A last meal and a cigarette (I Know My Rights Reviews)

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A last meal and a cigarette (I Know My Rights Reviews)

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This should have been posted in the Quality Control thread:

<b>There's a mix-up in linkage: I am not pringle can, and melvin is not me.</b>

Nevertheless, it has been fixed.

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Who wouldn't want to be a Pringle Can?
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(Obscurity. He knows his rights.)

(Dear Santa, please give me a life for Christmas, lots of love and cookies and milk, Bjam)
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wow, i'm into these songs!
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Hi, I'm a new fighter, here is my take on reviewing the entries to my first fight:

Bearded Clam Duo: ...
Ben Foxworthy: Nice guitares and melody in the verses, the chorus could do with a bit more power. Overall a very pleasant song.
Bjam: A song about Sonic the Hedgehog? Including a cute "Se-ga"? Bonus points for that ;) I really like the chorus, but the verses don't work for me, the melody just doesn't take me anywhere.
Caravan Ray: A great r'n'r song. I only think I don't like the "Oi"s too much.
Comfort: Nice ambient track, just not very memorable.
exoticorn: The first song I wrote or recorded in years. Not very exciting, but I can at least live with the result ;) Could be a bit louder.
TheHipCola: I didn't think I would like the voice in this song after the first minute, but then came the great chorus and somehow the deep voice worked well after that.
Jim Tyrell: A very good Blues, live with just guitar and voice. I really liked it.
King Arthur: The 5/4 works very well. I think it could do with slightly more prominent percussions or drums.
Melvin: Just great :)
Obscurity: I like the instrumental part, but I think it needs a less deep voice.
Pringle Can: Sorry, this is just too messy for my taste.
Pumpkin Buzzard: I guess you had fun recording this, but I didn't have much fun listening to it...
Roymond: I think the timing of the bass is slightly off. A well written song. The singing could do with a little bit more power. Great guitar solo.
Southwest Statistic + Brass Candle: The double bassdrum is definetely over the top. I generally don't like to much screaming in music, but it works ok in this song. If I ignore the excessive bassdrum I like it. ;)
Yardboy: Great singing (despite some distracting pops), nice guitars. I like this a lot.

There were a lot of great songs in there, I honestly don't know for which one I should vote...
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Bearded Clam Duo
Um. Downloaded.

Ben Foxworthy
After the awesome guitar intro, I expected a bit more of a punchier vocal, but it gets more into it as it goes along. I'm digging this. It kinda drags after a while, I need a badass bridge that stands out in here. The backing 'err/oohs' work nice with the punchy vocals. This is good though. Good job. :) Downloaded.

Bjam
Meeee. Vote for me. I'm pretty.

Caravan Ray
Oh, your talking accent's so nice! The actual song I'm kind of apathetic too, but I heart your accent muchly. It gets kinda repetitive towards the end, and it just gets stuck in a loop

comfort
This does nothing for me, sorry. It's 1:30 of beeps and wow-wow-wow-waaaaahs that I just don't dig personally.

Exoticorn
This is kinda nice. The vocals are very kinda roomy. Where's your accent from? This would be really good as a kind of rock power ballad.

The Hip Cola
The beginning kind of sounds like aliens watching crickets from space. Whoa, your voice is creepy when it comes in like that. Your vocals in the chorus are really really good. This is actually really really good. Very groovy. The ending spoken first was kinda cheesey, despite the message, but it kinda works. And then the ending guitar is just reeeally good. Downloaded.

Jim Tyrrell
I miss the harmonica, it helped to covered up the repetitive strumming. I do still like this though, very bluesy and it gets me grooving in my chair(which, trust me, is an utterly terrifying sight). I like that you actually have a story going on in the song. Very nice. Downloaded.

King Arthur
This is just kinda bland for me. The 5/4 may be clever for musicians, but as a normal listener I find it very hard to get into, although you did well with the drum carrying you along the chorus. The verse just leaves me kinda apathetic. And a fadeout. For a 3 minute song it just does nothing for me. Boring and bland.

Melvin
Damn, this is good. The drums are awesome, and your voice fits the song perfectly. I've seen a lot of people push their voices into songs that don't fit them, but this fits so well. Again, as with Jim T's song, I'm grooving in my chair. I'm not digging the 'noo nee noo nee' guitar that sounds like a siren in the chorus. Ooh, and then oohs and a tambourine? Oh man. Very nice job. Downloaded.

obscurity
Not my thing, but good for the genre. The low voice isn't working for me either, especially considering the very... floaty-esque sounding music. Ultimately it's just too slow moving so I end up skipping it.

Pringle Can
Omg! Ahh! I think this mic may have commited suicide after recording this. Get some decent production on this. Holy crap. Man. It doesn't sound like too bad a song, but, wow, production issues and then totally cutting out? Ow.

Pumpkin Buzzard
Um. No. Did you have to torture and kill a small child for this song? It sounds like they're crying. In their sleep. Skipped.

Roymond
This isn't too bad. A little slow moving for me to get into it. The vocals remind me of a kinda Spandau Ballet thing, but I think that might be just me. By the end of the song I've gotten into the song and am grooving away in my chair again. The guitar solo is very ncie. This is nice, but it just has nothing to quite grab me enough.

Southwest Statistic feat. Brass Candle
Those whispered "I know my rights" are pretty damn scary. This song is pretty damn scary too. That's just personal genre bias though, screamy does nothing for me except in certain conditions.

Yardboy
Wow, how different can you get the previous song. This is nice, the double vocal is really nice. This is really kinda... pretty. Very flowy, lets all hold hands and sing. Ultimately it's just a little too--wait, never mind. Was gonna say it was too bland, and then that nice guitar solo bit came in. Very nice.
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For anyone who enjoyed the Yardboy song, there are two more available at somesongs.com
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Bjam wrote:Pringle Can
Omg! Ahh! I think this mic may have commited suicide after recording this. Get some decent production on this. Holy crap. Man. It doesn't sound like too bad a song, but, wow, production issues and then totally cutting out? Ow.
It seemed like a step up from the recordings from Boston.
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Bjam wrote:Those whispered "I know my rights" are pretty damn scary. This song is pretty damn scary too. That's just personal genre bias though, screamy does nothing for me except in certain conditions.
Thanks for the review! Scary was the objective of my totally hardcore friend Mr. Brass Candle (aka. Asa), otherwise this weeks song would have probalby turned out to be another sappy love song.

(P.S. - I'm stalking you on myspace as creapy as I possibly can right at this very moment... yay...)
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Bjam wrote:Exoticorn
This is kinda nice. The vocals are very kinda roomy. Where's your accent from? This would be really good as a kind of rock power ballad.
The accent would be kind of a german one. ;)
I tried to get some more rock into the song, but failed with my current equipment, which consists of an old acustic guitar and a digital 4 track recorder. (Or rather, I failed with my current limited experience with this setup. ;))
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Bearded Clam Duo
Ha!

Ben Foxworthy
...is me, with my first Songfight entry. I think my biggest problem is that my voice isn't that great. This song might have worked better with a woman singer.

Bjam
I actually like this song a lot, but I don't really understand how the Sonic theme fits with the title... maybe it's just too deep for me. Also, the vocals sound a little muffled, and sound like maybe you were singing too low in your range? My friends actually applauded for the "Sega!"

Caravan Ray
Aggresive music like this really does nothing for me, so I didn't really like the song much when I heard it. But I do like your take on the words "I know my rights," it's probably the most creative way of using that out of all of these songs.

Comfort
This is pretty, but has absolutely nothing to do with the title. I kind of feel like you cheated :P

Exoticorn
I liked this song, it was catchy. But, it was missing something... it felt too long to me, even though it was only 2:50.

Hip Cola
I think this song had the best production. The music sounded really great to me, and I liked your voice. Unfortunately, political songs are something of a pet peeve of mine, so the lyrics just made me roll my eyes. Also, some of the lyrics were very cliche... "rotten to the core?" "Power corrupts?" Come on, you can do better than that!

Jim Tyrrell
You lost a few points with me for doing a blues song... writing one of these just doesn't take as much work. Still, the lyrics were very good and it was well-performed.

King Arthur
This one didn't really do anything for me. Too repetative, not much emotion. Sorry.

Melvin
This was probably my favorite, despite being a little too punk for my tastes. I really like, "I know you've already broken down the words that I said." But, I thought the guitar solo was pretty lame.

Obscurity
I think I'm going to take the 5th on this one....

Pringle Can
Holy.... okay, sorry, but this song is disqualified from my consideration for being so poorly recorded that I can't stand to listen to it. Next.

Pumpkin Buzzard
This song made me laugh, but I'm afraid it's way too silly for me to really like it. My friend's comment was, "This isn't very easy to listen to...." and I think that basically sums it up. Maybe that's just your style....?

Roymond
Very good. Just way too long. I felt like a lot of it could be trimmed down, like the long intro.

Southwest... etc.
I won't lie to you, I just laughed and skipped this one the first time. I went back and listened later, and found that the song actually has some good points, but the screeching was a huge turn-off for me. Call that a personal bias if you want.

Yardboy
This is good, but somehow didn't appeal to me much. Might just be personal taste. You could have used some of that sweet guitar soloing earlier in the song to keep it more interesting. Also, I think the vocal harmonizing loses it's effect when you do it for the whole song.
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I recorded mine too late for entry.

<a href="http://www.somesongs.com/song_info.php?select=3836" target="resource window"> Here it is though </a> if anyone is interested...you won't be quized on it later or anything :)
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Ben Foxworthy wrote:Bjam
I actually like this song a lot, but I don't really understand how the Sonic theme fits with the title... maybe it's just too deep for me. Also, the vocals sound a little muffled, and sound like maybe you were singing too low in your range? My friends actually applauded for the "Sega!"
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Bjam wrote:[

Caravan Ray
Oh, your talking accent's so nice!
Nice!?! :cry:

I was trying to sound all tough and hard and menacing and stuff - perhaps even with an underlying hint of raw animal sexuality.

Oh well ... I guess I can live with 'nice'. Thank you.
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exoticorn wrote:Hey, welcome to the review threads, and great stuff for being first!!!
Roymond: I think the timing of the bass is slightly off. A well written song. The singing could do with a little bit more power. Great guitar solo.
Yeah, the drummer has to clean up his kick drum to lock in with the bass, and my singer sucks for holding back and sliding around on pitch. The guitarist's ego got in the way of editing, so he goes on and on...you know those jam band freaks :)
Bjam wrote: Roymond
The vocals remind me of a kinda Spandau Ballet thing, but I think that might be just me.
I hope it's just you, B :)
Bjam wrote: By the end of the song I've gotten into the song and am grooving away in my chair again. The guitar solo is very ncie. This is nice, but it just has nothing to quite grab me enough.
Thanks. I think I got carried away by the groove, which I dig, too, but still it needs to be trimmed down to like 4 minutes. Sorry about that. I hope to post a remix on somesongs by Friday.
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Here are my recorded reviews. Very good fight.

In my continuing efforts to streamline the time-consuming-ness of reviewing, I've decided i'm no longer going to review what I call the "Look Mom I'm on the Internet" songs, which are more about goofing off and wasting our time than anything else. So if you're not listed below, that's why.

Comfort
Exoticorn
Hip Cola
Jim Tyrrell (VOTE!)
King Arthur
Melvin
Obscurity
Roymond
Southwest Statistic
Yardboy
Ben Foxworthy
Bjam
Caravan Ray
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Jim of Seattle wrote:Here are my recorded reviews.
Thanks for the review, as always I like the recorded reviews. It kind of adds a personal touch that you don't get from simply reading a review. Very cool indeed.

Unfortunately, this week mine (Yardboy) is the one that cuts out half way through. No big deal, I'm sure the last half was just littered with compliments and heartfelt praise. It's probably for the best, wouldn't want my ego to get too big. :)
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Yeah, that happens sometimes. I'm trying to be more aware of that, but the technology still fails me occasionally. Rest assured, it was giddy, rhapsodic approbation all the way.
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Jim of Seattle wrote:Here are my recorded reviews.
Ani DiFranco? I hear that I sound like so many different people every week. And, yeah, I'm 15, a young'un. But future potential is good. I've only played guitar properly for the last... 15 months or so, so I'm working on chords. Slowly but surely. Also, the chords I kinda just shoved down for SFL an hour or so before I went, so that's why it's not quite so interesting. Thanks for the review :)
Caravan Ray wrote:Nice!?! :cry:
I was trying to sound all tough and hard and menacing and stuff - perhaps even with an underlying hint of raw animal sexuality.
It's just the accent. I have a thing for Australian accents. (Hugh Jackman? Yes please.)

exoticorn wrote:The accent would be kind of a german one. ;)
Ooh, see, I knew it was something. I should've just looked at your location. Silly me.
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Jim of Seattle wrote:Southwest Statistic
This is the most helpful review I've ever gotten. You rule. As far as "Jute Gyte" goes, yeah... he is probably the reason I did this song in the first place. He made sure SongFight's ears were already devirginised. (My reviews to follow.)

P.S. Total sidenote. I re-recorded the bass guitar, changed the vurtual guitar amp settings, changed the bass drum volume and added a guitar solo. <a href="http://www.brusscom.com/misc/swsbc_ikmr.mp3" target="_blank">swsbc_ikmr.mp3</a>.
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Thanks! Made my morning. If I don't have time to submit songs and get reviews, the least I can hope for is good reviews of my reviews!
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