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Jim Fallope and the Fallopians = yeah! sorta like a showtune but funky and completely undanceable. fine by me!

Jim Fallope and the Fallopians:

I initially wasn't disappointed your song didn't work - because it is often that case that a band with a great name will have a crap song. Happily you disprove this rule. Great little tune with a fun sound. Worth the wait.

stueym wrote:I approve of the new stern dominatrix style of the administration

...and your avatar features a straitjacket. Do you own a lot of leather by any chance?

Caravanray wrote:

stueym wrote:I approve of the new stern dominatrix style of the administration

...and your avatar features a straitjacket. Do you own a lot of leather by any chance?

<Sniffs deeply>....mmmmh...freshly tanned cowhide!!!! wears well and cleans easily

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YES! i found them! thanks!

Here is my appology of sorts, I've learned my lesson.

"of sorts" being the operative phrase, I suppose?

Asperse - The verse is pretty catchy, but I had to try really hard to overlook some of the production on this one. In the times between the chorus, I couldn't tell what was going on.

Basket of Hands - This one was kind of fun to listen to. I think you guys acheived exactly what you were going for.

Destruction Enterprise - I could see this being a lot better if you picked a spooky organ effect from your keyboard instead of the synth strings. As far as the rapping goes... I don't think it's good.

@eclectic sp00ns - The repetitive sampling of the vocals was kind of cool at first, but I guess I got pretty annoyed of it by the end. Although I did like having the low vocals first time through then high vocals the second time then both the thrid time.

Hostess Mostess - As this one starts it totally reminds me of Riding to Jaipur by Paul McCartney, then as it progresses it sounds like some of Paul Simon's stuff. So that's pretty awesome. Good stuff.

Jeff Travis Henderson - I got this kid to play with me on this track: http://people.wwc.edu/staff/stirra/NiQi ... corder.jpg

Jim Fallope and His Falloppian Dudes - This isn't a bad tune. If it came up on random, I wouldn't hit skip. You took a risk with the vocal effects, but it ends up working out okay for the song. I really like how it ends.

Jordan Seavers - I hope you do mix this one again and post it because I really like it. "Tractor Beams" is the best rhyme for "Dreams" in this entire fight. Way to be.

Ken Woodard - This sounds exactly like Niel Young doing a cover of "All Day and All of the Night" by the Kinks. That is until the chorus comes in. I do like the Niel Young vibe, but this song isn't really doing it for me.

Level Nivelo - The first guitar I ever played was a 20-year-old permanantly out-of-tune classical guitar that sounded exactly like that. As far as the lyrics go, I am probably offended.

Melvin - I really like this one. I really dig the rhyming and the lyrics in general. The whole song feels like it could fit pretty well on Make Believe.

Radio North - Crank up the vocals and this a good song. It keeps things interesting and the vocals are unconventional yet still strangely melodic.
EDIT: I like this one even more a couple days later.

Renedo - [REMOVED - admin]

Return of the Dankity Dank - I've heard instrumentals that relate to the title, but this is not one of them.

Thornberry - Here's a question: About two weeks ago did you sell your soul to the devil for the ability make kick-butt songs? These last two weeks you have made some of best songs I have heard on this site. I'm going to send this one to my sister, because I know she'd really like it. I could totally hear this one on the radio.

Those Meddling Kids - I like this song minus the vocal effect, but I guess it makes sense given the line "being kept alive by machines" (which by the way is a great line). Your real voice reminds me of Chris Martin.

Tim Hinkle - This is on my top 5. It's a really well-written song, but you just need to add a few more production elements as the song progresses. For example, right after the first verse it would be nice if drums came in al the way, instead of just cymbal hit throughout the whole song.

Tonamel - I didn't like this one the first time, but when I listened to it on the bus this yesterday morning it was great. It's the kind of song I really like in the morning.

Truth and Regret - I can picture this one being played at Le Chateau in the mall.

Wreckdom - Kind of funny I guess. It goes on a little long I think.

The Zero Effect with Maya - I am definitely downloading this one. The garage-style production works perfectly with this song as do the Male-Female vocals. I could totally hear this as one of the good songs onCBC Radio 3.

In short: Seavers, Melvin, and Thornberry need to get a label

Zero Effect, Tom Hinkle, and Mostess need to post songs this good next week.

"Meh, whatever" isn't really an apology.

I mean, apologies usually involve... apologizing, don't they?

(Edit: And JeffHenderson makes my reply look horribly out of place! Hooray!)

qs da

JeffHenderson wrote: This isn't a bad tune. If it came up on random, I wouldn't hit skip.

quite possibly the best compliment i've ever received. thanks.

p.s. i hope i used this quote function properly. this is the first time i've ever posted.

Hmm! seems thet we've upset a few people this week, and it's always interesting to find those that carry rule books in there pockets that get frantically waved at the first sign of something threatening their secure little worlds anyway here's some reviews that we guess will go down about as well as a chocolate firegaurd...

Asperse: Extremely professional opening, well polished and well thought out, the rest is pretty much a dirge, not always a bad thing, the little girl sample, the talking bits and the bubbly noise were the obvious and only highlights. 5/10

Basket of Hands: Great fuck off opening, really different & agressive, then the attacks on other songfighters, how cool are you!?! 8/10

Hostess Mostess: Yawn! wake me up when 1971 ends... 2/10

Jim Fallope and his Fallopian Dudes: I really like the bit that goes Bah Bah Bah continuously, apart from that too whiney and repetative 4/10

Jordan Seavers: Too be honest I don't know anybody that would or could dance to this, far too twee & distorted, lacking any kind of edge or invention, although I did wonder where Nick Kershaw had disappeared too. 2/10

Ken Woodard: There's a line from the 'Sponge Awareness Foundation' that goes something like... "Here's our next new superstar, oh great another guy with a guitar".
Now don't get me wrong anybody that can actually pick up an instument and make it do what it's supposed to do has my utmost respect, but I guess it needs to do a bit more than this. 3/10

Melvin: Ummm this is like the Catherine Wheel with the guts ripped out 2/10

Level Nivelo: Terrific lyrics, would make an excellent poem 4/10

Radio North: Held my attention through to the third listen but it needs to be cranked up a bit, but very spontaneous and i just loved the clearing the throat mid verse. 6/10

The Return of Dankity Dank: Where has Dankity Dank been? this is brilliant. 8/10

Thornberry: Excellent vocalisation, though infinitely boring, like Dido on downers. 3/10

Those Meddling Kids: Nice use of the vocoder, it would have been nice if it had made a reappearance towards the end of the song, sort of like ELO meets Billy Bragg. Best line this week though, "I don't talk about her much but she pops up in songs" 5/10

Zero Effect + Maya: Fucking excelent, these are the kiddies, the only possible downside would be to try a touch more variation maybe something along the lines of Bearsuit or Help She Can't Swim... 9/10

Truth & Regret: Basically a nice song that neither bothered or annoyed me, kind of like Buggles without the memorable/annoying bits, and once it had faded out it was almost like it was never there, which i guess within the context of the title is quite apt 5/10

Tim Hinkle: You managed to say masterbate and that's about the only debatable highlight 3/10

Jeff Travis Henderson: "The whole world is depressed" you ain't wrong 3/10

Destruction Enterprise: I'd take a wild guess that you guys watch too much Star Trek and listen to too much ICP 4/10

WreckdoM: Brilliant no more no less 9/10

Tonamel: My goodness this is really quite awful. 1/10

So I guess I've upset a few more people, but what the heck, I'm just being honest, and after a minimum of three listens per song that's the way I see it... all the best, take care, lots of love, one of the spOOns.

JeffHenderson wrote:"being kept alive by machines" (which by the way is a great line).

@eclectic spOOns wrote:Best line this week though, "I don't talk about her much but she pops up in songs"

I can feel the day when I become electroMorrissey getting closer.
Thanks for the uber-specific compliments. Vocoders make me think of Transformers rather than Dr Who so for me they are cool and cosmic rather than BBC-cheese. However I would like to redo these vox with someone like Mia Doi Todd, but Ben Gibbard would do the trick .

@eclectic spOOns wrote:

Jordan Seavers: Too be honest I don't know anybody that would or could dance to this, far too twee & distorted, lacking any kind of edge or invention, although I did wonder where Nick Kershaw had disappeared too. 2/10

so i dont mind bad reviews, but this one is funny. far too distorted?? theres like no distortion at all. haha, so its impossible to dance to my song. not like i was planning for a funky dance beat, but speaking of beats, keeping your vocals on beat in your song.... haha. anyways, sorry you didnt like the song, but the distortion part was funny... and the rest of the review.

Betta Late than Nevvva

asperse - Lets see what gonna get me started. I have a ragtime piano groove goin in my head before your song starts...so you have to compete with that. K that gone quick. I think its a pretty nice chord progression in the beginning. The little like, half rap/half talk in beginning. Your singing is....not too bad..but not my favorite. This isnt bad...but its teatering on boring me...but it pretty ambitious..so...points for that!

Hostess Mostess - I dont really know what your saying with the harmony thing in the beginning...but its cool either way. Dude, your voice could not get more 60's...which is good in my book. I like this a lot. I cant decide whether the less-than-perfect production helps this song (it certainly doesnt hurt it) or if id like to hear it done in a studio. That was good stuff either way.

Truth and Regret - I always regret the truth too. Ya know, I once wrote a piano riff a lot like that. Doesnt mean anything...just the first thing I thought of. Im not the biggest fan of the synthy stuff...but this is fun enough that I am enjoying it! Although i am definietly done with it by the time its done...meaning that I am not in a rush to press repeat...but dont take that hard...it was good stuff. I hope you get lot o votes cause i would like this if i liked this music more:)

Melvin - THis is starting out really death cab for cutie. I had to check RealPlayer to make sure this was you. This sounds like a track from the O.C or something...except I dont hate it...in fact I enjoy it. I like this cause it rocks out with out even trying. I always like a song that will rock out with relying heavily on just heavy guitar...or obsessive cymbol hits. And i know this isnt like a "rock out" track...mean and you should collaborate one week..hum...thatd be intresting. Great stuff...probably (k not probably, for sure) my favorite of your stuff I have heard on this site.

Those Meddling Kids - Pretty Nice beat. BUt I am having trouble attaching to this. Like the Robot vocals...ya...I cant say I like this...but I also cant find any good contrsuctive criticism. Its nice production...very clean. Nothing really competeing agaisnt each other.

Tonamel - I really am getting edgy over that distorted....sound. For a 'dreamy' type sound (which I think you were going for??) You did very well for the rest of the song..but the distortion is really disturbing my sleep. How am I suppose to dream with that wretched noise! Bottom line: I like what underneath the fuzz...but the static is just too much for me.

Tim Hinkle - Have you ever takin voice lessons? Cause if not..you should...cause you are close to having a really really good voice. The song seems a bit uninspired. Like the guitar and everything is just going through it. The drums..i dunno if they are programmed are not...but they are rather boring as well. I like the melody line you have..but id either change the chord progression underneath..or play it on acoustic and just completely strip it down. Right now its fighting between be a little more zest...and smooth relax jazz. Oh yes, I forgot to mention the bass. Its nice to hear something rather than just the root of the chord...not a blow me away bass...but definitey a very nice addition. Its also nice you seem to love yourself so very much.

Basket of Hands - Man what is with the distortion in this fight? This one sounds overall unintensional...at least it should be. The song is like Revolution #9...also I dunno about throwing in zombies. The loops are not very good. You sound like someone who cant rap trying to rap. well I shouldnt say that..I am not one that critique rap. lets put it this way then :You rap better than me..thats the best compliment I can give you right now.

@eclectic sp00ns - Boring drum beats...awful vocals....terrible production. I agree with everyone that says just enter one fight. Rather have one good entry than three mind-boggling terrible ones.

Level Nivelo - haha, you sound like John Stevens...member??? The red-headed american idol guy? Oh but he would never talk about sucking cocks and such...but this is you. So lets see..i have to concentrate on the words..cause the music has nothing to offer me. I dunno..an OK idea...but it didnt come across that well to me.

Return of the Dankity Dank - You got the dreamy stuff goin on.Thats the first plus. You had a cool bass goin..and then you got rid of it, and now I am crying. Its terrible what you have done to me! I can only pray that this goes somwhere soon..cause right now its going to send me straight into my dreams for the night (get it, cause like, i am slightly bored by it, so it will put me to sleep? ah forget it). It didnt really...which makes me unhappy cause i liked how this thing was starting out. You brought the bass kinda back in..but its too late. its lost.

The Zero Effect w/ Maya - Not the slickest guitar work...i hear some dampening of power chords. The vocals harmonize...well we'll wont use an adjective. They got in out of pitch..but thats ok. The guitar is actually doing the same thing...in and out of pitch. Not the best musicanship, something a really good song can overcome..but unfortunately this just doesnt do it for me. Maybe that guitar going out of tune is the same problem my guitar has..where parts of the fret-board are in tune, and others aren't...man this pisses me off! But back to the song..I dont like it much.

Jim Fallope and His Fallopian Dudes- Well the name is funny. There is quite a bit of electronica this fight. got some chorus turned up high making the slightly outta tune slap back echo effect on the vocals eh? This one needs some bottom to it...it has none. Is there real bass. You have the bassish sorta sound doing the main loop in the left ear...but its not creating any real bottom shelf to it. The vocals are boring and too repetitve. some of the sounds are kinda fun though...so thats my positive comment for this one.

Ken Woodard - This might be fun to listen to in a coffee shop. I would hope that the live production would be better than what Im listening, the production is way to far away and thin. My guess is you had one mic to work with, so I cant concentrate on that. I cant get into this either. it sounds like your going back from e minor to a minor (unless its capoed...and then make the appriate key adjustment) which can be a real powerful chord progression...but the melody line you picked doenst exemplify it.

ya just never know how big a fight is until you start reviewin it

WreckdoM - hahah..funny intro. The whole song is comical...but im just not really laughing after the intro. You know your funny..and you know you accomplished your goal for most people...so you did good for that.

Radio North Do i have you guys on myspace? or is that someone else? Im pretty sure I got an invite from someone with Radio North as their name. Oh man, you sing just like my friend raynato in his band "director Ray and the movie stars". I hate to mention myspace again, but if you are them dudes...go to my homepage and click director ray from my friends list (hes in my top 8) I swear he sounds just like you, its amazing.

Destruction Enterprise - I am too tired to try to find words to review this. IT wouldnt be intelligent. If that upets you at all (and im not being sarcastic) let me know and ill give it a second listen and review as thourough as I can.

Jordan Seavers - ah man the distortion! its killing my ears! (hope you see that i am just making fun of @eclectic sp00ns) This isnt bad. A postal service feel. You sound like your smiling the whole time you sing...which i hope are...i like when people are happy. As for the song...its nothing something I am jumping up and down for...but I enjoyed more than a good amount of stuff in this fight.

Jeff Travis Henderson-I saved this one for last cause its one of the few I listened too before i was reviewing it (because someone mentioned it had a late beatle vibe to it, and I am a beatle fanatic). I would very much lose that intro. Recorders are most of the time real annoying. This is a really good song. Nice harmonies..When you start singing "yesterday...(cant understand the rest of the words, but i think i heard light saber) at about 1:00 is really groovin. Its really nice. The only thing I want to say is that get some real drums in there..the programmed ones just dont mesh in this song. This was a favorite for sure. Very Good.

Not the best fight I have ever heard...but some real standout included Melvin, Hostess, Truth and Regret, and Mr. Jeff Travis Henderson.

oh man, thornberry, is there another radio north? no, if you heard from a radio north, it wasnt me.

thanks everyone - i consider these reviews "charitable" to say the least - sometimes a song sounds great in you head and when you put it down on "tape" you get something quite unexpected.

i will turn up the vocals next time- thanks for the advice! (and pick a tune thats more in my vocal range).

im taking a week off, but plan to be back in action fight after next.

asperse - The lyrics sound phoned in, literally. Like you called someone, on the phone, and sang these lyrics, and that someone recorded them and put them in a song. But to be honest they work pretty well, and I like the spoken word interludes. This held my attention really nicely for about 2 minutes and then faded into the background, not that that's necessarily a bad thing.

Basket of Hands - We would like to thank Otis Redding, Can, George Gershwin, In Paridisum, Dawn of the Dead, Gabriel Faure, Aphex Twin, Bassic, Ennio Morricone, pigpen, Rone Rivendale, and most of all, our fucking selves. Did I miss anyone?

Destruction Enterprise - Is this a new look for Rone? Sometimes, you're with the rhythm, and to be honest, it's kinda cool when that happens. But then it starts roning again. Guys, seriously, try recording while listening to the music on headphones so that you're generally somewhere near the beat.

eclectic spoons - The fact that the higher vocals don't have anything to do with the key of the song is really distracting. The music is really repetitive.

Hostess Mostess - 4/4, 3/4? This is really cool. Your voice still sounds directly modelled on Billy Joel's, even the straining in the high notes, but it's all quite interesting. I like the background ostinato.

Jeff Henderson - Nice little ditty here. That kid sucks at recorder. It's just fine, not much that's actively interesting me, but I for sure don't hate it.

Jordan Seavers - Those geetars are fuckin bright. I still like your voice a lot, and your songs always sound nice and populated.

Ken Woodard - "Waking up is such a sad feel"? Your voice is pretty neat, but it feels a little awkward to be singing consciously about the subconscious. I love the "dreams" part of the chorus, where you go float around awkwardly on the minor third of the chord. Ah, waking up is such a sad deal, my bad. It's fine, just kinda boring.

Jim Fallope - Nice groove. Fucking repetitive. Like the haphazard ending though.

Level Nivelo - Tune that damn guitar. Ok, I laughed out loud here, this is pretty funny. Maybe work on the lyrics so the "surprise" lines come at the end of verses to give it an "ohmygod is he going to say that he DID he DID say that!"

Melvin - Chillcore. It's definitely chill. You pump out consistently fine choons. I like the sevenths and I wish I could complain about the three chords you use the entire song as boring but I can't, because they're not, because it's just not that type of song. It's just sitting around but it's in a good place. You're always good with the dynamics. Just once, though (or, ya know, more times than that), I want to see you do something completely wacky and off-the-wall and weird and make a non I-IV-V pop-emo-rock song. You have proven that you are a master of that genre, and it's just kind of a boring genre. Kindly please move onwards and upwards, if you will.

Radio North - I think you could still use the crazy-voice and sing actual notes and that would be a better thing, but it works pretty well as-is too. Really cool little song, I like the wobbly guitar that comes in at 1:07. Your vocals could probably stand to louder, I can't really tell what you're saying most of the time.

Return of the Dankity-Dank - Cool intro... that bass-whatever is really annoyingly clippy. I'm guessing this isn't an intro. And the bass is still annoying. Both of the loud, detuned synths are really jarring, kinda in a good way.

Thornberry - I really enjoy this piano part, I'm thinking of Christmas, I don't really know why. You have this thing about singing the same vocal melody over and over, you did it during your last song as well, so maybe switch it up some. Ok, really do, please. The vocal harmonies around 3:15 and thereafter aren't really working for me... except now I do like it when you have the choral sounding voices, maybe do that the whole time instead of building up. Nice song.

Those Meddling Kids - Sounds like you're about to get Frou Frou on us. I like the panned piano stuff. Interesting drums as always. Nice little gated synth. The vocoder... it's not terrible, but I feel like you could have used something more robust, this just seems painfully thin.

Tim Hinkle - Nice singing, nice tune. Remarkably repetitive, and the solos aren't really breaking it up for me proper.

Tonamel - I love this. Love the oboe synth/sample/whatever. This really does feel super-pleasantly dreamy. I love those guitars that come in at 2:12. Somebody said something about it being fuzzy, I fuckin love the fuzz, waves of fuzz. And that goddamn oboe, just great. This one definitely has my vote at the moment, fuckin great song.

Truth and Regret - This is kind of cool, feels like it's trying for a similar place to the Tonamel song but just not getting there. The vocals just aren't doing it for me, maybe put them a little further back in the mix. After 2:00, this really doesn't have much variety, but nice little choon anyway.

Wreckdom - Nice music, but the goofy-ass vocals aren't doing it for me. I'm sorry, I guess I'm in the wrong mood, but I didn't laugh.

the zero effect and folks - This is pretty cool, I like what you're doing with the chords. Mmm, the slowdown bridge, it's nice. Nice song.

Definitely voting for Tonamel, but there were some other fine songs: asperse, hostess mostess, seavers, melvin, radio north, thornberry, tmk.

it was a bebop a repop who said:

asperse - The lyrics sound phoned in, literally. Like you called someone, on the phone, and sang these lyrics, and that someone recorded them and put them in a song. But to be honest they work pretty well, and I like the spoken word interludes. This held my attention really nicely for about 2 minutes and then faded into the background, not that that's necessarily a bad thing.

it's funny you should say that. after deciding i was going to enter the fight (i'd writen ideas/lyrics and spend time researching which samples from "Waking Life" i would use for my song about lucidity, i relized i had no microphone ( i often borrow my buddy's) so (as i've done a few other times) i gutted a telephone, used the speaker that would normaly be the ear peice for the phone as my mic. the tinny sound during the spoken word parts i liked, but the chorous sounds too weak with this style recording, but allas, i was already late for submission so i did two vocal takes and took the second one (i'm what i call a bit of an Inperfectionist.) i'm actually considering redoing this song for later release, witht he chorous more full on (vocaly) and also adding some cello, maybe a little bass guitar... some live drumming. what i would have done if songfight was once a month... lol. but thanks for the review!


thornberry - said -

asperse - Lets see what gonna get me started. I have a ragtime piano groove goin in my head before your song starts...so you have to compete with that. K that gone quick. I think its a pretty nice chord progression in the beginning. The little like, half rap/half talk in beginning. Your singing is....not too bad..but not my favorite. This isnt bad...but its teatering on boring me...but it pretty ambitious..so...points for that!

the progresion is nice and thank you. i definatly agree i could have given a little more depth/dynamic to this song, probably by adding more vocal lines/instrumentation, exspecialy during the chorous. this song really sprun out of the concept of lucid dreaming, and that is aparant in the lyrics/samples used, but i definatly could have made the music more "dream like" with other sounds and instrumentations. thanks for the reveiw tough!


it was caravanary who stated that:

ASPERSE: Maybe it's because I've just drunk half a cask of wine - but this is pretty good too. I can't dance to it - but it's not at all bad. I like the kiddie voices at the beginning - ......it's starting to drag a bit now - maybe slightly too long on the same thing

half drunk nice, thats the best kind of drunk in my opinion. thank you for the kind words, yea the beat is a little too.... sparse to dance to, maybe to slow too. but the sample i used the sliding bongo sound is one i sampled myself and i think that it sounds nice. the voices and samples are all from "waking life" yea, as i've said, i definatly could have given this song more dynamics, maybe i should have dropped the beat for a verse, and then come in during a chorous with a supped up beat... hmm.... you've got me thinking... thanks for taking the time!


renendo said:

Asperse- I enjoy playing with lo-fi/Hi-Fi. Having said that I enjoy your song, but I wish that your vocals weren't so tinny. I would have liked a contrast between the Vocals and the Spoken words, like the Guitar and Beat.

yea, i've covered the tinny vocals thing but it's still a great point, the contrast between the vocal parts is pretty good, it came to me on the fly while recording that the "verses" should be spoken and the chorous sung, almost as a way to add impact to both.... ... it would have worked but, you know, shitty mic. the lo-fi/hi-fi comment is one of the most flatering things i've ever been told, seems lame to some i guess, but i realy do enjoy gritting sounding recordings with nice clear crisp digital effects and samples as well.... the beat is my fav part next to the samples. thanks a ton.

truth and regret:

Asperse: I like the mood of this track. I do think it could have been done better though. The drums need work (once again, use an acoustic sounding drumset for this style), and the vocals could have been mixed better.

you sir, are spot on.

radio north :

Asperse - this song is sorta boring.

yea, i've already talked about what i think could have been done to correct this, but thanks for listening. maybe next time i'll start recording earlier in the week (i don't even think i'm getting a song done this week, unless i am struck with an inspiration bug tonite after working till 11pm

melvin:

Asperse: The kid talk is the best element of this track. Some of the singing is pleasant, but the song doesn’t really go anywhere for 4.5 minutes, and the plodding kick drum gets pretty annoying after a while. Perhaps it’s just too loud in the mix. This song might have benefited from a melodic bass line to make things more interesting.

yea, a bass line would have been great, and the song is too long for the predictable nature of it... i would have been really happy if i'd have gotten all the samples/lyrics in under 330 but, allas. yea, considering i'm a decent bass player i don't know why the hell i didn't get to work on this ealier, i can totaly hear bass lines now, assending the scale in the chrous, light spattering of rythmic fret work during the verse... hmm... thanks a tON!


netron flow.

Asperse: The sound of sleepy philosophizing at 3:47 am over a loop from Nirvana’s Unplugged album played underwater with a Casio drumbeat and random college students walking past with their coffee as they look for a table. Interesting, but I just don’t care; I’m talking with my friends.

it's odd, that you some how knew i was working on this song so late in the morning, i don't think i'd mentioned it... but yea, your description (which i just found (had missed in earlier reads) was really good. i didn't sample nirvana though, the weird noise you hear is from a dj swamp record that was lit on fire (during one of his performances) i sampled, stretched, reversed and edited the sample and used it. i'm at a coffe shop right now, and all there are is random college students looking for a table, the beat isn't stock tough, i don't used stock beats, i just make really boring ones aparantly, GREat review.


tonamel:

asperse
I like this. It's got some mix issues, such as it lacking a bit too much high end, making it all sound a bit muffled, but it's keeping me interested regardless. 3:45 - The drums are way too loud. They're a bit too loud the whole way through, you didn't need to make them louder. Cut off ending is kind of off-putting.

yea, i really slipped on the mixing at the end there, it is way over powering, i am pissed about that. the ending is abrupt, and i guess in retrospect alotough it is like waking form a dream, it isn't very clear, maybe if i added some alarm clock thing and ... maybe i'll record the sounds of the room when i wake up some morning, you know, climbing off the couch i've been banished by my live in ex-gf to sleep on. coughing, scratching myself, lighting a cigarette, wakin-bakin, walking the record player, putting on a record... static swells and fades.... hmm... THANKS FOR THE INSPIRATION.

furrypedro:

asperse: I’m liking the laidback morose fell to this. the cheap beats are good apart from that bit where the kick starts pounding away, it sticks out a bit too much and starts to get annoying. But all the sounds in the background are cool. I’m probably more into the concept than the actual song here, though I like the transition between incidental beats and strummy chorus.

the concept is way better than the application of this song, thats to me what song fight is about though. do they have a policy restricting people from releasing these songs, seems like the wouldn't... gonna pm spud... but yea, thanks again. the beat is just me being lazy i guess, some liked the sparceness others did not.

jeffhenderson:

Asperse - The verse is pretty catchy, but I had to try really hard to overlook some of the production on this one. In the times between the chorus, I couldn't tell what was going on.

yea, production issues have to this point been covered, doesn't make your comment any less valid though, thanks a ton for taking the time!

electric spoons:

Asperse: Extremely professional opening, well polished and well thought out, the rest is pretty much a dirge, not always a bad thing, the little girl sample, the talking bits and the bubbly noise were the obvious and only highlights. 5/10

hey man, you said it well, thanks a ton, and a 5 is really a great compliment to me, to be mundane is something i can live with, because i can at least see 6,7,and 8, until 7ate9


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so i think thats all of them. i'd like to thank anyone and everyone who's ever listened to anysong on sf and reviewed it in any way shape of from. this has been one of the most inspiring things i've found for my music and it's really helping me adress some (of the many) weak points i have as a musician. i enjoy reviewing and altough i may not enter this week i'm sure i'll do some reviews. thanks again, and if anyone is ever stoned/drunk enough to want to collab (wether off or on songfight) i'd be pleased.

asperse

a bebop a rebop wrote:Basket of Hands - We would like to thank ...., and most of all, our fucking selves. Did I miss anyone?

yeah, me

asperse wrote: if anyone is ever stoned/drunk enough to want to collab (wether off or on songfight) i'd be pleased.

I'll see how you sound next week, and I'll think about it but we should get Melvin to write the song and then fuck it up between us. D'ya hear that Melvin? I wanna mash up your shit.

I would like to thank Furrypedro actually. I love that fucking guy.