I'm crushing your head (A Problem of Perspective Reviews)

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Spud wrote:King, I have updated the pubdate in the rss. Let me know if it works now.

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I think so. Juice isn't seeing it, but I think that's because podcasts are weird about what sort of changes they think are for real. When I look at the podcast in firefox, it does see the new song.

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Learned Hand wrote:Thanks for comments. This is the first song I've ever recorded. Hopefully, improvements are likely. I know sound quality is poor. Unfortunately, my only mic was the internal one on the laptop. Off to the store.
Although I'm not the most talented of people you'll meet round here, and definately not a good singer, one of the best purchases I made was a USB Studio Condenser Mic, plugs straight into the laptop, absolutely genius, I think it was between £45 - £50
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Dying Light
- Now I'm glad to see this style of music has been included, dont see it often. And the music has got me listening. Although the guitar and drums aint that tight it dont distract to much. The vocals do need to be stronger for this time of song, really open your lungs and let rip. Feels like your talking the lyrics, it should feel that your jumping to the music.....if need be turn the music higher, force you to sing over it and really feel the where the song wants to be. Your not a bad singer, its just the vocals aren't as powerful as the tune.

Dying Light: Good track, could have been great but for your vocal performance, (I know I'm not really one too talk much about vocals, but...)
This is just begging for a bigger vocal sound, you've got everything else, maybe the drums are a bit one dimensional, but the ideas there and the execution isn't half bad, but something a bit shoutier (yet controlled) could have carried this track through it's faults, instead it added to them... shame, but all is not lost.
Some of you may have realised that i am not a singer :D . I seriously am working on it, but
1. Its embarrasing singing s loud when your family is downstairs xP.
2. I'm Pretty useless at volume. I think in about a years time i will be almost ok at them but song fight is a great way to practice :).
I think its a bit of an improvement Vocally to my last track as dying light (Half Empty http://www.songfight.org/music/half_emp ... t_hehf.mp3 ).

Plus, thanks for the reviews, they are helpful and I appreciate it :)

I have noticed so many errors and such in the song, but thats my punishment for recording it at the last second and when I was supposed to be revising xD.
Now, enough of my useless excuses, on to...

Reviews :D

Hand Formula: Its cool, is that a real music box? For some reason the start reminds me a bit of the beatles xD. The vocals are very well sung but you need to project your voice a bit more maybe? I know I can't talk but its the only thing I can find to say about the song in a constructive-criticism sort of way... That and the quality of recording but that will come.

Kid Cruiser: Nice Groovy stuff, your voice suits the song well. not really much else to say, sorry. I just hope you arn't serious about what your singing about tho...

Melvin: Cool Synth at the start, The song flows well, Personally im not to keen on the drum kit/sounds/samples etc used but thats a problem of perspective (sorry baaaaaad joke there).The Guitar solo/riff is very cool, and works nicely, and I like the variety of things in the song.

Ralph Baumgardener: Nice dual Vocals, and cool chord progression. Did you record to a click? Just wondering because i'm not too sure about the timing. Nice song tho :).

Stu Jordan: Nice, Well sung vocals. For some reason I think a bit of piano would fit in nicely... I dunno why xD. And the solo should have been clean, I think...

Weakest Suit: Cool song :), kinda Bluesy at points. The vocals could be a bit higher up in the mix maybe? or is it just me? You use pauses well and it was interesting for the first 3/4 of the song. Maybe a bit more variety (although I guess I cant talk). Nice one :).

The Capitalist Youth: Intro reminds me a bit of red hot chili peppers... Your vocal style fits well, and It stayed interesting :).

Merisan: Nice intro "Riff" (sorry I dunno what its supposed to be called). Cool Vocal Harmonies as well, in fact the whole song flows very well.

Accessory Twelve: Cant say what this reminds me of but its very cool and I really enjoyed it :). Vocals could be a bit higher in the mix maybe. Great song and style.
Lord Of Oats: Cool synth at the start,Bass drum sounds muffled? Groovy beat 8D. Although the vocals were good im not sure they fitted with the style of the backing. All in all though it fitted together nicely.

Anja Claire feat. Evil-E: Maybe a little bit of intro before the vocals start but generally an awesome song. Not much more to say really...

Reality Respond: lol Mario Style Synth. But A Fun tune, Kinda Retro xD. Also A cool name you got there, altho that dosn't really affect your song. It would be cool to hear an instrumental of this while plaing an old-style game :).

Thanks For The Frizbee: Cool Guitar Riffs, Vocals Improve after a while and carry the tune nicely.

Jeff Robertson: Interesting, But not really a style im used to hearing, but well done nonetheless.

King Arthur: Nicely Recorded, and well performed.

Iqballers: Guitar style played kinda like nirvana but also very differently... Vocals could be a bit louder maybe, and it should probably have some sort of drum backing to make the song flow better?

A lot of accoustic / Semi accoustic Songs This week :).
Also A lot of cool songs.

My reviews are bad i know, sorry. I am not too good getting my thoughts into words, hopefully i'll improve with time :).
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Hah, that kid cruiser song cracks me up. That's some funny shit. Have you ever heard of Glissandro 70? The instrumentation reminded me in a good way of that. Funny stuff. On the other hand, what about that fade? If you fixed that and made it longer with a jam on the vocal you would have totally had me. Still, funny as all get out.
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Whoops, sorry about the song titling. I'll do better in the future.

I'll get reviews up pretty soon, thanks for the comments so far!

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I like the reality respond song very much. I would buy that record.

For the person who asked, I used ukulele, toy piano & jew harp.
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Thanks For The Frisbee wrote:
JachS wrote:A Problem of Perspective Reviews By Jach S

Thanks For the Frisbee
- I like the tune, the vocals are a little weak in the first verse...... Again I aint feeling the second verse...
thanks for the review, do you think i should have doubled my vox the whole bit? i thought about it, but since some say " dont double " some say "do double" i thought id try a mix.
After listening to your song a couple more times, I actually really like the mix, i wouldnt change it ;)
By doubling only at the chorus part gives a great diversity, adds more and works well. Keeping the flow and making the doubled sections more memorable.
More of the same in future please
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Englisheddiemusic wrote:

Ralph Baumgardener: Nice dual Vocals, and cool chord progression. Did you record to a click? Just wondering because i'm not too sure about the timing. Nice song tho :).
nah, no click track. I generally don't use one unless timing is crucial.
On a side note, even though I try to make the music seem real, and not sterile, it often becomes that with heavier mixing. Thanks for the good review.
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RWB wrote:
Englisheddiemusic wrote:

Ralph Baumgardener: Nice dual Vocals, and cool chord progression. Did you record to a click? Just wondering because i'm not too sure about the timing. Nice song tho :).
nah, no click track. I generally don't use one unless timing is crucial.
HAH! Timing ? in music ? crucial ? naaaaaaa
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Englisheddiemusic wrote:1. Its embarrassing singing s loud when your family is downstairs xP.
When I told my voice teacher* I was embarrassed to sing with roommates around, she told me she had a student who practiced singing in his basement and his brothers rolled trashcans down the stairs at him. So just do it and fuck tha haters.

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Englisheddiemusic wrote:



HAH! Timing ? in music ? crucial ? naaaaaaa
I meant perfect timing, or timing in a unusual time signature. I think I can keep 4/4 or 3/4 pretty well in my head.

Either way, I recorded it live, via a DI and a condenser mic for vocals, I did it the way I intended it to sound. I think music is about free expression, and holding someone down to music theory represses that creativity at the very least. I am not trying to decrease the value in theory by saying that at all, because it is very important, but I think free expression is important too.
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RWB wrote:
Englisheddiemusic wrote:



HAH! Timing ? in music ? crucial ? naaaaaaa
I meant perfect timing, or timing in a unusual time signature. I think I can keep 4/4 or 3/4 pretty well in my head.

Either way, I recorded it live, via a DI and a condenser mic for vocals, I did it the way I intended it to sound. I think music is about free expression, and holding someone down to music theory represses that creativity at the very least. I am not trying to decrease the value in theory by saying that at all, because it is very important, but I think free expression is important too.
Yeah thats cool and I understand what you are trying to do, its just that maybe sometimes it would be cool to use a clicktrack, even if its through headphones and you just loosely go with it. Anyway the song was good, and if you did that live then that is very cool, Mine are written as they are recorded and very cut-together (as you can probably hear) although I could do it live if I had to xD
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quick reviews,
basically what i liked and didnt like, nothing too constructive. most of the songs in this fight were just what i like!!! great fight.


Accessory 12-I like the synth, its marchy. The vocals don’t pop out as much as I would like. They are really pleasant sounding but buried. Good tune. I like the chorus a lot. And the la la’s.

Anjaclairefeatevile- hawly crap!!! I love this song!!! The music is perfect, the vocals are sooooo awesome!!
The climax of the song is genius. I want to marry this song!


The capitalist youth- I really like the vocal style on this song. don’t take this the wrong way, but you have a slightly mainstream quality. Very accessible. Nice song.


Dyinglight-the energy is great! The music is really cool in my opinion, but you need to do something about the vocal recording. The vocals might be good but the sound quality sucks bad. Otherwise it’s a fun song …it sounds like 1000 punk songs that already exist. Although punk is kinda like blues, its basically the same few songs recycled over and over, but its still entertaining to listen to.


The hand formula-not a big fan of the blow dryer in the background. This song is very sweet and delicate. I really enjoy the xylophone or whatever it is in there.

Iqballers-almost surf rocky. I like that. Vocals too low in the mix. I do like the song itself. Catchy and stuff, but I want louder vocals. don’t be shy..


Jeff Robertson- the solo in the middle is cool. I don’t really like the beat.

Kid cruiser- have you registered in your county yet? They are really cracking down on that these days. This song sucks.

King Arthur-great mix, solid music! good tune. Sweet lead!

Lord of oats-keyboards are grabbing me right away! Yah I like the keyboards a lot.

Melvin-lol! This reminds me of fresh prince of bell air, although this song is much more pointed and appropriate for the times we live in. great job mel, I did not expect that but it was really awesome!
You have some killer rap skillz =)

Merisan- just beautiful!!! You are amazing! I just love your voice, and the whole feel of the song. Great arrangement and delivery. And outstanding lyrics niv!

Ralhp Baumgartner- good effort, but you are ALL over the place!! I personally don’t like swearing like this in lyrics, but that’s just my opinion. I don’t like the noodly guitar. The basic song structure has potential.

Reality respond- playful and fun…are you a fan of Jordan seavers? This doesn’t sound like him at all, but it is similar style wise. I like the song.

Stu Jordan- I like the groove. I love the chorus. This is a throwback to a simpler time.

Thanks for the Frisbee- me….gng….levels too low, needs more instrumentation spaz…thanks …no prob.


Weakest suit-cool mellow tune. I would love to hear this live. Nicely done.
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TheCapitalistYouth wrote:That Kid Cruiser song is essentially awesome.
Yes, oh hell yes.

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here are the thoughts from Level 6:


Jeff Robertson and the Neo-Candylanders - Sounded like Strawberry Alarm Clock, 'til that 4th chord. Then, after that 4th chord, it's OK. Until the shitty chorus. The guitar lead after the chorus is cool. Also, with such a shitty chorus, did the thought of a real bridge ever cross your mind? Hate the lyrics.

the Weakest Suit - If I fuck up the third chord, I start the recording over... ZZZzzzz... what? huh? oh, Song Fight review. Sorry, nodded off there. dreary...

Lord of Oats - Aw, shit. It's Super Mario Bros. 3!!! You know, that part where you get the rod, and fall from the sky, and talk to a king... Yeah, that part. But with shitty Phil Collins Casio beat drums. The vocals are as flat as Kid Cruiser's girlfriend. The electric piano sounds like Rob Crow with a lobotomy.

the Hand Formula - Ominous hum meets toy piano... ?? I swear, the hum is out to get me...sounds like a toy guitar in there, too. or maybe a ukelele. kudos on toy instruments. however, I must insist they deserve better. But, the hum is killer. real brutal man!

King Arthur - a couple of good/clever chord changes. don't dig the style. not that it's bad or anything. it's OK. just a matter of taste. don't like the bridge, though, regardless. pretty good solo (better than any other guitar solo I've ever heard on SongFight!! seriously). also good to go to the chorus after solo (pretty simple, but effective for emphasis on that first chord there...)

Kid Cruiser - Yes. right here. On key. With style, well executed. Funny as hell, and painfully fucked up. The guitar arpeggios at the end are good. Overall: rather Ween-y! Thank fuck you know how to harmonize, etc., or you would have NEVER pulled this shit off!!! Now, watch as the insults fly!

Merisan - Starts out kinda Jewel-y with the intro, gets all Dixie Chicks harmony there, kinda has a Carrie Underwood vibe overall. I don't like those girls' music.

Melvin - It's as if Atom got drunk and let that one guy from the Bloodhound Gang front political for his Package. I liked how you dropped the beat for the chorus. I'll assume the harmonies weren't precise on purpose.

Anja Claire featuring Evil-E - wtf? where's the 'beginning'? it fades in like a sample on Amazon.com... Your voice is reminiscent of Edie Brickell. (Nice, dry, flat) Shouldn't have false ending. Speed ups sound like gypsy frenzy thingy.

lqballers - Very nice.

Thanks for the Frisbee - this riff is BORING, and quite frankly seems lazy. I can tell you're not discordant on purpose. No, you're sensitive, aren't you? "Almost there" isn't good enough. So, from your perspective you're not doing well? 'Cause what you're saying is, from your perspective, she's not doing well... ("Why, when you wrote a letter, did you say you're well. From your perspective that may have been true; not for me") Maybe she just realized that you suck and now she's far far away...

the Capitalist Youth - I can't help the feeling that the "bass drum" is actually sampled from you punching your daddy in the face (rhythmically), but with the sound of your epic crying edited out...

Dying Light - From my perspective, the vocal recording quality is powerfully different (read: Karaoke) from the guitar going "ba-na ba-na ba-na ba-na" and the drum sucking. btw, that intro solo was terrible. (sigh) this song is TOO LONG

Reality, Respond - channel open, -Reality- responding: the guitar/vox destroy what's otherwise a decently good set of boppin' chiptune riffs. (It's emo day in Mappy Land!!)

Ralph Baumgardner - this song is also TOO LONG. Wavery vocals could be better applied (especially the doubled parts). fairly boring, overall.

Stu Jordan - harmonies are better in tune than most. still not perfect. falsetto "ooh"s not good. farly lupine. bass is OK. lyrics are awful, and awfully timed. and, no, that part at the end, with the guitar vamps, and distortion is NOT what the Beatles would have done there. Solos are never necessary, especially if you don't understand phrasing. 3-part "harmony" at the end is a tired cliche, and poorly executed.

that is all.
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City of Dis wrote:here are the thoughts from Level 6:


Jeff Robertson and the Neo-Candylanders - Sounded like Strawberry Alarm Clock, 'til that 4th chord. Then, after that 4th chord, it's OK. Until the shitty chorus. The guitar lead after the chorus is cool. Also, with such a shitty chorus, did the thought of a real bridge ever cross your mind? Hate the lyrics.

the Weakest Suit - If I fuck up the third chord, I start the recording over... ZZZzzzz... what? huh? oh, Song Fight review. Sorry, nodded off there. dreary...

Lord of Oats - Aw, shit. It's Super Mario Bros. 3!!! You know, that part where you get the rod, and fall from the sky, and talk to a king... Yeah, that part. But with shitty Phil Collins Casio beat drums. The vocals are as flat as Kid Cruiser's girlfriend. The electric piano sounds like Rob Crow with a lobotomy.

the Hand Formula - Ominous hum meets toy piano... ?? I swear, the hum is out to get me...sounds like a toy guitar in there, too. or maybe a ukelele. kudos on toy instruments. however, I must insist they deserve better. But, the hum is killer. real brutal man!

King Arthur - a couple of good/clever chord changes. don't dig the style. not that it's bad or anything. it's OK. just a matter of taste. don't like the bridge, though, regardless. pretty good solo (better than any other guitar solo I've ever heard on SongFight!! seriously). also good to go to the chorus after solo (pretty simple, but effective for emphasis on that first chord there...)

Kid Cruiser - Yes. right here. On key. With style, well executed. Funny as hell, and painfully fucked up. The guitar arpeggios at the end are good. Overall: rather Ween-y! Thank fuck you know how to harmonize, etc., or you would have NEVER pulled this shit off!!! Now, watch as the insults fly!

Merisan - Starts out kinda Jewel-y with the intro, gets all Dixie Chicks harmony there, kinda has a Carrie Underwood vibe overall. I don't like those girls' music.

Melvin - It's as if Atom got drunk and let that one guy from the Bloodhound Gang front political for his Package. I liked how you dropped the beat for the chorus. I'll assume the harmonies weren't precise on purpose.

Anja Claire featuring Evil-E - wtf? where's the 'beginning'? it fades in like a sample on Amazon.com... Your voice is reminiscent of Edie Brickell. (Nice, dry, flat) Shouldn't have false ending. Speed ups sound like gypsy frenzy thingy.

lqballers - Very nice.

Thanks for the Frisbee - this riff is BORING, and quite frankly seems lazy. I can tell you're not discordant on purpose. No, you're sensitive, aren't you? "Almost there" isn't good enough. So, from your perspective you're not doing well? 'Cause what you're saying is, from your perspective, she's not doing well... ("Why, when you wrote a letter, did you say you're well. From your perspective that may have been true; not for me") Maybe she just realized that you suck and now she's far far away...

the Capitalist Youth - I can't help the feeling that the "bass drum" is actually sampled from you punching your daddy in the face (rhythmically), but with the sound of your epic crying edited out...

Dying Light - From my perspective, the vocal recording quality is powerfully different (read: Karaoke) from the guitar going "ba-na ba-na ba-na ba-na" and the drum sucking. btw, that intro solo was terrible. (sigh) this song is TOO LONG

Reality, Respond - channel open, -Reality- responding: the guitar/vox destroy what's otherwise a decently good set of boppin' chiptune riffs. (It's emo day in Mappy Land!!)

Ralph Baumgardner - this song is also TOO LONG. Wavery vocals could be better applied (especially the doubled parts). fairly boring, overall.

Stu Jordan - harmonies are better in tune than most. still not perfect. falsetto "ooh"s not good. farly lupine. bass is OK. lyrics are awful, and awfully timed. and, no, that part at the end, with the guitar vamps, and distortion is NOT what the Beatles would have done there. Solos are never necessary, especially if you don't understand phrasing. 3-part "harmony" at the end is a tired cliche, and poorly executed.

that is all.
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Thanks For The Frisbee wrote:
Reality respond- playful and fun…are you a fan of Jordan seavers? This doesn’t sound like him at all, but it is similar style wise. I like the song.
Jordan actually taught me everything I know about recording. He lives right down the street from me.
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City of Dis wrote:i am a douche bag.
i dont care what you say about me here genius! you insulted some really great performances for no reason but to make waves. bravo!!! :wink:
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Cant be bothered reviewing but i voted Kid Cruiser.
And everyone who's saying the song is awful because of the subject matter needs to grow up...i mean seriously, there's nothing wrong with doing a 12 year old. A 12 year old is just a 16 year old minus 4 years!
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Accessory Twelve
This feels a little robotic. You might want to add some more syncopation or different rhythms in there, to mix things up a bit. I'm kind of having a hard time hearing what you're saying. I liked the little instrumental interlude at 1:15 or so, though that cymabl crash near the end of that is way too loud. Maybe a more electronic sounding set of drum samples, like from an old drum machine, would fit this style better than the low grade samples of acoustic drums. You sound like you could add some more dynamics to your guitar playing. You're kind of hitting each note pretty forcefully.

Anja Claise feat. Evil-E
The intro's too abrupt as others have said. An instrumental bar or two before that could help. Good melodies, lyrics, and singing, and the music is solid, too. Nice guitar, bass, and drums. The chorus is really solid. This is already pretty good, and could be really awesome with a little more work on the arrangement. There are so many words in the lyrics, it'd be great to get some parts without singing, maybe a guitar solo or something. The end section seems to come in pretty early, and it builds up really quickly. You could probably stretch it out, especially if the song up till that point were longer.

dying light
The vocals seem muffled and lacking in energy, especially compared to the guitars and drums. The drums get a bit spastic at times. It sounds like you're missing the hi-hat/ride or something for much of the drum beats. Beats with just kick/snare don't sound very realistic (even with nice samples). It's hard to maintain interest in what you're singing because the guitars are crowding out the vocals. The chorus is alright. By 2:30, those drums have become really annoying... you really don't need them during the clean guitar interlude. This instrumental section is going on way too long. Oh, that was the outro? You could trim that down by a minute probably.

Iqballers
Your vocals are also not as distinct as they should be. You sound like you're pushing your voice a little too hard at times, and the falsetto is kinda bad. There are some decent riffs in here. You've got another too long outro, especially since it's just guitar craziness.

Jeff Robertson and the Neo-Candylanders
I don't think that non-drony keyboard in the left is adding much to this. The large contrast between the verse and the chorus doesn't really work for me, it feels too abrupt and disjointed. I think I like the chorus more than the verse. Something about your verse drums sounds a little odd, like you've got regular and rimshot snare hits happening at the same time or something.

Kid Cruiser
I nominate you most likely to friend flood... Your joke isn't really that funny, so please don't laugh at your own joke during your song. At least the music is alright, though that swelling synth noise in one channel is getting pretty annoying. And at least it's short. The sleigh bells are creeping me out for some reason, in combination with the subject matter...

King Arthur
This song's pretty well put together. I don't have much to say. I think the phrasing for "problem of perspective does to us" is a little awkward sounding to me. Maybe pausing between "that's what a problem of perspective" and "does to us" would flow a little better. You sound like you're rushing through "perspective" there. But that's a really minor thing Nice guitar solo.

Lord of Oats
Your intro feels a bit long to me. This is getting pretty repetitive with the same core elements just looping over and over. I feel like after I've heard the section with vocals once, I don't really need to hear it the same way a few more times.

Melvin
I'm not really into this style. There isn't anything in particular with it that I can put my finger on that I don't like, I guess I just am not really getting into this one. I prefer your rock stuff, sorry.

Merisan
Thanks to Niveous for the lyrics. This could use a little more work, but we had a pretty limited amount of time to do it, so I'm ok with what we got done in that time. Too bad i ran out of time before I got to add some accordion. Here's a version with a slightly improved mix and stuff:

http://people.geneticmail.com/sam/meris ... lussam.mp3

ralph baumgardner
This was sort of bland till the you turn into a misogynist, then I get pretty disinterested. Not much else new happens after that. This one just didn't do much for me.

Reality, Respond
This does sound a bit like Jordan Seavers, but also reminds me of Carol Cleveland Sings. I'm curious, what do you use for your synth sounds? Decent song, though that clapping at the end is weak.

Stu Jordan
Another decent song. Good idea bringing in some harmonies and distorted guitar to change things up a bit. The structure could use some tightening up. Your guitars don't sound that great, particularly the lead/solo guitar. It sounds like you're recording all your guitars direct into your computer or something. You should look into trying to mic an amp instead, or get an amp simulator plugin. This song is pretty long.

Thanks for the Frisbee
I like this, but it's kind of too much of the same thing over and over for me. I like that guitar part, but not enough to listen to it for the entire song. Maybe there should be a part where that changes, or cuts out, or something.

The Capitalist Youth
Nice guitar and vocals. This could maybe use some backup/harmony vocals. I like the outro. I could hear some little brushed snare drum stuff there.

The Hand Formula
Those vocals are really quiet. I like the instrumentation. I can't really make out what you're singing. Dang, another song that's the same thing over and over. And I can't hear what you're saying, so I'm not really compelled to listen the whole way through.

The Weakest Suit
Some hokey rhymes in there. OK song overall, just not very remarkable...

I started out trying to provide some constructive feedback, more song oriented than production oriented, but I guess I kind of ran out of steam after not too long, sorry.

My favorite was Anja Claire feat. Evil-E.
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Re: I'm crushing your head (A Problem of Perspective Reviews)

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Thanks For The Frisbee wrote:
City of Dis wrote:i am a douche bag.
i dont care what you say about me here genius! you insulted some really great performances for no reason but to make waves. bravo!!! :wink:
No. No, I didn't.

I insulted some performances so that the performers can see where they're weak. I complimented strengths, where applicable. I just don't feel like participating in the mutual masturbation society that seems to crop up here sometimes. If everyone always says "great job" when something clearly is not a great job, then no-one ever learns and grows. It seems like most of the "reviews" I've read on here (for a while, mind you) are simply a circle of people giving each other gold-star stickers... It really seems at times that the general level of creativity and musical comprehension is shockingly immature. If someone is hurt, but realizes that there was some truth in the barbs, then maybe their next song will sound better.

Also... why did most of these 'problems of perspective' center around romantically engaged couples?? Is fucking all you guys ever think about!?! jk!
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Re: I'm crushing your head (A Problem of Perspective Reviews)

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City of Dis wrote:
Thanks For The Frisbee wrote:
City of Dis wrote:i am a douche bag.
i dont care what you say about me here genius! you insulted some really great performances for no reason but to make waves. bravo!!! :wink:
No. No, I didn't.

I insulted some performances so that the performers can see where they're weak. I complimented strengths, where applicable. I just don't feel like participating in the mutual masturbation society that seems to crop up here sometimes. If everyone always says "great job" when something clearly is not a great job, then no-one ever learns and grows. It seems like most of the "reviews" I've read on here (for a while, mind you) are simply a circle of people giving each other gold-star stickers... It really seems at times that the general level of creativity and musical comprehension is shockingly immature. If someone is hurt, but realizes that there was some truth in the barbs, then maybe their next song will sound better.
I agree. I haven't heard these songs yet - but I thought your reviewing style seemed perfectly reasonable. If they were your thoughts - please go ahead and say it. There really is nothing more helpful than a (justified) bad review.
City of Dis wrote: Is fucking all you guys ever think about!?! jk!
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