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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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I'm not even in this fight, but my sympathy goes out to those who want some reviews. Come on, people!

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The state of this thread is what I would call a sad state, so I will work to improve its state by using it as it was intended. Well, not really. It's not actual reviews, but first impressions. I wish I could be more positive, but I'm sick, and I can't hear too well out of my right ear, and my life is pretty unsatisfying, so like, I'm doing my best here. Maybe you guys could try making exciting stuff or something.

Banditt - These are like pretty good rhymes and stuff. Not particularly compelling, but it also doesn't overstay its welcome. I mean, you really do the song a great service by not trying to make a hip-hop epic out of a limited amount of material. So props on that. In retrospect, I was too nice to you. Stop making rap right now. But at least you didn't say nerdcore.

BSS - What the hell. Is this. Chord progression sounds nice, but it's nothing new. But neither is anything, so don't despair. I think it could be a little tighter, considering it's not particularly complicated or anything. On the same note, I love that there are multiple vocalists, but they could do a better job of singing together. I really like this section with the instrumental breaks. It highlights your instrumental abilities and yeahhhh. I guess this is a little tame for me, considering that I know you guys are capable of some much more post-punkish, post-rockesque stuff. Though I suppose you wouldn't know that I know that. But I appreciate versatility so yeah.

BLT and the Hoblit - I don't understand your sense of melody whatsoever. I want to be more negative about it because it really bothers me, but I won't because WE"VE GOTTA STAY POSITIVE. It seriously makes no sense to me in any capacity. Otherwise this is cool instrumentally except it sounds way too 90's. Fuck punctuation. Especially with this harmonica. What the hell is wrong with you guys. This sounded like some 90's funk metal until fucking Blues Traveller shows up and shits on everything. I mean that in the least negative way possible. I mean this is decent-sounding, for what it is, like actually really decent-sounding, because I really hate whatever this is, but I really like the sound of this, in some weird way. You established one of those feelgood grooves that doesn't want to end, so when it does end, it sounds really abrupt. I would have ended with a fadeout. YEAH I SAID IT YOU SHOULD HAVE GONE WITH A FADEOUT. FUCK THE ANTI-FADEOUT MOTHERFUCKERS IT WOULD HAVE BEEN A GOOD CHOICE FOR THIS SONG.

Chopped Liver Meat God - I really like the sounds of the instruments, and even what they're doing, but there simply isn't enough material here to justify the length of the composition. Especially considering how heavily it relies on the one instrumental figure. But I guess that's better than having the guitar lines ramble on about nothing. Better that they make up their minds. Vocals sound mostly in-tune, which really excites me, but then again, they don't do anything adventurous. Considering the tone of the song, I wish the vocals could sound more apathetic and disaffected, but I guess it's too hard not to bleed emotion everywhere. Lyrics are still way too literal. The tone of the electric guitar is fucking amazing, considering how cheap of a guitar is being used to produce it. The completely improvised and whackass guitar part seems to actually add interest, despite being so carelessly planned. Sure, you could have re-recorded it, once you realized you wanted to use it, but who wants to sacrifice the element of surprise? Ends suddenly. COULD HAVE USED A FADEOUT. Maybe.

Chale Dase - HAHA I REVERSED YOUR INITIAL SOUNDS MOTHERFUCKER. OMG. Two seconds in and this is too fucking DJ craziness for me. What the hell is this beat. Why do people on the internet rap. Like I don't even care if you're good at it. Just fucking stop it. So yeah, you can rap or whatever. But make more intricate beats. And you lose eight million points every time you say nerdcore. You're never going to make up for that with anything good you do. I'm not going to say that rap isn't music, because it obviously is. But I will say that rap songs are not songs. So fucking shut the fuck up. I mean I was really trying not to be an asshole but I guess I am and you will have to deal with that. Hire Timbaland or the Neptunes or Dr. Dre or something and maybe then I will voluntarily listen to your stuff. Oh well. At least you can rap.

Doug Funnie - Fuck your name. Minus ten million points. Get a better name. Gawd, fucking stop rapping. You guys just don't get it. And I don't mean stop rapping. I mean make better beats. Because I can't hear and I can't afford to pay attention to the words. Okay plus five points for this weird sung part. This actually adds a lot to it. And you can rap, too. But I don't really care. I mean, at least SF has gone from terrible rap to decent rap with beats that don't compell me. Is this over yet. Oh good, the part with singing. This part doesn't make me want to kill myself. Hey, a chord progression. Why did you wait so long to introduce that guitar part? Well whatever. Work on being less boring.

Flvxxvm Florvm - I wish I didn't hate blues. Because I like you. And a lot of your work. But this is like a lot of the other stuff this week. Sounds too lazy river and not exciting enough. I desperately need somebody in this fight to bring a lot of energy and explode me in the face. HEY COOL SOLO. No but seriously. More guitar solos in life. OH SWEET WHERE DID THIS COME FROM. YEAH FUCKING ROCK AND SHIT WOO. Yeah. Cool. I really like that the song does this. I kinda want more aggro from the guitar and bass. But I'll take what I can get. Like major points for not doing rap and doing a solo and making the song take off like a low-rent Freebird. Fadeout was too fast.

Johnanthan Mann - Where did you get this voice? Did Leonard Cohen and Ian Curtis have a baby? Do not sing about your ukulele. I will kill you. But at least you have some drums with energy and stuff. And this part where they drop out. Weird, but cool. The drums sound really fake and shitty, but at least they're doing what I want them to do. BASS SOLO. YEAH. I wish I could hear so I could give you a better idea of what this sounds like. What the hell is with the way you mixed the vocals. Once again, weird, but I like it. So that's my impression of the whole thing. I might actually vote for this thing. Yr alright, kid. How old are you, anyway? Probably older than me because who isn't. VOTE I GUESS

Maxo - Oh good. My favorite type of internet music. Would it kill you to make a song. There is some really cool stuff here, actually, but wut. I mean can we say anything other than shit? Well, if this is an instrumental, it's pretty sweet. Better than any instrumentals I've done. Like. This is cool. It's very musical. It's very not, but it very is. You know? It's unconventional, but it has fucking soul. Like I might vote for this dude because it's awesome and shit and FUCK EVERYBODY THAT DOESN"T LIKE INSTRUMENTALS BECAUSE IF YOU DON"T LIKE THEM THEN YOU"RE NOT A MUSICIAN YOU"RE A FUCKING POET AND FUCK YOU> YEAH I"M USING THE SHIFT KEY TO CAPS THIS SHIT MOTHERFUCKER GO TO HELL VOTE FCYUCKING AWESOME

RE:FLEKT - HEY KID COOL SOUNDZ, WASSUP. Hey this sounds like hip-hop. The beat doesn't sound like shitty asshole, so you're already winning. Fuck yeah. And a choir in a cave? Hell yeah. Dude that snare is painful WUT. And the vocals don't sit well in the mix. That's alright. Mine never do either. But I could punch you for that snare fill. Your rapping isn't like super great from a technical standpoint, but there's passion in the delivery, so it kicks the shit out of these fucking computer mic jockeys sitting at a desk and saying they're cool. I will vote for this if you end it pretty quickly. Not a really strong ending but close enough. VOTE I GUESS FINE.

Remus and Romulus - Wow this sounds cool kind of. Have I hit a string of awesome. LET US FIND OUT. Drums sound like fake shithole. If you don't have drums, stop trying to sound like drums because none of you are good at it. These vocals are like Eddie Vedder without power. Which is all he has going for him. So there's not much left. But at least you're singing. Don't let me discourage you. Just...don't sing like that. Other than that this is okay, except it's not very engaging. It's like Pink Floyd without all the epic. This really needs to be over but it isn't. Sorry I'm an asshole. It sounds like you're trying, so plus five points. But the drums prevent me from getting into this so minus a million points.

Rone Rivendale - You are an artist, so you are not wrong, because I firmly believe that the artist is never wrong. But just because you invented roning doesn't mean that roning is a good idea. I can't decide which is worse. You trying to rap or you trying to sing. I'm not afraid to be negative with you because I know that negative feedback won't stop you. But I also don't really want to because I really admire your persistence. I wish I could make stuff this dissonant. I kinda think I might like some of the lyrics. But I'm not sure. I can't hear well.

Ross Durand - Oh so what if this sounds like that other song. It's clearly not that horrible song. But it's still like any other Ross song. Really well-done and mostly uninteresting to me. But like...this is still probably in the 85th percentile for this fight, so like, keep on not being a totally suckass jackass and making stuff that's way above par. Like, I think I'm going to vote for this, and draw my vote line right below it, just because it's so much better than everything else here, that even though I don't like it that much, I can still see that it deserves recognition so like VOTE.

Rycehat - Hmm this is cool off the bat. Are you already messing up? These vocals are fucking crazy. This reminds me of Tenacious D, but it's not funny or well-produced or -performed. But like. Cool name? Pretty uncompelling. Till it picks up. I guess it's okay. Like the Ross song, on the one hand, I don't like that this doesn't have any drums. But I really like that you didn't add any fake drums in a futile attempt to make the song sound like it had drums. But like...idk if I can get behind the fat-bashing. Basically, I'm fat so fuck you. It's not like I'm going to drop a bunch of N-bombs and expect to pull the black vote. So like fuck you too. I mean not that I care. I wish that you could hear the apathy in my voice. It's more that like, I probably wasn't going to vote for it, anyway, but the whole fatass whatever thing made it really easy to decide I wasn't going to, so fuck you again, you and your kinda cool bandname.

Shawn Loveless - Worse than the album Loveless by My Bloody Valentine. Minus ten thousand points. Minus eight million points for making lo-fi acoustic shitty blues. HEY EVERYBODY IS THIS THE GUY FROM BLUES TRAIN HAS HE BEEN PRACTICING WHAT THE FUCK I"M MAKING MORE BMF SONGS THIS GUY HAS INSPIRED ME RUN_ON RUN_ON SORRY THIS IS AUTOMATICALLY DQ"D FOR BEING A SHITTY PIECE OF SHIT I DON"T CARE I DON"T CARE FUCK YOU. seriously, that was bad in every way a recording can be bad get the fuck out.

Sockpuppet - I hope this is awesome. Is that the clave from sexual healing. Dude strings. I kind of heart this already. I mean it feels kinda disjointed but whatever. It sounds cool. It's just like...the strings sound so much better than anything else going on so it's got a weird vibe. Melodically reminiscent of Blue Monday. But not so similar that I'm going to whine like these dumbass pussy bitches on here do liek "OMG YER RIPPING OFF THIS BAND YOU"VE NEVER HEARD OF YOU FUCK I"D VOTE FOR YOU IF YOU WERENT SUCH A GAY PLAGIARIST YOU FUCKING DICK I HOPE YOU DIE" This part where it picks up is pretty cool but I was distracted because I was ranting. A lot of points to you for making something that sounds unique and putting effort into it and doodle doo. The lyrics sound really hokey and stupid. The line 'i think we need another take' in particular. it bothers me in oh so many ways but VOTE.

State Case and Glenn Shirt - Dude this is some awesome fucking sauce. This sauce is awesome. How can I not vote for this just based on the first 30 seconds. Glenn, you hate my music. Why do you always hate my music. I used to really like your stuff until you started hating my music so much. Maybe that's really immature, but I probably was. State, I don't really know you, but I've admired you from afar. I don't think I need to say anything about this because I like it alright and it's eight million miles above par. You guys should change your names to the ones I suggested. VOTE.

Stucco Lobster Breadbox - Cool band name. Run the Casio directly in instead of miking it because seriously what the fuck. GAWD this is lo-fi. I don't know if I can get behind it. Nothing about this is like reallllllllllly bad. But nothing is compelling either. So liek wut. Minus a million points for being so lo-fi. But you didn't do anything to gain any points so you lose. Oh wait your band name. Plus ten points.

The Weakest Suit - Man you make a lot of songs. God your drums are fake. So fake. Fucking fuck they're fake. Fuck. I can't get behind anything with drums this fake. Maybe that's not true, but I still can't get behind this. We're not so different, you and I. Oh wait, yeah we are. I guess this is a fairly cool song, structurally. I like octaves fuck yeah. Is this about internet porn. I still can't hear the words cuz I'm congested.

WTFBBS - PIZZICATO! This beat might almost be cool. Is this gonna be rap. Fuck you if you start rapping. If this is an instrumental, fuck you quite a bit less. Dude I'm gonna vote for this just because I thought you were gonna rap and you didn't rap. This is kinda lame but like I said VOTE
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Lord of Oats wrote: Rone Rivendale - You are an artist, so you are not wrong, because I firmly believe that the artist is never wrong. But just because you invented roning doesn't mean that roning is a good idea. I can't decide which is worse. You trying to rap or you trying to sing. I'm not afraid to be negative with you because I know that negative feedback won't stop you. But I also don't really want to because I really admire your persistence. I wish I could make stuff this dissonant. I kinda think I might like some of the lyrics. But I'm not sure. I can't hear well.
Thanks Oats. I appreciate that you took the time to do reviews. I remember when people used to do that in review threads.

And yes I realize I never do reviews. That is because I don't know what I am talking about. I either like something or I don't. I never know WHY.
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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Rone Rivendale wrote:
Lord of Oats wrote: Rone Rivendale - You are an artist, so you are not wrong, because I firmly believe that the artist is never wrong. But just because you invented roning doesn't mean that roning is a good idea. I can't decide which is worse. You trying to rap or you trying to sing. I'm not afraid to be negative with you because I know that negative feedback won't stop you. But I also don't really want to because I really admire your persistence. I wish I could make stuff this dissonant. I kinda think I might like some of the lyrics. But I'm not sure. I can't hear well.
Thanks Oats. I appreciate that you took the time to do reviews. I remember when people used to do that in review threads.

And yes I realize I never do reviews. That is because I don't know what I am talking about. I either like something or I don't. I never know WHY.
Mike, first of all, thank you for not reacting negatively to me being critical of your work. That shows self-confidence, which is an important aspect of being a successful artist. Now, when you say you don't know what you're talking about, it shows that you don't have too much confidence. Socrates claimed to know only the extent of his own ignorance, or something, and he was the shit.

Now, when you say that you either like something, or you don't, but you don't know why, that illuminates what is probably the biggest thing holding back your work. In stand-up comedy, one of the most important things we do is identify and refine concepts behind jokes. If you think that something is funny, but can't figure out why, we generally recommend that you either find out why it is funny, or abandon the joke, as it probably is not funny. To get an idea of what you want to write, you can analyze the jokes of comedians you like and find out why they're funny.

I was already going to say this, but in light of you comment, I really need to say this. I think you need to approach songwriting more academically. You should try to learn music theory, by whatever means necessary. If you can, try to learn from friends with musical knowledge, especially because a formal education in music is expensive as hell. But regardless of what you're able to accomplish on that front, do everything you can to ask yourself why you like what you like and what you like about it, be it songs you hear on the radio, songs you hear here, or the songs you're writing yourself. The more you can answer those questions, the easier it will be to emphasize what you think are the positive qualities in your compositions.

In the mean time, you can post your opinion of songs, even if it's just a rating of the song on a 10-point scale, and any analysis you think you can offer. It would point artists that want to pander to you in the right direction. Octothorpe famously tries to supplicate anyone and everyone who expresses dissatisfaction with their recordings, which itself isn't a terrible idea.
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Lord of Oats wrote: BLT and the Hoblit - I don't understand your sense of melody whatsoever. I want to be more negative about it because it really bothers me, but I won't because WE"VE GOTTA STAY POSITIVE. It seriously makes no sense to me in any capacity. Otherwise this is cool instrumentally except it sounds way too 90's. Fuck punctuation. Especially with this harmonica. What the hell is wrong with you guys. This sounded like some 90's funk metal until fucking Blues Traveller shows up and shits on everything. I mean that in the least negative way possible. I mean this is decent-sounding, for what it is, like actually really decent-sounding, because I really hate whatever this is, but I really like the sound of this, in some weird way. You established one of those feelgood grooves that doesn't want to end, so when it does end, it sounds really abrupt. I would have ended with a fadeout. YEAH I SAID IT YOU SHOULD HAVE GONE WITH A FADEOUT. FUCK THE ANTI-FADEOUT MOTHERFUCKERS IT WOULD HAVE BEEN A GOOD CHOICE FOR THIS SONG.
Fuck you, LoO. HaHa! Funny you say that about the ending. I had this wild ending that was pretty crazy in my opinion. Hobz thought it was too much and suggested I end it the way we did. He was right. Thanks for the review, I loved it. :lol:
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Lord of Oats wrote:
Banditt - These are like pretty good rhymes and stuff. Not particularly compelling, but it also doesn't overstay its welcome. I mean, you really do the song a great service by not trying to make a hip-hop epic out of a limited amount of material. So props on that. In retrospect, I was too nice to you. Stop making rap right now. But at least you didn't say nerdcore.


WTFBBS - PIZZICATO! This beat might almost be cool. Is this gonna be rap. Fuck you if you start rapping. If this is an instrumental, fuck you quite a bit less. Dude I'm gonna vote for this just because I thought you were gonna rap and you didn't rap. This is kinda lame but like I said VOTE
Do you hate all rap? or just Nerdcore?
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calm

down

oats


oh but also:
Lord of Oats wrote: Is that the clave from sexual healing
No idea what you're talking about. I made everything in this myself, no samples or canned loops or whatever (I am trying not to do that anymore because I'm sick of everything sounding like it came from garageband)

(and I don't know Blue Monday either)
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I didn't even proofread this. . . it's late --

In all of this, I am, as usual, often oblivious to the lyrics. Sorry about that.


Banditt - The rap is OK, but the sung parts (with the organ) are a bit flat. I like the piano and organ parts. The overdriving drums are annoying. The bass seems muddy.

Berkeley Social Scene -- The folk instrumentation gives your sound a refreshing change. The slower part makes me think of Syd Barrett, whch is a good thing; very colourful and atmospheric. I don't think I've ever heard you guys slow down like that, and I probably don't have to add that the non-busyness works for me. Overall, yet another good song.

BLT and the Hoblit - Nice edge on the guitar. I find the drums too prominent in the mix. Interesting distorted bass work. THe harmonica really adds energy. The song has character, but it's just a little long for what's in it.

Chopped Liver Meat God - Acoustic guitar slightly out of tune -- I find tuning makes a big difference to the overal impression. Playing technique could be just a little cleaner. The intro needs to be shorter. Vocals are mixed perfectly and give the song a lot of its interest. The repetitive music could have been moody, but for some reason seems incessant instead. Giving the drums and bass some reverb might bring the moodiness in.

Dale Chase - Good collage of sound, and the rhythmic play is fascinating. Great mix. A candidate for a vote.

Doug Funnie - Audio fatigue in the recording -- some distortion. The slow-singing part drags a bit; I like the design of the music but it takes too long to unfold. The coughing and other business is not as interesting as it may have seemed at the time. This one has possibilities, but isn't coming together for me.

Ffvxxvm Florvm - Singing has lots of charm. Nice blues-boogie thing, marred by occasional irregularities in the rhythm. When the song speeds up (why?), the bass recording gets a bit farty. The ending -- well, you didn't knock yourself out preparing this track. I like most of the song, but it's not memorable.

Jonathan Mann - Very convincing Leonard Cohen feel. The falsetto bit early in the song is freaky. The melodic interlude somewhere around 2:30 is pretty. Lots of little phases in this song, but perhaps too many -- by 3:50, it starts to feel directionless. with more focus this song could take on that Leonard-Cohen mesmerizing quality.

Maxo - Certainly holds my attention. The intensity of the recording is hard on the ears. The kaleidoscopic medley evokes a nightmare sequence of talent shows. You get points for even thinking of doing this.

RE:FLEXT - Much of this aims for drama, but the production is too thin to carry it. Not that I'd know how to fix that. As for the rap, I'm no expert (though at this rate I might become one), but here it sounds hammered out rather than felt.

Remus and Romulus - Is this really going to be five minutes long? Singing is frequently off-key. Some nice textures, but the song limps, in part due to the eccentric drumming (together with its flatness in the mix). That buzzing synth isn't adding anything. The song itself is cool, varied, sweetly melodic. To bring out the soaring quality it needs some work on the mix. The five minutes actually wasn't so bad, which says a lot for the quality of the song itself.

Rone Rivendale - I believe your technique is getting better, but you still have the mic pressed to your lips. As for the composition, you seem to be writing short essays -- free-verse might be the term, but I don't sense a lot of attention to poetic device-- and setting them to musically and rhytyhmically disconnected (but not random) notes, using a toy keyboard that might be an artistic choice, or just what's available. Apart from encouraging you to record it better, I don't have much to say. The music doesn't engage me emotionally. Intellectually the elusive pattern offers promise, like a riddle to be solved, but not the complexity to really draw me in.

Ross Durand - Develops a nice tinkly texture. As usual, I notice your lyrics. Now that could be because the music is of a type so well-established that I can safely ignore it. And there's truth to that. But really I think it's because your words are simple, yet deeply evocative.

Rycehat - Here the lyrics are very out-front in the mix and sung with a lot of character, and kind of funny to boot, so I pick up on them. The music seems like a vehicle for them. Some thought has gone into it, but it sorts of floats along under the words, with no repeated sections, like a stream of consciousness.

Shawn Loveless - Wretched recording. The tinny vocals drill right into my ears, and the guitar sounds like it's being played in a stairwell. Straightforward blues riffing, so not much to remark on there. Convincingly performed. Not too long.

Sockpuppet - Rich layering, strong major harmonies. This is a drone. Was it you who said something about that in the prefight thread? Sustains interest, except in the middle where it seems to flag a bit (just before the funy guitar is introduced.)

State Shirt and Glenn Case - Good song -- interesting melodies and rhythms, nice build-up. The production gets a little overwhelming during the chorus. Apart from that, the textures are pretty and they have energy and tension. Singing is excellent. Could be a vote.

Stucco LObster Breadbox - An entertaining ditty, good command of the lyrics. You get a lot out of that cheesy keyboard.

The Weakest Suit - Nice sound, good thick bass for this song, toe-tapping rhythm. The singing is sometimes a little weak. A possible vote, just because it's so infectious.

WTFBBS - Intro is a bit long, I'm waiting for the singing -- oh, is this an instrumental? Well no, it's a rap track, but you forgot the rap. Repetitive sampled rap tracks I can understand and forgive as part of the nature of rap, but now I see that you really need a good rap to make it work. See, I am learning about rap. But for you, the delivery has been an issue. Are you recalibrating?
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AJOwens wrote: BLT and the Hoblit - Nice edge on the guitar. I find the drums too prominent in the mix. Interesting distorted bass work. THe harmonica really adds energy. The song has character, but it's just a little long for what's in it.
This song is really about the groove, so the punchy boop boop bap drums and bass were kind of the key in my mind. I also felt that more fat could have been trimmed out of this song. It was pushing 5 minutes when I first laid it out because of the slow bbm. Then I started trimming. The only other thing I feel I could have done is go right into the final chorus after the harmonica bridge. Which in hindsight might not have been a bad idea. It finished at just under 3:30 minutes, but I'd like it to be under 3:00.
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fluffy wrote:
(and I don't know Blue Monday either)
Are you sure? New Order? Biggest selling 12" Single of all time?
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Oh. I thought he was talking about a band, because he wasn't very lucid and I hear absolutely no resemblance between my song and that except maybe a couple of superficial and transitory similarities in the vocal melody.
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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I did a video for Double take:

for best quality:

http://www.vimeo.com/10250085

for high utility:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ntMnk_VaxFE

good fight everyone!
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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congratulations doug!
maxo...:lol:...i can't stop laughing!
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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I hope my reviews (especially of Maxo's) make a lot more sense now. ;)
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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Meh, nothing's stopping anyone from doing what I did. I'm still taking this as a victory. Good job to everyone else too though!
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You are missing the point. Anyone is allowed to promote the fight on their blogs, myspace, facebook, whatever. But you publicly told all your friends to vote for you no matter what even if your song was the worst in the bunch. That's why you didn't get to win offically.
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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What exactly do you think you won?
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I won my name on the front page for over a week.

I was kind of joking about that post, I wasn't actually trying to be that much of a dick. I think only like 5 or 10 of my friends actually went and voted though. Most people on facebook ignore that kind of stuff. Besides, I don't really care at this point, my name's gonna be on the front page for a week or so, so free exposure!

Sorry if that sounded like a dickish thing to do, I meant it as a joke, and I wasn't expecting anyone here to find the facebook post. No disrespect, really! I wasn't actually expecting to get that many votes.
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Maxo wrote:Meh, nothing's stopping anyone from doing what I did. I'm still taking this as a victory. Good job to everyone else too though!
No one is stopping you from putting a gun to your head either, and yet you refrain from doing it. Some people have more self-control in one part of their life and less in others.

BTW, just so you know, SongFight! has no rule against promoting your song. It's good advertising for us, and it helps to build the community. I just found your admonition not to vote for the others a bit distasteful. But you know, carry on, dude.

-edit, thanks for the above, but you might find that facebook has a bigger audience than you think.
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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Spud wrote:
Maxo wrote:Meh, nothing's stopping anyone from doing what I did. I'm still taking this as a victory. Good job to everyone else too though!
No one is stopping you from putting a gun to your head either, and yet you refrain from doing it. Some people have more self-control in one part of their life and less in others.

BTW, just so you know, SongFight! has no rule against promoting your song. It's good advertising for us, and it helps to build the community. I just found your admonition not to vote for the others a bit distasteful. But you know, carry on, dude.

-edit, thanks for the above, but you might find that facebook has a bigger audience than you think.
I totally understand, if I was in your position I would have done the same thing. It was a bit distasteful, again I was joking, but I gotta remember that sarcasm doesn't translate well over the internet. Sorry if I offended anyone!
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Maxo wrote:... I wasn't expecting anyone here to find the facebook post.
Well, you learned something, huh? Facebook is a public place, and we have a lot of eyes.
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Re: Take two. Hell, take the whole lot. (double take reviews)

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Great, one more irregularity in the archive data... :roll:
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