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gramparsons wrote:
Steve Durand – Really great song. Great concept, the dry vocals are effective. The arrangement is good, but the rhythm sounds a bit off. Am I crazy? It’s my only fault with it. Are those real horns, by the way?

Thanks for the nice comments. Yeah, real horns.
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Steve Durand: Those horns sound great. I used to be in a band with horns. The people who played them were strange and unclean, but some of the friendliest people I’ve ever met. Anyway, I like this quite a bit. The “we have the technologyâ€
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Post by jack »

boss mcgravity
singer certainly displays talent, and you make the most of the lo-fi production, with some nice harmony vocals. guitar sounds a bit out of tune. but the main vocal line coupled with the busy arrangement really requires alot of effort to follow. this kind of sounds like lo-fi JB. this would have been more effective too cut in half time wise.

the ill cricket crew
this is pretty good. real solid production and arrangement. rap is pretty good too for what it is. it's got good flow, it kind of lacks the sarcasm of frontalot but it's still really well done. i wish you'd added some other vocal elements to support the verse flows, or throw in some horns or scratches to kind of break up the drums, synth and bass. yeah, pretty solid effort for nerd rap. not something i'd buy a CD of but you did the genre well.

big mountain fudge cake
for someone who talks alot of dook you can sure back it up with alot of dook.

eclectic spoons
man, thats gotta be the longest intro in the history of songfight

luke henley
the microphone meltdown made me run away

sevateem
sorry but it's not doing anything for me. it's like kraftwerk lite. and repeating the title as the chorus doesn't quite constitute a song connection for me.

the IPA
i'm digging this, especially the arrangement with acoustics, congas, and casio trilling. and the accordian or concertina or whatever that is is nice too. arrangement gets pretty repetitive but you break it up ok with dynamics. now if the casio started riffin stairway or watchtower after the breakdown, you'd have nailed my vote. but this is ok for a stoner jam tune, maybe a bit long.

caravan ray
seriously drowning in reverb. lay off that shit.

mankind
a tuba and piano tune. thats gotta be the start of a whole new genre of music. fartcore?

jordan seavers
are you really big mountain fudge cake?

klownhole
it's got the typical klownhole wall of sound but the lyrics and vox are so buried, it's hard to get into the meaning of it. typically killer klownhole wall of sound.

balls to monte
this is a really beautiful recording. i hate to sound grinchy but i'm not big on christmas tunes, so content wise and lyrically, the song's kind of meh for me, but the recording and playing on this is really excellent.

rio mondo
nah. not doing it for me.

chuck chuck moose
the backing mix is pretty good (once i get past the intro) but honestly, the rap sounds like what i imagine k-fed sounding like.

star command
i like this. the mix is pretty solid for techno, but it has a real good old school/analog/cure feel to it, and the vocals do too, as you accent that nicely with the reverb and delay. lyrically, it's not doing much for me but the package sounds pretty good.

ross durand
really excellent in a john prine sort of way. i like the arrangement alot, how you bring things in at different times to give it dynamics while keeping a nice simple feel to it. lyrically, i'm not quite sure what you're going for, as the verse seems to list thing that are possible and the chorus just reinforces that with the title but maybe i'm missing the point somewhere. but i'm usually not that big on lyrics, more on hooks and you've got a nice hooky chorus so good for you.

steve durand
ah yes, love the horny durand. this is pretty cool, has this sort of talking heads 77 feel to it with the guitar and quirky vocals in the verse. but man, i'd love to hear some horn fills in the verses. yeah, singing is pretty good, and confident which makes it better i think. nice job steve durand.

phunt your friends
it just seems too much of an inside joke. the laugh at the end just re-affirms this.

melvin
i'd be surprised if you didn't submit an excellent tune. solid in every way. melvin is the weezer of songfight.


steve durand gets my vote.
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Post by jseavers05 »

are you really big mountain fudge cake?
sadly and truely... im not. but sometimes i pretend to be when im at the park. that may be part of the confusion.
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Post by bigmountainfudgecake »

Leaf wrote:Isn't bigmountainfudgecake really Josh?
Woodward? We kicked that pansy-ass out of the band long ago. He wanted to play his pussy acoustic guitar and kept drinking our MD 20/20 (you don't fuck with the Fudge Cake's Mad Dog). The only reason we invited him in the first place was to pull in his fangirls.

Come to think of it, I don't think any of us ever told him he's out of the band, so he probably still thinks he's in. Hahah, asshole.
It's <a href=http://www.bigmountainfudgecake.com/>Big Mountain Fudge Cake</a>, bitch.
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Post by Pierre Menand »

Actually ran through all the songs this time... First time in weeks. From the top:

Ballstomonte - Apparently the technology does not include ID3 tags. Vocals are a little low. Is the didactic anticonsumerism ironic?
Big Mountain Fudge Cake - Short and sweet. Reminds me of R Stevie Moore, but not enough to get my vote.
Boss McGravity - Like the harmony vocals, section from 2:10 - 2:37 is great. Might be best to end it at 3:06. Like the film of the Unbearable Lightness of Being, everything after a certain point doesn't add much for me.
Caravan Ray - Again, great while it has that spy/swamp thing going on. Then that high pitched noise starts and it goes downhill.
Chuck Chuck Moose - Not latching onto anything here.
eclecticspoons - Same here. Like the thumping noise, but this isn't really aimless enough for my taste.
The Ill Cricket Crew - Like the chirping synth. The rest seems a bit forced to my ears.
IPA - Love the bells. You should have more bells. This perked up my ears. Cheesy in all the best ways.
Johnny Cashpoint - Best lyrics thus far. Well put together. A fine song.
Jordan Seavers - Not working for me.
Klownhole - Except for the fact that it's too fast, I'm really happy with this. Not the best song in the fight (sigh), but the Stan Ridgway vs. Sebastian Bach over Sleep vibe works as well as can be expected. Also, note the wall of basses in the chorus. Who needs guitars? Apparently not Klownhole.
Luke Henley - Hmm. Like the rumbling noise.
Mankind - Where is Randy Newman when you need him? I had really high hopes for this, but the lack of vocals lets the piano down. Love the horn, but more of a ditty than a song.
Melvin - Another great entry, but like some of the other entries this seems to have an extra part that just slows it down. Can't read my note, so I'll just say the spare bridge.
Phunt Your Friends - I love pirate songs. So this moves up. But it doesn't do much for me beyond that.
riomondo - Reminds me of the Landfills, and will stick around a while. But pales in comparison to
Ross Durand - Works all the way around. Great recording, a good rerun of a topic that is addressed several times in the fight, but manages to remind me of two of my favorite records at once (Pete Seeger's Rainbow Race and Sheik Yerbouti by Frank Zappa). Easily the best thing.
Sevateem - Reminds me of Jean-Michele Jarre. Not in a good way.
Starcommand - Doesn't get moving as often as it should. Some of the sounds are great, especially the patch that comes in at 3:20 or so. Like those last two minutes a lot.
Steven Durand - Love the horns. The guitar sounds a little muted - a little compression and a little push on the click would make it a lot funkier. The call and response is a good idea, but just not as good as the other Durand.

No question here. Ross by a decent way.
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Post by posyden »

Steve Durand...this reminds me of the Movie "The Brave Little Toaster" the way the song is written and the way the voices come in...

you get my vote this week
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Post by jack »

hey johnny, i don't know how i missed your tune in my reviews but i assure you my cornermate, it was unintentional.... :)

Johnny Cashpoint
man, this is really solid. excellent arrangement and your vocal work is very strong, including all the harmony stuff. i may have to vote for you this week as well. ;)

excellent job on the tune j$
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Pierre Menand wrote:
Klownhole - Except for the fact that it's too fast, I'm really happy with this. Not the best song in the fight (sigh), but the Stan Ridgway vs. Sebastian Bach over Sleep vibe works as well as can be expected. Also, note the wall of basses in the chorus. Who needs guitars? Apparently not Klownhole.
We love you. You are now an honorary member of Klownhole. You might be able to get an ointment from the doctor to cure you of that problem.

There are at least three very important truths stated here. One, the Sebastian Bach reference is spot on. The guy who did the Bach vocals is a huge fan of Sebastian Bach and even looks and acts like him. Two, too fast. Absolutely. You can't get slow enough. Three, who needs guitars? Nobody. You couldn't be more right. More basses, more often, for longer.

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Post by j$ »

sdurand wrote:
j$ wrote:
Voting for Steve Durand.
Thanks, Johnny. I guess that means I'll finish second.
Ain't that the truth? :) Would it help if I said I hadn't voted for you? Even though I did? :)
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Post by Damien Verrett (Jonas) »

Go Jordan

I'll review the others later.
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Post by chuckstas »

Balls to Monte-I loved the intro to this song. It took me a couple listens to figure out the arrangement of the song. It seems like there's two extra measures that take away from the flow of the song after the "yeah's" at the end of the choruses, but that's being pretty particular. This song is <good>.

bigmountainfudgecake-Cool bass at the end, but not really a song.

McGravity-The guitar on his sounds like crap, but once I got over that I realized that this was a pretty good song. Like the harmony and the background "ahh's" a lot. Work on getting that guitar to sound more alive. I think it sounds like you're strumming too hard, as well.

Caravan Ray-You're mixes always turn me off, especially the way you do your vocals, but it sounds like that's intentional seeing how they're always that way. I like the chorus a lot, but the verses are pretty dull. This is <okay>.>

Chuck Chuck Moose-I did the instrumentals and the verses. Chuck #2 lent his voice to the chorus, as usual. I thought this was one of my better fights, but no one else seems to be a big fan. Go figure.

Eclectic Spoons- This is a pretty cool groove, but that's all it is. I like the vocal samples that sound like talking over an intercom or something.

The Ill Cricket Crew- Man, this is funky. The lyrics seem pretty ridiculous. The mix and production are pretty awesome on this, and I love the weird key change at the end of the second rapper's verse. The first and last guy's are my favorite rapper's, but the third guy has that awesome line, "What's the use. Technology's got nothin' on Dr. Seuss". This is <excellent>.

IPA-That acoustic sounds nice, and I also like that synth/organ in my right ear. Extra points for the Rock n' Roll robots who will "rock my face", but negative points for that annoying, out of tune instrument in my left ear. This song isn't bad, but it's outstays its welcome. <okay>

Johnny Cashpoint-Pretty good, I think this is my favorite song of yours so far that I've heard. You're vocals are less appealing because of all that processing. This song is <ok>, but it's a little too sing songy.

Jordan Seavers-Why'd you leave that noise and throat clearing at the beginning? That being said, I love when you bring the rock all of a sudden. You know how to write a great pop song, and you have an extremely likeable voice. This is <excellent>.

Klownhole-What's a blumpkin? I appreciate the intensity, but the song doesn't really appeal to me at all. <below average>.

Luke Henley-This recording is really noisy. The guitar playing is also pretty sloppy. I like how emotional the vocals are, though. That's about the only good thing I can say about this. Don't blow on your mic, it can damage them (unless it's a moving coil, then not such a worry). This is <below average>.

Mankind- The piano sounds great, I had really high expectations at the start. Then the horn came in, and I got a little worried. Then nothing else came in, and I gave up. This is <below average>.

Melvin-Usual good mix and production, but the songwriting just isn't as good as I've heard from you before. It's not grabbing me. This is <okay>.

Phunt-I listened to the whole thing. I don't know, sorry, I can't think of helpful to say.

Rio Mondo- This is hilarious. Thanks for making me laugh. This is <good>.

Ross Durand-This is well recorded, mixed, etc., I just don't really like it. Sorry if that's unfair. This is <okay>.

Sevateem- Quit it with the creepy German girl! This is really repetitive, I guess that's part of the style for this music, but I just can't really abide it. This is <below average>.

Star Command-Oh yeah. I love the instrumentals. I feel like the vocals sit on the fence between sung and spoken and you should make up your mind which you're doing. The mix seems like everything is just at the same level, which detracts a little. This is <good>.

Steve Durand-That guitar sounds a little sloppy. Horns are always cool, though, and I like the vocal panning a lot. This is <okay>.
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Post by Smalltown Mike »

Big Mountain Fudge Cake

I was looking forward to this, because I really dug your God Hates Penguins. And this is good, but in the context of your three songs (New Sex) there’s not a whole lot of variety. I know that’s the point, but still. But you’ve got the trashtalking down, I think.

Boss McGravity

It’s too bad the recording quality is low, because the song is pretty good. Very Barenaked Ladies. Nice.

Caravan Ray

The music is really buried, and the whole mix is really muddy. But I dig the chorus. I wonder what this song would sound like a little faster? Faster, I bet.

Chuck Chuck Moose

That long intro almost lost me, and I don’t think it’s really all that necessary (the intro, that is, not to lose me.) This is really great. Love it. Some variation in line lengths in your vocals would make this even funkier, letting lines carry onto the next line, etc. The vocals also need to be brought forward a little bit, too, because they’re a little hard to hear. But I really like this. Dig those crazy instruments and blips. The chorus lyrics seem a little obvious and blunt, but hey, it’s a good sentiment so why not? It would have been nice to hear the chorus more than once.

IPA

Nice synth mixed in with the acoustic. Or is that a accordian? Was this recorded live? Good song, and it would benefit greatly from a better recording. I don’t love this, but there are some great parts in here. Rock and roll robots would rock your face, wouldn’t they?

Johnny Cashpoint

Nice intro, though the snare sounds a little too ratatatat and not real enough. Your circuits are smoking is a good line. Something about the guitar is grating, even when it first somes in. I don’t dig the “oh yeahsâ€
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Post by nyjm »

big mountain fudge cake
--- joke ---

klownhole
--- intro ---

mankind
/// drums and tuba called and are waiting out back to kick your ass ///

phunt your friends
--- i want my fifteen seconds back ---

boss mcgravity
--- ukele or guitar ---
--- vox in the carboard closet ---
+++ lyrics +++

caravan ray
--- reverb overload ---

eclectic spoons
/// interesting audio assault ///
/// audio montage techno mix ///
--- good but not interesting ---

IPA
+++ good intro build... +++
--- ...that's too long ---
--- vox ---
--- lyrics ---

rio mondo
--- spoken intro ---
+++ outlandish humor +++
--- singing ---

sevateem
/// another techno audio montage ///

balls to monte
--- tags ---
+++ guitar arrangement +++
+++ riff +++
+++ vox (harmonies) +++

chuck chuck moose
/// the first :58 seconds - interesting but superfluous ///
+++ atmosphere +++
--- bored vocals ---

the ill cricket crew
+++ good solid rap +++
--- the chorus needs more oomph --

jordan seavers
--- panned guitars seem schziophrenic ---
+++ interesting change +++
/// reminds me of matthew sweet ///

melvin
+++ guitar riffs +++
--- trite lyrics ---
+++ backing chorus vox +++

star command
+++ techno intro that gets right to it +++
--- vox are bored ---
+++ lyrics +++
--- singing is spotty ---

johnny cashpoint
+++ good intro build +++
+++ makes me want to dance +++
+++ breakdown +++

luke henley
+++ simplicity +++
+++ authenticity +++
+++ daring to add pure mic noise at the end +++
/// would have been a great addition to the "last days" soundtrack ///

ross durand
/// mix is soft ///
+++ arrangement crescendo +++
/// i'm not sold on the direct approach of the lyrics ///

steve durand
/// i recognize that horn riff ///
+++ chorus... +++
--- ... is too long ---
+++ ending +++
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Re: Reviews

Post by Pierre Menand »

Meatwad wrote:
Pierre Menand wrote:
Klownhole - Except for the fact that it's too fast, I'm really happy with this. Not the best song in the fight (sigh), but the Stan Ridgway vs. Sebastian Bach over Sleep vibe works as well as can be expected. Also, note the wall of basses in the chorus. Who needs guitars? Apparently not Klownhole.
We love you. You are now an honorary member of Klownhole. You might be able to get an ointment from the doctor to cure you of that problem.

There are at least three very important truths stated here. One, the Sebastian Bach reference is spot on. The guy who did the Bach vocals is a huge fan of Sebastian Bach and even looks and acts like him. Two, too fast. Absolutely. You can't get slow enough. Three, who needs guitars? Nobody. You couldn't be more right. More basses, more often, for longer.

Come by some time so you can be fitted for your Klownhole jumpsuit with special pockets to hold your bladders of booze.
I'm pretty proud to be an honorary member. Even more proud than the last seven years of showing up to get drunk with the real members. Too busy looking for tonic water to throw on the jumpsuit, though.
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Re: Reviews

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Pierre Menand wrote:
Meatwad wrote:
Pierre Menand wrote:
Klownhole - Except for the fact that it's too fast, I'm really happy with this. Not the best song in the fight (sigh), but the Stan Ridgway vs. Sebastian Bach over Sleep vibe works as well as can be expected. Also, note the wall of basses in the chorus. Who needs guitars? Apparently not Klownhole.
We love you. You are now an honorary member of Klownhole. You might be able to get an ointment from the doctor to cure you of that problem.

There are at least three very important truths stated here. One, the Sebastian Bach reference is spot on. The guy who did the Bach vocals is a huge fan of Sebastian Bach and even looks and acts like him. Two, too fast. Absolutely. You can't get slow enough. Three, who needs guitars? Nobody. You couldn't be more right. More basses, more often, for longer.

Come by some time so you can be fitted for your Klownhole jumpsuit with special pockets to hold your bladders of booze.
I'm pretty proud to be an honorary member. Even more proud than the last seven years of showing up to get drunk with the real members. Too busy looking for tonic water to throw on the jumpsuit, though.
See kids? This is what booze does to your brain. I didn't even recognize Pierre as one of my jumpsuit-wearing brethren. I guess we truly are alone after all.
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Post by a bebop a rebop »

balls to monte - that voice is annoying me. And now there's more than one. The music sounds just fine. The voice is more palatable around 1:05, I'm not really sure why, but it sounds more honest and less put-on. Overall, the music is nice, but I don't care for the song.

big mountain fudge cake - neato.

boss mcgravity - sounds kinda cheesy, like a salesman with a guitar. I hope this was intentional, what with the shoo-wops and all. Kinda funny.

caravan ray - I like those noises, and I love your voice in this setting. This song has a gritty feel that I absolutely love. Cheesy lyrics for sure... but they sound just fine here, I don't know why. Maybe because your delivery is so honest-sounding. Love it, possible vote.

chuck chuck moose - the sound at the beginning is pretty neat but the toybox percussion was pretty annoying until that bass and synth came in... now it sounds like drive-by music. That's a compliment. I don't particularly care for your rap delivery but this is still ominous as hell. Are you really a crack dealer? I like the sung verse quite a bit. I like the song, it's just all-in-all a bit repetitive.

the eclectic spoons - this is neat-sounding. I feel like it captures the spirit of the title in some sense. Ultimately it's just too samey all the way through. Good noises though, sounds quite professional to my untrained ears.

the ill cricket crew - sounds fine. Nicely produced and humorously rapped, I guess. But whatever, it didn't do much for me.

ipa - goofy. I'm getting tired of goofiness. I guess the title invites it.

johnny cashpoint - I like your voice. I don't really care for the toybox drumming, especially when you make it blazingly obvious with that snare drum all the way to the end. It's catchy and I like it, but again, too cheesy for me.

jordan seavers - The intro is nice but that drumming is pretty annoying. The song sounds just fine and I like your voice just fine. Thanks for not mentioning robots. The song's just fine.

klownhole - more authentically cheesy than anything else I've heard just yet, except for caravan ray. A fine effort but damn, this is just way too long for what it is.

luke henley - finally, a serious song in this fight. I like the chorus a lot, your delivery is perfect for it. The microphone explosions are annoying, maybe put them lower in the mix or cut them out entirely, it doesn't really need them.

mankind - I don't really know what this means. It sounds just fine, but the piano is getting on my nerves without anything to take my mind off it except a drunkenly mumbling trombone.

melvin - get some new chord progressions. You have a very specific style. Catchy enough. Also, perhaps your voice doesn't need to duplicate the bass guitar line for half of the song.

phunt your friends - the non-pirate-y voice seems kinda out of place here. It ought to be more pirate-y. I love the other voice though. Kinda funny but it doesn't hold my interest enough to get a vote.

rio mondo - this is the first one to actually get a chuckle out of me, kudos. Quite a few chuckles actually. I can't in good conscience vote for this one ahead of caravan ray, but it's definitely funny.

ross durand - hey, mr. piano man. A fine song, actually, though I don't really care for the lyrics. A bit plain-spoken, perhaps, for my taste. It all sounds just fine, anyway, just not doing much for me.

sevateem - interesting noises all, and it's produced just fine. Kraftwerk occurs to me, although that's probably mostly the accented vocals at the end that's doing that. It's a bit boring though.

starcommand - I don't really care for the voice in this song, doesn't feel like it fits, perhaps because it doesn't sound very honest. The music seems kinda empty as well. I don't know, I kind of like a lot of the individual sections but the voice is turning me off.

steve durand - The call-and-response sounds kinda silly. I think your voice could stand to be a little bit more clipped, it feels to me like you're hanging on to everything a bit too long. I don't really care for the lyrics, but then, I don't care for a lot of lyrics in this fight. Good song, but it's all a little bit goofy, and goofy is really getting me down right now.

Caravan Ray, definitely. For the number of songs in this fight, I was a bit disappointed overall. I think the title lent itself well to goofiness.

EDIT: I find it kind of strange that I'm the only one who digs that Caravan Ray super-reverbed sound. I just wanted to reaffirm my diggage. I dig.
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Post by jseavers05 »

balls to monte - hey. good song. i think it would sound cooler with a little less reverb on the stuff. just a little bit. i think there could be some little improvements on the mixing and mastering, but the song itself is written very well. good job.

big mountain fudge cake - dude that song is rad. even though its only like 27 seconds. if it was longer id totally save it onto my computer and listen to it all the time. it reminds me of something that would be on one of the tony hawk games. haha, cool stuff but a little too short. i wanna hear more stuff from you.

boss mcgravity - fun little song. i dont really know what else to say about the song. the "shoo - ops" and some other vocals seem a little corney at parts, but overall i think you did a good job on your song

caravan ray - hey. nice song sorta. i know that other guy liked the reverb but i think it is a little too much. its sorta drained out with the reverb. i think that giving it a more full sound would have helped. the song itself isnt that bad. but i think that it seemed a little empty to me. i think that with a few tweaks to the production it could sound a little more full and grab my attention more. good job though.

chuck chuck moose - i think the production of this song was good. i dont know what to say about it really. its not my favorite, but i think you did a good job with the song.

the eclectic spoons - i think that this song would be cool if it actually went into a song. it seems like its an intro to a song, but the intro is forever long... and then the song never starts. anyways, it sounds cool, but its more like something id hear for a video game or something.

the ill cricket crew - i think the first 5 seconds of the song sounds awesome. im not a big fan of the rap stuff, but i think that you did an alright job with the song.

ipa - the organ and bongos are cool. same with the solo thingy at like 3 minutes. the accordion isnt in tune with the rest of the instruments, but i think you dont care.

johnny cashpoint - the beginning of the song sounds really cool. the effect you used on some of the vocals doesnt really sound that cool. i think overall you did a good job on your song.

jordan seavers - haha, so thanks for all the reviews ive gotten so far for my song. some of them are pretty funny. thanks to all the cool kids who complimented on my song.

klownhole - i think like 6 minutes of this stuff got a little old. just a little too much noise. just not my style i guess.

luke henley - i think this song was alright. it was kinda crazy when you started blowing into the microphone. but i kinda like the tone of vocals

mankind - dude. this is so cool. it totally sounded like like some sucky broadway song at the beginning, but then the trumbone came in and then it got super rad. haha, its cool

melvin - haha, dude, some of your reviews youve gotten for this song are kinda funny. i think that your songs are mega ultra fresh, and i hope youre ugly too. awesome song.

phunt your friends - sounds like it was fun to record i guess. kinda boring though

rio mondo - sounds fun...

ross durand - we can see tumors in the brain is right. i think the song was recorded well. i dont know what else to say. good job kiddo.

sevateem - haha, dude... pretty crazy

starcommand - i think some of the synth on this song is pretty cool. i think that the vocals dont really blend with the rest of the song. maybe cause the the vocals have a lot of reverb and the rest of the song is really dry. but after overall, i think the song is pretty neat and unique

steve durand - i dont know what to say about the song. i guess it kinda reminds me of something off of bill nye. but bill nye has some fun little songs.
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Post by jack »

you used the word "cool" or some derivative of it 11 times. cool. ;)
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Post by genecawley »

jseavers05 wrote:balls to monte - hey. good song. i think it would sound cooler with a little less reverb on the stuff. just a little bit. i think there could be some little improvements on the mixing and mastering, but the song itself is written very well. good job.
Thanks. Your song was really great (as mentioned before). You got my vote anyway.
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Post by drunkenshakespeare »

jordan seavers- great job. you should post to somesongs, i am sure people would dig it

jc- great use of the title. I dig the efx on the vox, what is that? You might have just snagged my vote from jordan. Not that it matters really i am always too late for these things. post this on somesongs.

bmfc- great name

phunt everybody- outstanding

melvin- very nice and bouncy

boss mcgravity- i would have liked you to stay with the feel at the beginning a little longer, but i still liked it.

ccm- i dont dig

eclectic spoons- too eclectic or maybe too electronic. i don't know. same thing really.

the ill ....- pretty cool. but i began to lose interest at the end.

my vote goes to jc
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drunkenshakespeare wrote:ccm- i dont dig
Thanks, man. That insightful kind of feeback will definately help me improve as a songwriter.
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Post by jb »

Ok, I'm about sick of people whining when they get a comment that's not an in-depth analysis of where they went wrong in their song.

If you get a review that says only "I don't dig", SUCK IT UP. If you really want to use your reviews for something other than ego-stroking masturbation, then look at the songs the reviewer DID like, and analyze your own song accordingly. If Drunkenshakespeare usually likes one sort of song over another, and yours fits into the category he doesn't like, then you can say "hmmm, this doesn't transcend genre bias". If Drunkenshakespeare usually likes the kind of song you made, then you should think about what's different this time that he may not have liked. Lyrics? Melody? Production? The answer is probably obvious.

I'M ALMOST POSITIVE I'VE EXPLAINED THIS BEFORE. NEXT TIME I'LL BE EVEN MORE CRUEL AND CUTTING.

If you don't want to do that work, fine, I understand. I probably won't either. But stop fucking complaining. EVERYBODY, stop fucking complaining, when you get a short, "useless" review. It's ALL TOO OBVIOUS that you're just whining because somebody didn't like your song and said so out loud. Nobody has ever complained because someone said "AWESOME" about their song. Don't be a punk.

Happy New Year,

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