You Spin Me Right 'Round Baby Right 'Round (Spin The Bottle)

[LSK]

LSK - Illicit sexual acts with endangered flightless birds?

I did not do any songwriting before recording for this fight.

Somehow the song turned out passable, if short and weird.

[TheTungstenSheik]

Just curious - how is this radio ready in any way? Crushed mix aside, of course. Also, I'd like to know your definition of spartan.

I didn't mean that this track itself was radio-ready, what I meant was that your work stylistically resembles the kinds of things that seem to get radio play these days. Maybe that still doesn't make sense, I don't know, I'm not really up on what's "hot".
By "spartan," I meant that I'm hearing an arena-rock vibe from the tune and the distortion/effects, but outside of the solo and outro, the instrumentals don't really hit any note smaller than a quarter. I suspect that adding a little more complexity to the bass and guitar lines would beef up the sound of the song overall, give it more of that big-stage punch.

[Reist]

I didn't mean that this track itself was radio-ready, what I meant was that your work stylistically resembles the kinds of things that seem to get radio play these days. Maybe that still doesn't make sense, I don't know, I'm not really up on what's "hot".

Thanks for explaining yourself, but I think you're right when you say you don't know what's "hot" - mostly because I'm totally sure that my song would get zero radio play. It has a buttload of falsetto, drags on at 55 bpms and utilizes several chromatic chord changes. - none of which get any radio play where I'm from, as far as I can tell.

And about introducing more complexity to the bass and guitar - I see what you're saying, for the sake of production and listener interest, but I definitely feel that it would ruin the moodiness of the song - which was the whole point of its creation. But I suppose it's tough to know that when I haven't explained the motives of my song, right?

But thanks for the review - I don't know how you guys get reviews done so fast, I have trouble finding time in the entire week to get them done.

[Ross]

30 seconds to fame - quickhit reviews for fun!

Ka Mahua ooh - I need a drink with an umbrella - dolphins? Aren’t they all happy. very fun

Bourbon Drops - pretty - interesting intro

Paul Lottenson - I like the honest sound right away and envy your voice - great instrument - this is right up my alley.

Jedi - it’s loud

LSK - dang - I had to listen to the whole thing.

MC Joebuddy - well - I’m guessing this is based on a true story.

MC and LK - for a sec I thought it was gonna be moreallegorical - doesn’t sound like it now

Drew and Blue - this seems like a terrible first line - yeah lyrics not doing much for me

Sky - weird double note thing - your first line is an excellent question. I guess I am interested to hear where this goes.

BLT with a quimby - excellent riffy opening - I wanted words that grab like the groove does.

Reist - fat guitars - not interested in how this one turns out

Clubs - ehh. the name thing was an interesting idea - I thought spin the bottle was about kissing.

Paco - excellent groove - ahh memories

Adam Adamant - I like the take right off the bat. I don’t think I’ve ever played either.

south sycamore - noise done right - other noisers take note - I’m sure I have a 10 inch of this somewhere in my closet.

toasted - nice feel. pretty voice and cool rhymes. scat not working for me - and I think that was over 30 seconds in anyway

TMK - Interesting imagery - but a bit wandery in the tune - however I know this is characteristic for you

LML - groovy - pretty authentic to the 85 reference - well maybe more like 82 or 83 - Romeo void?

Wages - I am consistently engaged by the apparent conflict between your concept and your follow through. I wish I could hear this in your head.

Deetak - not written for the 30 second format.

BSS - sounds like Dead in the intro - I don’t think songs shoud start with “Everyone in LA....” or any other city for that matter.

Charles Cack has a little crack - neat little vintage sound. but that’s about it.

Jim McCarter - oooh rhymed kiss with kisses. The tune is pretty static. what happened witht eh stereo thing?

Ash Kanna - cool groove. that’s all 30 seconds gave me.

Noah - I can’t really make out the words - I’ll pull up lyrics for full reviews - it just sounds like they probably matter.

Pathetic Wannabees - your motto is “Close your eyes, pucker up?” yeah these seem like a lot of rhyming couplets thematically connected.

[Billy's Little Trip]

Billy's Little Trip feat. Quimby - "Where I should have oughta been" causes furious readings on my Grammar-O-Tron. Aargh! The lyrics are not my favorite (although bonus points awarded for use of the word 'gabardine'), but I definitely like the off-kilter sound of the music, and the vocals are well delivered, though I think Quimby could come up in the mix just a bit.

Yeah, I like to fuck with grammar in my lyrics when ever I possibly can. Kind of my rebellious side. Maybe because in my real life I've learned to mimic a professional style to survive, and music is my freedom to express my discontent.

By the way, it's "Where I shouldn't have oughta been". Using the word "should" would just be completely stupid. Everyone knows you never go full stupid.

...thanks, Sheik.

[wages]

Wages - I am consistently engaged by the apparent conflict between your concept and your follow through. I wish I could hear this in your head.

Yeah, me too! I really think there are two main problems at work here. 1) Not enough time spent getting good recordings and 2) not enough talent beyond G&G.

[nyjm]

Noah - I can’t really make out the words - I’ll pull up lyrics for full reviews - it just sounds like they probably matter

Yeah, just a little (read: a lot). Big kudos to anyone who can suss every last literary reference (there are at least six).

... I know, I'm too erudite for my own good...

See! I did it again. Maybe the word is pedantic.

Dammit!

Edit: "pretentious" that's it.

[mc joebudy]

MC Joebuddy - well - I’m guessing this is based on a true story.

Actually no, but if I went to parties this would prolly happen.


I have a big ol' list of excuses about why this song sucks... but how 'bout I just promise to do better on the next one?

[Manhattan Glutton]

I'm not in this fight, but here are some quick impressions.

Adam Adamant - Seems very Ween, could use a synth drum sound.

Andrew Reist - This is pretty incredible and heavy, if not a bit lumbering. First likeness that comes to mind is Type-O-Negative.

Ash Kanna - Great voice, catchy tune. Not understanding Teplin's 'poppy' criticism... what pop songs are a capella?

Berkeley Social Scene - A+ lyrics, confused music.

BLT - This is a great composition all the way through. Reminds me a bit of Gary Numan mixed with Love Shack.

Bourbon Drops - One two three four! Great voice, pretty catchy tune. I'm not very fond of the live minimalistic recordings, I must say.

Charles Cack - You deserve an award for this. I'm serious.

Deetak - Every week you get tons better, I'm impressed! Though this one's missing the energy of the previous entries, it does a great job with atmosphere.

Drew Styles - The chord progression is a bit generic, but the production has the right idea.

Jedi Spaceship - This is so awesome and dirty, the guitar is so grungy. I love it.

Jimm Carter - Generic chord progression, but cool voice.

Ka Maua Hana Punahele - I don't even know what to make of this. Hilarious, and awesome take on the title. I think you're Steve Durand.

Lynette Lewis - Stuck in the 80s? Well done! Could use some lead instrumentation to mix up some of repetitive synth.

LSK - LSK is my new favorite song fighter.

MC+LK - I had to listen to your previous entry just to make sure it's not the drugs. There are quite a few timing issues, but you guys are showing you can do any genre remarkably well!

MC Joebudy - First of all, you don't have a rapper's voice. Second of all, you don't have the phat beatz to pull this off. I hate non-constructive criticism, but let's just say you were a little too ambitious.

Noah McLaughlin - This has a lot of a potential. I like the lead instrumentation and backing vocals a lot. Drums and monotonous singing could use a little extra. Edit: I just realized I had trouble with the vocals because they're not english.

Paco del Stinko - Very poppy, very slick. I may like this one better than WKTA, but it's a tough call. Vote for yourself this time.

Pathetic Wannabees - Much better than last week, but still plenty of room to improve. The song's pretty good, mostly recording/mixing are the problems.

Paulotteson - This is very smooth and listenable, but who do you think you are, Jack Johnson?

Sky Looks Pissed - I really like this. It's got emotion. I would probably buy a CD of your polished songs... probably.

South Sycamore... - Seriously, my ears hurt. Rone???

Those Meddling Kids - This is pretty cool. It has some compelling moments, and some ridiculous moments. Sometimes I wish I had an accent so I could make songs like this.

Wages - This is really ambitious. I'm with everyone else who wants you to sharpen your production skills and get fake drums.

Weakest Suit - lol @ lyrics

[adamadamant]

Thanks for the comments.

Adam Adamant - Seems very Ween, could use a synth drum sound.

Just went to their website to have a listen. This was not what I intended, I am sorry. That was awful.

Adam Adamant - I like the take right off the bat. I don’t think I’ve ever played either.

Thankyou Ross.

Adam Adamant - It's a very relaxing groove, kind of nice, but by the end, I'm sort of falling asleep. Lyrically, I can only guess you're after one of two angles - either you're being really sincere about thinking Zach Braff plays 'spin the bottle' all day, or you're being ironic about never having played it yourself. Can't tell which. Both? I don't know. Either way, I gotta be honest, I'm not into it.

I agree the song is quite boring, it needs something more oomphey in the choruses maybe, I don't know. As for the lyrics, it was initially my reaction to the title: "I've never played" (well more or less, I've never played the one where you kiss people), and then became a sort of reflection on how it's not something anyone I knew did and I only know about the game from watching american tv shows when I was young. Zach Braff sprang to mind because of the scene in that film of his, Sean Scott is from the American Pie films and the other two are me grasping at straws because it was written too quickly.

AA: I wish you'd tuned your guitar. That third chord makes me wince. I like the synth and piano sounds you chose. Don't know if this was rushed, but it feels that way.

It was rushed yes, it could do with more polish. As for guitar tuning, I did my best to tune it and as I'm just learning guitar really the song was not played very well. That might be partly why you had to wince.

Reviews soon.

[ujnhunter]

Charles Cack & LML are my favorites, hard to choose, both rad in different ways... no reviews sorry. But I voted for Reist, BLT/Quimby, Bourbon Drops, Cack of course (no relation), Jedi Spaceship (Stormtroopers are cooler tho), Ka Maua Hana Punahele (fun), LML (this is my kinda groove), LSK (I don't understand why), MC & LK (timing issues aside, I feel like I'm on a cruise ship w/ a drink in my hand), Mr. Stinko (groovy bass lines), Paulotteson, Sky Looks Pissed (best I've heard from you, I think), Those Meddling Kids... that's all folks! Lots of acoustic gitters this week it seems.

[Manhattan Glutton]

Adam Adamant - Seems very Ween, could use a synth drum sound.

Just went to their website to have a listen. This was not what I intended, I am sorry. That was awful.

Ween makes a wide range of music, so don't be offended. Some of it is out there, some of it is country, some of it is contemporary. What reminded me in particular was the strumming pattern/rhythm, guitar sound, and the contrast between other instruments and the acoustic guitar.

[booty]

Jedi Spaceship...I can't understand a word of what's being sung, unfortunately, ...

posted lyrics in lyric section. they are about as deep as this commercial grade carpet I am standing on

We added a Stunt Guitarist, Rick, on this one, hence the mindtrick

[mc joebudy]

MC Joebudy - First of all, you don't have a rapper's voice. Second of all, you don't have the phat beatz to pull this off. I hate non-constructive criticism, but let's just say you were a little too ambitious.

Perhaps I was too ambitious, considering that was the first song I've ever recorded, and I used crappy equipment, and garage band beats. But maybe this week I will have more time to polish everything.

[LML]

don't get down on yourself, you'll improve. I started out singing to a demo song from a yamaha keyboard. Takes time.

[mc joebudy]

don't get down on yourself, you'll improve. I started out singing to a demo song from a yamaha keyboard. Takes time.

I'm actually glad I'm getting mostly negative comments. I want to improve, and I find that only getting imput only my friends and family doesn't help much.

[Ross]

Perhaps I was too ambitious, considering that was the first song I've ever recorded, and I used crappy equipment, and garage band beats. But maybe this week I will have more time to polish everything.

Nothing wrong with Garageband beats - they can be used to great effect. I guess what I am saying is it is more about how you use the tools than the tools themselves. A great song doesn't require great guitar playing, or even an in tune guitar - a great song will surpass this.

[mc joebudy]

Nothing wrong with Garageband beats - they can be used to great effect. I guess what I am saying is it is more about how you use the tools than the tools themselves. A great song doesn't require great guitar playing, or even an in tune guitar - a great song will surpass this.

I think I understand what yoursaying.

I will def. spend more time on my song this week, that's for sure

[LML]

Now I feel bad cuz I made this week's entry at 10 am half asleep. I mostly screamed the lyrics. lol. Bad...so bad.

[Eric Y.]

I'm actually glad I'm getting mostly negative comments. I want to improve, and I find that only getting imput only my friends and family doesn't help much.

Has there been a noob of the month since Jim Tyrrell? I think it's about time to nominate another one.

[mc joebudy]

I'm actually glad I'm getting mostly negative comments. I want to improve, and I find that only getting imput only my friends and family doesn't help much.

Has there been a noob of the month since Jim Tyrrell? I think it's about time to nominate another one.

good to know I'll win something

[Manhattan Glutton]

I feel like this is a good time to link to this song from the archives: I Want to Get Better