Butterskoskostage: Nice dance/house-like groove, but the vocoder starts to get old too soon. I could see this working really well with a mix between normal singing and the vocoder. I could see this working really well with some female vocals in the mix. Unfortunately, the song just seems to be a bit too long.
Electrocushin: This isn't really doing anything for me. It sets up a nice mood, but it just doesn't move. It seems like it should have another part maybe?
Feldspar: The lyrics draw up some nice imagery with me. Seems to be just the right length, too. Is that some vocal harmony at the beginning? Not sure. The song seems all right to me, not a total stand-out, but not bad either.
I have a lawnmower that will eat your soul: This doesn't sound too bad, but the mix/mastering is pretty bad. I really can't critique the lyrics as the vocals are too quiet.
Justio Von Awesome: This sets up an interesting mood, but it just doesn't go anywhere with it. I'm just not really digging it.
Kamakure: Ohh, church organ. I like the beginning, but the lyrics... well, umm, isn't the whole point of the Bible that God forgave mankind even for killing his only son? This would sound better with some better drum samples or real drums. Maybe even if another instrument came in later in the song. This, for some reason, reminds me of some of the later Roger Waters stuff.
Luke Henley... Naked: When I first listened to this, I wasn't sure if that was a drum or someone banging on the guitar. Now that I'm listening on better speakers, I think it is a drum. This sounds like it was recorded with one microphone in a room with everyone playing. I think there is some good stuff here, but the mix makes it difficult to make that out. I'd love to hear the lyrics better. I'm not sure what they mean, but I kind of like them. (If that makes any sense?) OK, I could do without the "freak-out" in the middle/end of the song. Somehow, this reminds me of early Pink Floyd... not sure why. The coughing could go, too.
Max the Cat: Maybe it's just all the talk of God, but this reminds me of Roger Water's "What God Wants." I don't know, but that is now stuck in my mind and clouding my judgement. I like your singing, though--it fits the song very well.
Neil Thrun and the Doom Fairies: Mad Cow Disease? It sounds like the vocals are clipping at some different points at the beginning. The lyrics are just really strange. That's all I have to say.
Sissy Savage: I'm digging the rhythm on this. The drums/guitar fit together really well. This gives me kind of a 60's flashback theme to it. I like the "uh-huh's." I don't like the answering machine parts--I think this would work better with some real lyrics, but that's just me. I kind of like the tune, though, it is catchy. Unfortunately, the ending vocals kind of annoy me.
Song Fight Orchestra: I like the idea behind this and that it is even in Latin, but the vocals aren't meshing. I think it would sound better if it sounded like a religious chant. (And then went into a good techno/house drum pattern like Enigma... Oh, I digress
I can't critique the lyrics--I had Latin way too long ago and I never really paid attention.Unicorn: I like the bluesy feel to this. The dirty growly vocals fit this style well. I kind of like this.
Some responses to a few comments on mine:
Yeah, I wrote the song with the expectation of having real drums. The drummer for my band was very interested and wanted to do something "heavy" so I put this together. Unfortunately, he bailed on me at the last minute so I had to settle for having the synthesized drums.WeaselSlayer wrote:I think this song would benefit greatly from real drums.
Yes, that was my intent, actually. I really went into some stereotypes here for the genre which probably brought the song down a bit, but made it a bit more fun to play.It gets a little peppier I guess after that, and a little Stooges-y.
I haven't a clue what that comment means in relation to the song. While I am not a psychologist, my understanding of autism is an affliction with symptoms that include traits of being obsessive-compulsive and being socially inept, but being extraordinarily gifted in a specific area such as mathematics or music. I pretty much know you're not going to like any of my songs and I expected you to hate this one even before I did anything, so I'm not shocked.EightLeggedOedipus wrote:--- Holy crap, are you autistic? ---
Thanks.j$ wrote:great music.
My intent was that "God Will Give You Blood to Drink" sounded like a heavy metal song. I generally don't play metal, but thought something along the lines of Pink Floyd's "The Nile Song" would sound pretty good for this song.
Oh, I don't think you have a dig--I love your feedback as it gives me good, usable advice. I was actually thinking this song would've worked out a lot better (style-wise, at least) if the vocals didn't drag on and were more of a screamed vocal line. I just needed to think of that last week.j$ wrote:When you don't drag out the syllables (as in the chorus) then it sounds much better than when you do. I have this problem too so please don't think I am having a dig.
