A Woman On Paper (forgotten reviews?)

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A Woman On Paper (forgotten reviews?)

Post by martyr »

Did the "A Women on Paper" songs drop into some abyss void?

I hope we get to hear/vote on them!!!

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you'll hear 'em, don't worry.
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Post by Wages »

I was beginning to think that I was the only one to submit an entry, and since I never win, the admins decided to drop the tune. :( Just like I did the work night skirmish and then no one ever did another entry. Perhaps my "Truth Fairy" was too much for the insecures?
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Post by museicalrevolt »

Not that great of a week. Sort of an anticlimatic wait.... anyway here goes
the tops are
Tiny Robots- i see you've won every fight you've entered, you'll probably win this one too
Eight Legged Oedipus, Just in case, Masterhyde, Paco, Anti-M


Anti-M- This is cool. Compared to a lot of what's on songfight, this stands out as unique. Not my thing, but very well done.
B. Ellison- This is me, enjoy. I thought the title was "girl on paper" please dont knock me for this. thank you.
Billy's Little Trip- All I can ever think when I hear your stuff is Nirvana. Good in that low-fi grindy way.
Caravan Ray- I like the Mark Sandmanesque vocals, but the phrasing of the lyrics is off in some way, doesan't sit well. Cleanly put together, but its too dynamically static; it doesn't go anywhere.
Cynthia Size- There are some cool parts in this, but there isn't enough motion. I can't tell what's a chorus, what's a verse. This would be more sucessful if it were closer to 3 minutes that 5.
Disciples of Beer- Everything is so low and thin that i can hardly tell what the melody is supposed to be. the rhythm guitar should not be panned hard left. There's nothing coming out the right channel so everything is super of balance
Eight Legged Oedipus- I like this. Simple, nice. Balanced mix, except the guitar seems pushed a bit too far to the left. Very warm and natural sounding, good variety in the sections. Like your voice.
Just in Case- Reminds me of Tilly and the Wall. Love the vocals. Interesting. Sloppy, drunk, folk/sea shanty feel, which is totally a compliment.
Lucky- Good Bounce, pretty catchy. Very clean and well produced, but it reminds me of what i don't like about the Grateful Dead.
Klownhole- Good lord that was jarring. METAL. Nicely produced. I just hate metal.
Masterhyde- I didn't think i liked this at first, thought maybe it was too simple, but really, i love the old school rap/slow-jam feel. Actually this is totally rad and i may vote for this.
Nerdcore Superstar- This is alright. Not exactly inspiring, and I'm not a huge fan of how the sample drops out at the end of every 2nd bar.
Mike Lamb- Don't like the first stanza, and don't like how the drums are panned, kick and snare ought to be centered. But I do like how the instruments are slowly added in, and your voice and the guitars sound very nice.
Minty Handy- This is fine, not noteworthy
Nocturnal Brothers- I'm sure this is funny, but i just find it obnoxious.
Older Brothers- The vocals remind me of Connor Oberst in a bad way. The rest of it is too nonsensical. as with the above entry, I'm sure this is probably funny.
Paco- Brings the rock as always. And this is funny in a way that i can appreciate. I love your guitar tones. Funk breakdown in the bridge? I like this. The primordial slime line is awesome.
Ross Durand- I really like the guitar but I'm not super keen on the vocals. Actually I would really like this song if it were done with a different vocalist. no offense.
Steve Durand- Nu jazz? negative points. reminds me of girl from impanema. By the end of this song i actually really like it. and i love that you ripped off jim morrison when you came out of the bridge.
Steve Hand Puppet- I wish the drums were louder or rather that everything but the vocals was louder. This isn't bad. Vocals panned too hard over the bridge
Suckweasel- clean and well put together, good balance to all the parts, i just don't like it.
Thanks for the frisbee- I love your stuff, but this isn't one of your stronger entries. your voice is good, as are the guitars, put i didn't get into it until about 40 secs in. better than most this week.
Tiny Robots- I love this. Super cute... this sounds so much like B.c Camplight. Thats probably a pretty obscure reference. I f you don't know them you should check them out. I love the hand claps. I may well vote for this, easily one of the best entries this week.
Wages- The chord progression reminds me of "Creep" at first for some reason..... the slide is kind of cool. Not really into this....
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Ok, I just gave everything the once through. I've been waiting to hear Minty's new guitar and grunge Uke, and I must say, he didn't disappoint me, very cool! Paco's tune is awesome with some rip'in guitar that always makes me play air guitar. Eight legged hippopotamus's tune is killer and John McCrea would be proud. The Durand brothers also bringing it this week, each in their own style and both songs excellent. That computer world of Cynthia Size and Spoon always blows me away. The Hand puppets are my new favorite post grunge band. The beautiful voice of Anti M soothed my ears. Tiny Robots with a catchy tune and a cute voice. B. Ellison, wonderfully played with a nice accordion background. Masterhyde smooth jazz rapping voice and a nice beat. MC Eric B and his nerdcore style lyric'in up the joint, always fun to listen to. Suck weasel might suck weasels, but their music rocks sock hop style. Just in Case with their man and woman exchange always gives us both sides equally. thanks for the frisbee hasn't disappointed me yet and I know I'll be playing this tune all week. King Arthur, always top notch, listenable and great feel. Wages with his original style and sound always makes me listen for days. Caravan Ray loves dirty girls and makes cool songs about it...them? Klownhole and that messy garage sound that always rocks. The Disciples Of Beer likes tough chicks that bring out his inner beauty and song writing talent. Mike Lamb, such a clean sound and wonderful song, kudos. Nocturnal Brothers should give music lessons to under privileged kids so we can raise a whole generation of music like this on every radio station in North America. The Older Brothers, very cool, I'm sending this song to Dr. Demento as soon as I find out if he's still alive.....and is still on the radio.

Good job everyone.
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Anti-M: The Intro is a touch discordant on first listen yet strangely appealing and soon becomes rather welcoming, absolutely love the chorus (with the bubbly bit!) to me this seems to have it's feet planted firmly in two camps (Anti-Folk/Folk-Pop) and I love the way it eases itself through the empty desperate verses into the warm and meltingly gorgeous choruses.

B. Ellison: I love your voice here, and a nice layered build into the main body of the song, the "I painted you on my eyelids" is just one example of terrific lyric writing, the toy piano/glockenspiel is great (I'm a sucker for that sound), nicely played and expertly constructed, It never ceases to amaze me just how many talented people there are on SongFight! that can produce music of this quality week in week out. This is a truely beautiful track.

Billy's Little Trip: Oh wow sub-glam/grunge! I can truely appreciate the playing here as I've now got first hand of your talents, voice is good, but I'd suggest that it's maybe just a little loud compaired to the track, I'd maybe raise the volume on the instruments just a notch (half a notch maybe), Love the breakdown, there's a little bit there around 2:35ish that has a mellow buzzcocks vibe, good sing-a-long track, a touch hurried on it's exit (maybe).

Caravan Ray: Yumm! an extra sweep on the fourth beat of every fourth bar would give this a real depeche mode(ish) feel, all the elements are there, but this does need a little extra something just to vary it up a little, the vocal tries very hard to achieve that (and as good as it is) doesn't quite make it for me! but I love the simple use of (organic) sounds, this has grower written all over it!

Cynthia, spOOn and BLT: Ripped this track out in super quick time and then didn't know quite what else to do with it, then in a flash of inspiration I thought "this needs a dirty guitar" hence the talents of Chris and his BLT stylings probably makes this my most complete track, a touch long! but saved by the aformentioned Mr. Little Trip.

Eight Legged Oedipus: This is really nice, but (and this may be because this is the first couple of listens) it sort of sounds like you had a really good idea but didn't have enough time to round it out, I say this because it has a lovely intro then seems to have an 'I'm making this up on the fly' kind of feel (and if that's true then blimey! how cool are you!).

Just in Case: There have been and probably will be many songs with a very similar structure to this (that doesn't mean I don't like it) it has a kind of swaying camp-fire feel that has a slightly euphoric effect, the multiple vocal works very well for this genre, nothing to mark this down at all initially, but there are other songs that appeal more, nice lyrical up and down flow.

King Arthur: Good 'ol boy stylings wouldn't be out of place on the 'Dukes of Hazzard' as always infinitely competent, though maybe the feel is a touch generic, by that I mean that it has a very familiar feel from the first moment to the last.

Klownhole: More Metal and less Comedic Rock from previous 'Klownhole's' that I have known, it's always a little difficult when an artist submits this kind of track amidst the usual more melodic tracks submitted by most others, hence it tends to sit a little uneasy, but conversely comes breaking through like a breathe of fresh air, I'll need to listen to this A LOT MORE! and will!

Masterhyde: I like this in a 'Warren G' kind of way, very cool vibe! the rap/spoken style is easier to do than rap but a lot harder to perfect, and dude you pretty much got it, the only thing this is missing is maybe a sung middle section kind of like the single mix of Warren's track 'Regulate'. The backing track proves the old theory 'less is more', nice job!

MC Eric B: Aha! so this is what they have come to call 'NerdCore' as far as I understand, I like the backing beats but there needs to be a fill or two here and there and that sweep pad is too much and too often (makes it sound looped, but in a bad way), and this needs much much more variation, the lyrics can't carry it for the length of the track, keep plugging dude! your not far away from perfecting this style, but more work needs to be done.

Mike Lamb: Bass drum's a touch too strong initially, the snare could maybe have come in first then supplemented by the bass, a few to many syllables squeezed in at times, gives some lines the impression of being hurried, which is at odd's with the overall feel, okay why am I being picky with this track and not with other's?? Because I like it and would love to here this again when you've taken it away and worked on it some more, this could be really really good! it just feels a bit...unfinished!

Minty Handy: 80's Cars(ish) feel is quite refreshing, a little staccato for a little too long, and a touch jarring in places, but that's just recording/production so that doesn't count, what's the seriously glaring problem with this track is "Hey dude, I wan't more" I'm just getting into it and it's over, again like the track above, this could really use a fresh look at because it's really cool, nice vocal touches.

Nocturnal Brothers: There will probably be quite a lot of people who don't like this, but I do, cacophanic/raucous/energetic sounds like Mark E.Smith on speed, really doesn't need the "on paper" quote at the end, that's a minus and makes it sound stupid, great soundscape guys/guy!

Paco del Stinko: Yeah! back to your 'Paquanautical Dickie' best, you have several strength's one of which is that comedic sneering delivery, some of my favourite bands had that same tonal quality, another quality that's been expressed more eloquently by others are your skillful geetar-playing hands, thirdly your quirky lyrical attacks are just genius. Great Song!

Ross Durand: Welcome back to the 'Ross Durand Storybook' sorry if this comes across wrong, but this reminds me of those songs that my Dad used to love, there are very few songs these days that give me a chill but this does, very very emotive Ross, loving this a lot, can't and don't want to pick you up on anything here, yeah! it's not the lyrics (which are lovely) just the overall feel that brings a lump to my throat. Beautiful.

Steve Durand: Such a smoooth intro Steve, and lyrically astute as always, you're such a craftsman, like your brother above, I don't want to pick you up on anything here, and I really really like the use of the "And you know I be a liar" line. This is a class act.

Steve Hand Puppet and his Poorly Constructed Solo Effort: Not so poorly constructed Steve! in the battle of the Steve's you'd come second, but these song's segway really well, a little repetative in the middle section, a bit empty in places and the "in stereo" line is unessesary, up to 1:00 this is really quite cool, tighten up the middle secton and induce a touch more variation and the construction becomes better.

Suckweasel: Handclaps are a welcome addition, just as it was becoming a little tedious and sub-paco!! the chorus is really cool, yeah this is a jolly little tune and nice fade-out! perfect length too!

Thanks for the Frisbee: Just a damn good honest song, as always this has that typical 'Frisbee float' though I'll say this is probably the first of your's where the lyrics have stuck first time and not floated past me in a haze of bliss, this is another definate grower, in fact I'd probably go so far to say as this is my favourite frisbee track, it's a little more accessable and instantaneous, good work.

The Disciples of Beer: 'Busy Little Market Town' type backing track, vocals sit on top of the mix rather than integrate with the music, good idea with good lyrical observations, but a little meandering in it's execution and odd finish! not doing a lot for me I'm afraid.

The Older Brothers: Nice sonic's, awkward vocal delivery that seems sit on top of the mix in a similar way to the Disciples of Beer, chorus part isn't that bad at all, and the instrumental parts are obviously very good, this sounds in places like there were some extra ideas thrown in at the last minute, I'm just not sold guys.

Tiny Robots: Have you ever heard 'Stereo Total' this is really evocative of some of there more accessable numbers, sounds like French-Pop (no not that europap nonsense! I mean the good stuff!), just effortless vocals delivery, the organ is just so cheezy it's cool! in fact this is a blinding track, hmmm! that's really thrown my mental voting structure all over the place. I'll be listening to this a lot lot more.

Wages: You know what I like most about you and your music... your infectious 'hey let's make music' attitude, this is nowhere near your strongest entry, and is a little empty and too reliant on your original premise, "play it wages" followed by cymbol then pause is a nice attempt at laughing at your own joke and raised a smile here, I still feel you need a more driving electro-beat behind you, your voice and guitar are good but not enough, and the drumline could possibly have benefited from being doubled and panned -10/+10%, to give them more volume/warmth and roundness.
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Post by LukeU »

Basically im in love with Tiny Robots. I have to vote for them. They did have the best entry this week in my opinion.
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Post by jb »

Thanks to Spud for getting this fight up!

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good lyric B----painted ypu on my eye lids
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Yeah! my cover art got picked. yeah! Ok, here are some "reviews" to express my gratitude in being a "non-musical" part of this fight...

Glad you fellas finally "got it up". heh heh heh

Anti-m
Really really like the verses rhythm and chords. Almost left feeling that the chorus would've been great if it had simply been that verse except louder and with a full beat. Chorus is good but not grabbing me like that verse. What a great verse melody and rhythm.

Bellison
Something about the vocal melody makes me very tired, it's like a big yawn...consistently flat in tonal nature, as well. Could use more oomph, substance and form. Lingers on the same verse vibe too long. The chorus needs a facelift.

Billy's Little Trip
I'm listening past the production issues (drums breaking up with some sort of weird digitalness, lack of low end in the bass, uneven vocal). I like the guitars, and the contrasting dynamics of the verses. I really like this when it gets to the heavy part at about 1:15. I like that part alot, and the doubled punk vocal meeting the heavy guitar, reminds me of a cross between an old Bowie song and a Nirvana song, I like that. You can really hear how the bass is lacking, during the guitar solo. Needs low end boost on the bass.

Caravan Ray
Great vibe, cool and smooth like a cold can of Foster's beer. i like those big oilcan cans. The vocals are hard to understand, alot of bass in those vocals, but I love the lyrics, keep diamonds, etc. Dirty girls. Very dark and creepy, very good imagery with the music and good representation of the musical vibe, with the lyrics.

Disciples of Beer
Once again, listening past production issues (uneq'd, unfiltered vocal with P's galore, weak guitar tones). Needs a little more rehearsal perhaps to even out the vocal rhythms and solidify some of the syllables that don't quite match. Wish the song escalated into more "parts" instead of just that combo verse/chorus.

Eight Legged Oedipus
Everyone's hitting those "P's" eh? I thought you usually cut tons of low out of yer vocal. Cut some here if you can, that P's annoying me. That said, some great changes, one of my favs in this fight, nice build on "trust". Great line on the "friendless existence" and switch to maj7 after that, fuckin sweet.

Just In Case
This is weird how it's like a dark folk tune but has that pscyho-doubled lead vocal, very freaky, and doesn't fit at all with the folk vibe. Why, oh why? I really like the chorus part, with the legato vocal but the doubling just kills it. Needs more energy and emotion in the vocal and no freakish doubling/tripling. Countermelody is nice towards the end.

King Arthur
Good tones, great actually. Great chorus, how the "woman on paper" turns to "a woman in practice". Lines like "haven't kicked me out yet but you'd be grateful if I'd go" and this is just a great little tune.

MC Eric B
Nerdcore? Sure is...should've skipped this track as soon as I saw that. You aren't going to hear anything nice from me about this. Ugh. Highlights include "She thinks just like a MAN". The way you stressed the "MAN". could be funny but just turns my stomach. Not funny, but lame!

Klownhole
Ah a great opener guitar riff, although the whole mix is as messy as a baby and chocolate pudding. Wanted to hear a "mock orgasm". Drums are weird, there's a ton of weird low end in this tune. I kind of lost interest at the "fucking retards" line. But the orgasm happens after that. Glad to hear the male orgasm.

Masterhyde
The theme in this one is great, the chorus, totally in line with the title, words written well for the title and tell a story, good imagery. Thank word it's not nerdcore. Great lyrics and theme. Best so far, along with King A.

Mike Lamb
There was simply no need for drums in this tune, at least not until that part around 1:19. Should've put a big reverb on the drums at least. I like the way it starts to roll along, melodically, during the chorus. Feels like it needs more conviction and balls, though.

MintyHandy
Ooh, sassy. Such a sassy vocal. Not agreeing with the choice of distortion guitars though. Would've worked well with a clean, reggae off beat guitar. Fun with the "adams apple" and "oversized hands" bit. Fun breakdown but still not sure about the distortion choice. Some good lyrics here, fun!

Older Brothers
Feels like lunacy, teetering on the brink of insanity! I like that about it. Lack of direction and lots of weirdness is good, by me. That said, it doesn't really go anywhere or have any sort of hook. Feels like it could use some enhancement.

Paco del Stinko
The "and so are her friends" is great. Theme is good, lyrics are fun. I like the scorn-infused vocal, very fun. Terms like "primordial slime" are killing me. That's a nice little lead part there, I like that tone alot. I really dig the breakdown, with the 'schematic'.

Nocturnal Brothers
Huh? I couldn't make out the melody or the rhythm. Needs work. Could've been good. this always pisses me off how the songs that have the insanity in the vocals, completely fail, in terms of production. I like the vocal energy, but the song is so weak.

Ross Durand
I really like this new take on the title, about a woman in a dirty magazine perhaps? "Put herself on paper for all to see". I like that take on the title. It's a nice little tune with a healthy-smooth guitar part that I could listen to at any particular time.

Steve Durand
Nice smooth groove. I am putting words to the horn lines, in the very beginning. I like the "glossy" and "contour" imagery. Flesh! The sultry horns do a great job defining the imagery here, very nice. I like how the weird sound effects after the first vocal parts come in, make me think of some sort of orgasmic experience. Very nice, indeed.

Steven Handpuppet
First reference to internet porn! Now, how about a comparison of internet porn to magazine porn? The "crayon" metaphor is great, wanting to make it "sharper" wishing you could "draw". That is the best part!!!!!!!! go on there, pull out yer crayon, start coloring the paper!!! whooa!!!

Suckweasel
Not bad, not bad at all, enjoying this a bit. Lame name, but I like the story in the lyrics, that's the best part. could've skipped the guitar solo. That part was kind of weak. Nice, catchy chorus.

Thanks for the Frisbee
Ouch, out of tune vocals, and could use more power, more air flowing through. Some weird attempts to fit syllables in, like with the "pain she brings". I like some of the vocal turns though like on "powerless" and "I will stay up all night". I'm glad you didn't even put the drums in. Still not sold on some of the vocals, the way the vowels and consonants fit into the melodic structure. But I really like that chorus and the "up all night". Could have said "your love is draining me dry" instead of "just a drain".

Tiny Robots
Sweet production. Vocal is getting a little lost, competing with the "lead guitar" on the left. Not a huge fan of the 60s-ish "dreamy" vibe and that organ. I really like the line "what she lacks in depth she makes up for in fancy". It is fun and clean, still I want more vocal or perhaps just less of that lead guitar on the left. I really like the lyrics, the "fold her, scold her". Nice jam at the end. Could've waited to bring in the noodling left guitar until that walking bass line started. Not grabbing me with a hooky chorus, but a great all around little tune!

Wages
Having a tough time connecting with the vocal melody, I do like the energy in the vocal but it feels like it's there just to be there and doesn't have a real melodic or lyrical purpose. I feel like the chorus has potential but that the vocal melody could connect with the instruments better, esp. during the chorus.

tough call as to who to vote for.

My favs: anti-m, Billy's Little Trip, Eight Legged Oedipus, King Arthur, Caravan Ray, Masterhyde, and Paco. Tiny Robots as well.



I'm voting for King Arthur. Best lyrical theme, coupled with production quality and performance / instrumentation / melody



EDIT: why on earth did the word "d-r-e-a-m-y" come out [CENSORED] in my Tiny Robots review? WEIRD!!!!!!!!! Esp. cnsidering the F-word I typed, was not censored.

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spOOn wrote: Klownhole: More Metal and less Comedic Rock from previous 'Klownhole's' that I have known, it's always a little difficult when an artist submits this kind of track amidst the usual more melodic tracks submitted by most others, hence it tends to sit a little uneasy, but conversely comes breaking through like a breathe of fresh air, I'll need to listen to this A LOT MORE! and will!
I'm confused. Isn't Metal by definition Comedic Rock? The more metal you get, the funnier it is. You kids with your Wiki's and internets, I guess I need to read up. ;-)
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Post by drë »

Steve Durand gets my vote hands down. very cool song.
frisbee comes in second.
Whish i could give reviews but no time.
Enjoying the tune, steve.
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museicalrevolt wrote: Billy's Little Trip- All I can ever think when I hear your stuff is Nirvana. Good in that low-fi grindy way.
I know I've defended myself against the Nirvana comments in the past, but even I have to agree, there's definitely a poor quality Nirvana vibe going on here. It's odd because I never listen to them or ever got into them, it just ends up that way when I try to give my recording a live dirty sound and feel on tape. I think Nirvana stole MY sound years ago and when he realized he could never suck as bad as me he killed himself. :mrgreen: Thanks for the comments
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Billy's Little Trip: Oh wow sub-glam/grunge! I can truely appreciate the playing here as I've now got first hand of your talents, voice is good, but I'd suggest that it's maybe just a little loud compaired to the track, I'd maybe raise the volume on the instruments just a notch (half a notch maybe), Love the breakdown, there's a little bit there around 2:35ish that has a mellow buzzcocks vibe, good sing-a-long track, a touch hurried on it's exit (maybe).
This song was all recorded on tape, in fact, probably my last tape recording I'll ever do. I was all excited to play with my new digital equipment and that was a mistake on this song. I should have stuck with my analog fx because I'm more familiar with them. But I took it to my digital equipment to clean up hiss and pops and it pretty much gave it strange EQ changes and in the quiet parts it sounds like there's a bowling ball rolling down the lane...I have no idea where that came from, lol.
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Seoup Gei wrote: Billy's Little Trip
I'm listening past the production issues (drums breaking up with some sort of weird digitalness, lack of low end in the bass, uneven vocal). I like the guitars, and the contrasting dynamics of the verses. I really like this when it gets to the heavy part at about 1:15. I like that part alot, and the doubled punk vocal meeting the heavy guitar, reminds me of a cross between an old Bowie song and a Nirvana song, I like that. You can really hear how the bass is lacking, during the guitar solo. Needs low end boost on the bass.
As I said above, I hear the Nirvana vibe too, but Bowie? Bowie is one of my giants and I have used his style as inspiration in the past, but more for combining sounds and instruments and the way I deliver. But I don't think anyone has ever picked up on that before because I don't sound anything like Bowie. So I find that interesting that you said that. Thank you for seeing past the horrible production. I think it's a really good song and I'd like to re-do it someday when I get better at the recording/production stuff. Maybe I can get Wages to sing it, he'd give it the justice it deserves.
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KIng A-- good job, reminds me of the Band with a touch of Dead.
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Billy's Little Trip wrote:[ hear the Nirvana vibe too, but Bowie?
Yes, yes. I'm referring to the earlier albums such as "Space Oddity" and "The Man Who Sold the World". Not necessarily the title tracks, but the other tracks on the albums. Which is also fitting because Nirvana covered the title track to one of those.
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Seoup Gei wrote:EDIT: why on earth did the word "d-r-e-a-m-y" come out [CENSORED] in my Tiny Robots review? WEIRD!!!!!!!!! Esp. cnsidering the F-word I typed, was not censored.[CENSORED]
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Seoup Gei wrote:
Is my track really that bad? :lol:

cOOL art as usual by the way!
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spOOn wrote:
Ross Durand: ...this reminds me of those songs that my Dad used to love, there are very few songs these days that give me a chill but this does, very very emotive Ross, loving this a lot, ... the overall feel that brings a lump to my throat. Beautiful.
Thanks very much, I think this is one of the nicest reviews I've received. For whatever reasons and associations it's a big complimetn to have given chills.
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dre wrote:Steve Durand gets my vote hands down. very cool song.
Thanks Dre,

I'm glad you like it.

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Here's my poorly considered reviews:

Anti-M: The instrumentation seems very thin, in a sort of no-mans-land of minimalism and "full" backing. But then again, I'm a rockist. The chorus vocal is nice and sounds like Natalie Merchant to me. I'm not so much into the vocals on the verse. The falsetto at the end of each line gets tiresome quickly.

B. Ellison: Nicely done all around. My only criticism would be that the verse and chorus as so similar that it seems to go on too long even though its only about 3 minutes.

Billy's Little Trip: Well played. The recording seems a little muddy with too much room presence, or maybe its just direct to 2 track? Derivative of Nirvana but that's fine by me.

Caravan Ray: It's all bleeps and bloops to me, so I'm in no position to review this.

Cynthia Size and tje Eclectic Spoons: Clearly not my type of thing. Skip.

Disciples of Beer: Sounds to me like the tempo's drifting around a lot, and the 3 guitar parts alternate between having no relationship to each other and stepping on top of each other. Basic melody is not terrible interesting or original.

Eight Legged Oedipus: Fairly standard acoustic guitar strumalong. Goes on a minute or so too long or so for my tastes; its just sort of the same thing over and over without much more than a key change to keep me interested.

Justin Case: Good lyrics and overall nicely recorded and mixed. The middle section helps to distinguish this from just another standard folky formulaic cookie cutter.

King Arthur: I don't like modern Country, but other than that this is fairly flawlessly executed.

Klownhole: The guitars and such are well recorded and mixed, which would be a bit of a challenge with this sort of grunge-metal; each instrument seems nicely defined inside the wall of sound. I'd prefer the vocal down a bit.

MasterHyde: I'm not much qualified to review this sort of thing, but unlike last week the sequenced drums don't immediately drive me nuts. Technically this sits together nicely.

MC Eric B: Eject!

My Clam: There's something about the drums that I find stilted and distracting. It's like the last beat is wandering around and is usually late in the measure. I don't know. Recording is good enough. Bring the drums down and it the mix would be fine. I just find this unnaturally hard to listen to relative to the material.

Minty Handy: I like the instrumentation and overall recording and mix. It sounds like there too much reverb or somesuch processing on the vocals, which is kind of jarring, but other than that it's nice and tidy.

Nocturnal Brothers: More like Nocturnal Emissions... Everything is clipped. I can't listen to much more of this.

Older Brothers: Very not my kind of thing.

Paco del Stinko: Good recording and mix. Other than the vocals, wjocj are OK (and I'm not one to talk) everything is great.

Ross Durand: This is coming across as a tad too cliche'd. There's nothing terrible about it, and it's nicely played, recorded and mixed, it just doesn't do anything for me.

Steve Durand: Well done in all aspects.

Steve Hand Puppet yada yada yada: I'm sorry, everybody.

Suckweasel: Excellent all around. Probably my favorite so far.

Thanks for the Frisbee: Very nice. Good sound. Rises above the typically acoustic guitar strumalong.

Tiny Robots: Now I see what all the fuss is about. I guess I'll have to nitpick something... there seems to be a lot of top-end, which makes it a bit hard to listen to, at least in my headphones. Lose a point for the handclaps ;)

Wages: Is someone playing ping-pong at the start of this? It doesn't like a lot of effort was put into this. I hate to say this, but it sounds like the guitars aren't in tune with each other or maybe one is out of tune with itself.
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About to listen and review, but wanted to thank all for the feedback so far, esp. the negative stuff -- I took a long shot out of my comfort zone (rocker I am not), and it's in my failures that I will learn to succeed. Or some feel-goody thing like that.
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SteveHandPuppet

I like the doubled vocals a lot. Is it the same person? Whenever I try
something like that I get terrible phase problems. The part where it breaks
into huge stereo is really excellent. You have a great little noodly guitar
bit throughout the song, which really gives it some body and keeps the
interest going. This gives me some thoughts of Steely Dan (in a good way!)
with the jazzy progression and some of the vocal delivery, especially in the
"woman on paper" chorus. I gotta say, the intro drums really threw me off, I
did not expect them to progress into that song!

Suckweasel

Straight up rocker! This is very well mixed, the vocals sound really good. I
love the harmonies, there should be more of them! The solo really fits in
well, I think it would have been cooler if it was longer, but I know how these
things go. Great job.

Masterhyde

I've been wanting to get the time to get a set of reviews out so I could tell
you how friggin GREAT your stuff is. I'm a huge fan of old school 80s rap, and
this has an awesome Treacherous Three/Whodini kind of vibe. You, sir, are a
stone cold New York rap machine. I especially liked the bass line in this one,
good flow.

Nocturnal Brothers

If you actually listen through all the clipping, this has some good bits.
Sounds like a couple drunken jams I may or may not have recorded on ADAT with
a certain other Songfighter. ;-) I think this would actually have come out
much better with less cymbals.

thanks for the frisbee

You have a really great base acoustic grove with a fantastic lead guitar
sound. The harmonies are good, but I think they are conflicting pitchwise
with the lead guitar sometimes, and something is sounding a little wacky.
I like the lyrics. "thinkful wishing." That's great, hehe. You have a great
voice. I find myself wondering if I'd actually like this more without the
harmony vocal at all, I think it might sound a little cleaner.

Disciples of Beer

I think you might have some cool guitar work hidden in there.. A lot of it is
really quiet. There's a couple places where you seem to have dueling leads.
The clean guitar solo in the latter 1/3rd of the song is really cool. The
distorted one pops WAY back in at the end, not sure what's up with that.
Overall, I think this is a good song that got buried by production issues.

Anti-M

Lyrics are a little hard to understand for me, they seem a little overwhelmed
by the guitar. I love the stacatto guitar and vocal delivery that changes into
the smooth chorus. The voice in the chorus part is just beautiful. The song
feels like it ends a little abruptly, but this may have been the intent.

Billy's Little Trip

Awesome rockin guitar sound! I wish your vocals were mixed a little more
prominently. The guitars are taking center stage, which is cool, but I'd
really like to hear the vocals a bit better. Huge Bowie part about 2/3rds
through. That part is awesome, but it seems a little disjointed from the huge
rocker that the rest of the song is. I'm amazed that you can sing both ways so
well. Very nice!

wages

Got some low frequency distortion on my speakers here at the beginning, then
the bass seems to all but disappear. I'd say this song was about tap dancing,
given the percussion in the intro, but a lot of the vocals were a bit hard to
understand.

b. ellison

This is really great instrumentation! I like the lyrics. This is very well
done. I keep waiting for a huge accordion solo or something though. Seems like
it could use a longer break somewhere.

Ross Durand

Well played guitar line, although the twang on the bass is a little
disconcerting. Good lyrics, well thought out. Nice harmonies, provides a lot
of texture. There's a few parts where the midrange got a little too loud for
me, but overall this is quite well done.

King Arthur

Cool take on the title. Well orchestrated & produced. Nothing about this
particularly stands out for me, but it's a well played, solid song.

Cynthia and the Long Band Name

Why do I get the feeling that Grace Slick would love this? Vocoders rule.
Great take on the title and excellent instrumentation and melody to support it.
Man, I think this song may have given me a flashback. This is the kind of
stuff I love about Song Fight! So creative. Excellent!

Klownhole

For what it is, this is really well recorded. Nice job on that. I can't
understand the lyrics at all though.. Sounds like Ministry meets early Carcass.
Not my thing, but kudos on the excellent recording.

Paco del Stinko

Nice tight guitar and bass work. Mmmm.. slime.. Love the envelope filter guitar
part. Great vocals. This is really tight, and really well recorded.

Just In Case

I love the vocal melody, but I'm not in love with the doubled vocals
throughout the song. Man, that gets loud in the middle doesn't it? I like this
tune a lot, but again I find myself wishing to hear it without the doubled
vocal.

Caravan Ray

Man, for the first 2 seconds I thought we were going into a hyperspeed Jethro
Tull's "Christmas Song" with the reindeer bells.. Fortunately some crazy
Devo-lookin guy came by and stole Ian Anderson's flute and replaced it with a
Keytar. Nice electronica, smooth vocals. Well done.

Steve Durand

The Brass Fog. This is superb. If you played this in New Orleans in 1927, you
would have been arrested for indecency and hailed as a hero by everyone in the
speakeasy. Great work, this is excellent.

Eight Legged Oedipus

After that pause I was kind of waiting for something rocking to come in..
Vocals seem to get stomped on by the guitar in some places. A good recording,
but not my thing. I like the humming part towards the end a lot.

MC Eric B

Much better than your previous submission.. The string swell or whatever it is
isn't really doing it for me, it's a little too loud.. I'm not a huge nerdcore
fan, but you seem to have the genre down pretty well.

The Older Brothers

Well, this starts out great, but gets a little chaotic later on.. Not my thing,
but well produced.

Mike Lamb

Me.. I had a few timing problems. The solo wasn't as epic as I'd wanted. I really
liked how the guitar fills came out, but I wish I could have delivered the vocal
with a little more emotion.

Tiny Robots

FM Synth! Wow, great vocal. I like the lyrics. I was sad when the claps came in. This
was really unique and interesting, and then claps? Ugh. Too much clap. Otherwise, this
is great.

Minty Handy

At long last.. The UKE! I'd been wanting to hear this since you mentioned it. This is
great. It's got a stacatto Cars kinda vibe, especially with the solo. Nice drum fills.
Great vocals, really good job.



There is a ton of GREAT stuff in this fight. Very very hard to choose. Top contenders
for sure are Steve Hand Puppet, Suckweasel, Masterhyde, Billy, Paco, Steve D. and Minty.
Nice work!
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