pickle juice. sorry if this isn't clear to others. i smoke more herb than most people.

asperse

thanks for reviewing!

Stubby Phillips · Post by **Stubby Phillips** » Fri Feb 17, 2006 5:55 pm

Stubby & Dr. Water: The Doctor sang and played her Les Paul solo with those metal finger-pick things -- is that cool, or what?! My guitar was a little too low, but oh well.

MC Paul: Nice harmonies and good vox overall.

Cannon: This is why you shouldn't sing after going to the dentist.

Jim Fallopian: Interesting vox and good lyric. Pickles from the ocean? Yeah, I get it.

DJ Snyder: Fruityloops? Nice virtual scratching.

Johnny $: This sounds like it's from the Charlie and the Chocolate Factory soundtrack. Polished. Good ending.

Asperse: Sounds like a biobot nervously waiting in line for a tune up.

Tom DJ: Falls somewhere in between zero and infinity.

Wages: Eyes ablaze with a twinkle? Open mike at the coffee bar -- hope my flask is full.

Ratt: Schizo-frenetic. I wish the whole song was speedmetal.

DJBigDick: I want to see the video.

I llike Jim, Snyder and J$ the best. I'm voting for Danny Elfman. (That's you, J$)

TH89 · Post by **TH89** » Sat Feb 18, 2006 10:09 pm

Against all better judgement, I ended up voting for MC Paul Deyner. I so want to remix that track.

furrypedro · Post by **furrypedro** » Sun Feb 19, 2006 7:31 am

J$: Nicely put together and stuff, and I like the ba-ba's. There's just something about the way this song flows which doesn't do it for me. Vague, I know, but it's not my fave and I don't know why. 5/10

Jim Fallope: Neat and with some nice little bits in. In the end it's a bit repetitive. 5/10

DJBD: Those sounds remind me of Speedball 2 on the Amiga. nice ending 3/10

MCPD: The vocals are definitely the best aspect of this track, they're pretty clean and solid. I'm not too down with the cheap house backing track. 4/10

RattPoizzzzonne: This sounds just like this track Ride did on an out-takes album called King Bullshit. acoustic guitars and slowed down vocals, the similarity is uncanny, and I paid money for that. I wouldn't pay money for this but it hits all the buttons it's supposed to hit. 6/10

DJSnyder: The whole track seemed to pass me by a bit. Nothing horrible sounding, but it's a bit like the track Cassetteboy didn't bother using cos it wasn't funny enough. 5/10

tomdgdsf: meh. I'm not even gonna score this for it's supreme lack of anything even remotely interesting. oh, yeah I will

. have a consolation 2/10 for being able to play chords

Wages: You should've entered this into April Morning, with a peach and then sang "woke up this morning..." and the rest of the song would've written itself. This does fine as it is though; the falsetto bits are hilarious, nice job. I didn't listen to the end thought, sorry, you may notice from the rest of the reviews that my attention span is miniscule today. 5/10 onward........

Stubby Philips feat. Dr Water: Is that not the bassline from the Chilis Love Rollercoaster? filthy steal. That said this is one of the best I've heard so far, even taking the female vocal bias into account. 6/10

Cannon dastanya: I really wanted you to start singing "It ain't eeaaaasyyyyy being whiiiite", but unintelligible mumbling's fine too. guitar chords and sound are ok, mercifully short (for my attention span). Ah, the relevance of the lyrics leaps out at the end there, is genius too strong a word? I'm feeling more charitable than when I started listening so I'm gonna give it a 6.5/10, y'know, just to be controversial.

Asperse: thought I'd save yours for last cos I listened to it first and decided that nobody was going to top it and I was right. Mainly because I'd come to the conclusion that even though the MIDI bass really put me off at the start, by the time it got going it was reminded me of Post-era Bjork rhythmically and with all the twinkly bits it was more like Vespertine-era Bjork. Of course, an important point which lets this track down severely is that it's not got Bjork on it, but what can you do? If I let that affect my opinion of all music then I'd never listen to anything new.

so, in a field which exhibits a fair amount of technical ability and ideas which unfortunately didn't do much for me I'm gonna give a big fat vote to Asperse. well done

wages · Post by **wages** » Sun Feb 19, 2006 11:07 am

Furrypedro wrote: I didn't listen to the end though

Oh, but you must listen to the ending...it's the best part!

Thanks for the review!

your brine has shriveled my cucumber! (pickle juice reviews)

your brine has shriveled my cucumber! (pickle juice reviews)

pickle juice oh pickle juice, why are you so sour