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historyman68 wrote:___I'm not taking offense to this because, largely, you're correct.
No offense intended, of course. Sorry about the indelicate language. I like your entry and listened to it a bunch of times. You've obviously got a good ear and make some interesting decisions. This just can't contend in the "song"fight because, arguably-sonata-form-ish or not, it ain't a "song"*. Thanks for the soundfile for me to hear, and I wish you well with your budding electronic music career.

Ever play with a Puntey? Those are awesome. Happy holidays.

*PM me if you want to argue about that because I think the board will crack under the weight of one more "what is a song, anyway" post.
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WeaselSlayer wrote:You come off as very snotty at times.
Yeah, I get that a lot. Thanks for the feedback.
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Reviewed in the order of listenation.


Historyman
um, yeeeah. you know, there is something going on here...i give. can't say I'd listen to it again, but I didn't not enjoy it... some cool noises and tones, echoes of a really early sid barret floyd band practice...[shrug]

The Likely Lads
how is this not likeable? it isn't. What a great vibe.. the drums could be a smidge louder/beefier...but I really like the guitar sounds..they work well for this mix. this is well crafted. dontcha love when you hear a sf track and it makes you go to check the archives for more? Sweet, possible vote.

CCS
There is NO mistaking CCS. You have such a crazy musical mind..I dig. Great use of spatial effects, great mix, GREAT dynamic sense. Dare I say too short? Serious Playa, contender.

Level Nivelo
There is a crazy undertone going on in this fight. Great busy perc/drum parts. It's campy, and I'm admittedly a hard sell for that, but the kickin' breakbeaty stuff happening really gets me. Probably one of my more fav's of yours. Nice beats feat, but no vote.

Leablit
This is so awesome! I love the heavy. Boys, my jaw is on the floor. Great performances from both of you punks. Great mix, really tight. Grinding metal teeth. Very serious contender (suspect this might be sewn up ...)

Poor June
Wow, you know what? There are some great moments that directly relate to the cadence and delivery of your vocals. this song has great feel Poor June. I'd like to hear you belt one of these days. Nice keyboard chops. Nice work, but no vote.

David Over
There's a likeable Dylan thing goin' here. You can't help but groove with that strummy strum thing. It's catchy as hell. Good feelin' tune. No vote.

Ice Weasels
This is instantly cool with me. I like the programming and synth stuff. I'd like to hear the vox a bit more compressed and powerful, but great melody. Very very chill. Would be a contender if I hadn't already heard Leablit. But nice job!

Luke Henley
this is alright...like a demo for a bigger, showier version. The song has a distinct feel to it, but it's a bit rough on the edges, seems to lose focus. I'd like to hear it with more instrumentation. Not bad, no vote.

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This fight was kick ass and made a hefty shortlist. But due to the masterful heavy, kick ass songwriting, and great performances, Leablit takes the hardware. Metal!
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man. anybody else want to review my song? eh?
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oh dude...sorry about that! I'll review it first thing tomorrow...knew I missed one...
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My reviews....

Sweet. God bless highspeed internet, cause I can do reviews when I feel like it, through my good speakers rather than sneaking it in at work!!

Ice Weasels This is cool. I like it. I have this little criteria "niche" of mine, called "driving through the mountains music". This is one of those tunes. I just watched "I robot", and for somereason this tune is a great compliment to that film. This sounds great. I dug it.

Poor June This interesting, cause it doesn't sound like what I'd have expected from you... man I wish I hadn't read that whole "farting" comment, cause I heard it too! Piano sounds good. Is that you? You have WAY more clarity and ...just sound these days!! Sometimes (not always, just here and there) your singing drifts off key. Other than that, it's pretty cool. I like the song, it gave me some weird little flashbacks to ... stone temple pilots... and that got me thinking about ten years ago, and Toronto... and ...I have no idea what you're actually singing about... no time to check the lyrics thread man I 'm reviewing... anyway....intiiating PJ posting style.... cause that 's.....what...we......do....... (I got it...Poor June is the Stevie of Songfight!!!!1 ... I digress.... I like tunes that get me drifiting. Yours obviously did.

The Likely lads this reminds me of Gabe Lee. I'm sure only one ofther person on here knows who Gabe Lee is/was....anyway, Gabe Lee reminds me of John cougar or John Hiatt.... anyof you dudes a john? ...ummm...I mean by name. Sorry. This is groovy bar rock, and I'm diggin it. Yeah. My head is bobbin, shoulders slightly hiked up... one thing is for sure, this is way better than modest mouse. haha. I liked that, nice vibe, well recorded.

Level Nevelo Oh yeah, right away I was thinking "cool this is the nivelo I dig". Don't read into that too much! This sounds very campy, as is too be expected. Cliche, but expected. I envision you as a songwriter for Canadian children's programming theme songs. You'd rule at that.

History Man Trippy. But not annoying yet... sometimes you read the boards, and intrepret stuff a certain way, so I had some expectation of crap here, but sadely for you, I dig it. It's a soundscape escape that sounds like a song...I'm not saying it is, cause how would I ever know what a "song" is... oh, and I'm not trying to poke fun at Mostess, cause I love Mostess' posts, and music, and your way of thinking... I'm merely saying that this HM tune is a trip, and I enjoyed it.

David Over Everything is fine, and the singing has a lot of emotion and vibe and all that, but the tune doesn't hook me in. I'd be the guy at your show who's busy checking out the crowd, talking, and politely clapping between tunes. It's well played... I'll probably like other things you do, but this one jist didn't do it for me.

Carol Cleveland Sings This is the first time I think I've listened to a CCS song without my focus being dominated by how you think music. My first "comparison" is Phantom of the Rock Opera, or other weird 70's rock/show music. Your style is very odd, which I totally love....oh, It has ABBA moments... I like the snare in the left channel... creepy cool stereo imaging.... beatlesque...I enjoyed that.

Luke Henely If there was a songwriter's rule book (which I wouldn' follow by the way, this is just my perspective...) I'd say number 7 or 8 would be "do not intro a song with rhythmic accoustic strummed or palm muted chord pattern". It's an immediate turn off. I like the creative use of guitar fills in this. And the distant piano is nice... I think it's a piano. The loose vocals are distracting... I like the vibe of the music, but little things in the overall song are distracting from the vibe... it's ok.

Leablit I listened to this all day while driving between stores. I could listen to this song over and over. I just drummed on it, but I know that our energy hooked up on this piece... very cool to get a feel from 5000 km away!..... h....uh....not THAT kind of feel ya pervs! I got to confess, I ripped off a tom sawyer fill....but it sounds SO choice. If we ever wind up at a songfight live together...this song must be played. I should have sent Hoblit a mix with a slightly mroe present snare. That's my only critism.... I love his singing on this ... And it came together so quick... anyway, loved it, still love it.
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Leaf wrote: If we ever wind up at a songfight live together...this song must be played. I should have sent Hoblit a mix with a slightly mroe present snare. That's my only critism.... I love his singing on this ... And it came together so quick... anyway, loved it, still love it.
If we do, we'd have to get someone to play guitar...no way could I sing and play that. Also, when I eq'd the drums, I brought up the higher end mids to bring out the snare a little as well. There's some places where you roll in between actual strikes and it sounds killer... but gets a little under the mix :( But overall, I think we still got that excellent vibe. As far as that vibe goes... I was running out of inspiration and when I recieved the drum track...it totally jacked me up and back into the song.

Thanks everybody for the excellent reviews. Seeing how I'll be doing nothing at work today...I'll post my reviews later today.
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Carol Cleveland Sings
Hmmm. Placed among all your other songs, this has a sort of White Album-ish intermezzo feel to it. Very CCS what with the uke and the diminished and augmented chords all over the place. Liked it better on subsequent listenings, so it's [good], but really too short and lightweight to have me take it to the framing shop and hang on the wall.

David
You're trying very hard with your vocal style, but it doesn't feel entirely honest. Sounds a little like you're trying hard to sound gritty, but I can sort of see through it.

History Man
I'm reminded of Renaldo & the Loaf, who were really good at making cool sounds out of unlikely combinations of sounds. This has their appeal, and I'd like it when I'm in the mood for it, which is rare, but not never. I think the vocals are the weakest link in the song. The instrumentals are pretty interesting, and stay within the realm of sanity.

<font color=blue>Ice Weasels
This one's pretty fun. I like how the arrangement gets thicker as it goes along, but almost imperceptibly so. At first I didn't like the purely electronic sound, but I got used to that. The biggest gripe I have is that the lyrics don't have enough specifics to grab onto. What I think the song needs is some really sharp images that grab you by the throat. Raised By Wolves does that a lot, and his songs sound a lot like this and work for that reason. I do like this a lot, though.</font>

Leablit
Of course there's lots to admire here, but it's not my thing. Seems like it's trying very hard to ROCK, but I don't move around when hearing it.

Level Nivelo
Well, looks like we got Level Nivelo B this week, too bad. Kind of a fun beat, and I like the chord progression. I wish your vocals were a little higher energy.

<font color=blue>Likely Lads
A nice solid song, performed well. The bass and the chord progression give the song a faint Motown aroma, but with Springsteen doing the lead vocal. Perhaps re-record the vocals with a little more attention to perfection and it's ready for pressing. Nice work.</font>

Luke Henley
This is a candidate for a good cover, as it's a pretty song. I like how melodic it is, especially where you sit the title at the end of the verse. The performance is way too rough to make for purely enjoyable listening, so my appreciation is more of a recognition of the quality of the writing. The piano noodling is too tentative (and the piano is out of tune), the vocal harmony is too rough. Comes across like a private scratch recording.

Poor June
Another cover candidate. I like the pretty piano, and I like your heartfelt vocals, though you get some serious pitch troubles there in the middle. I also wish your tune was a little more interesting. Your piano part is repetitive, so it would be good to offset that with a more adventurous tune. But combin9ing the repetition in the piano with the flat lead line makes for a sort of trying listening experience. Still, it could work with a top drawer performance and production.
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I gathered some friends and relatives together to do a blind taste-test a la "Jukebox Jury" for the reviews of this week's songs. We were all in a post-holiday grumpy mood so don't take them too hard. These are just the random blurts:

1. luke henley
At first, it reminded me of a VW commercial. Sometimes it sounds like David Foley. (There was a stifled snicker at the cute geometry line.) It sounds like Steve Martin singing "I love-a you and you love-a me" from The Man With Two Brains. This is song is really long, probably longer than it needs to be.

2. leablit
Moshpit. (Emily started headbanging.) Sounds like a mix of Primus and Henry Rollins. "But less interesting." Good energy. Way to hustle! Moshpit!!!! One of the sound effects sounds like an oncoming truck. (Despite these bad reviews, I personally liked this one for what it is, though it isn't the kind of music I normally listen to.)

3. historyman
Sound effects from an old TMBG album? It's from a block dystopia. It's from a world where even the blocks are slaves! It sounds like the Residents, but somehow more irritating. Someone hit the jackpot. The middle part reminds me of slaves in ancient Egypt -- it's a nice part of the song.

4. carol cleveland sings
(I could tell instantly that this was the CCS entry -- your sound is very distinctive.) This is in a Terry Gilliam movie. Sounds like the end of Brazil... jangly. This is one of the better ones. It's a duet with Bob Dylan. Sounds like Garbage (the band). (?) Too bad it's so short. Reminiscent of the Beautiful South song "I Love You (But You're Boring)".

5. david 'over
This was recorded in your dorm room. It's trying too hard. Kinda sounds like a non-produced Violent Femmes. It's catchy despite itself. Not that catchy. Possibly a different singer would make this song. You need more instruments: Make friends!

6. the likely lads
It's John Mellencamp. (Two people said that.) This one is pretty good! Singing lessons would help. I want to fix my car to this music. "Take it to the bridge!" I don't mind this one.

7. level nivelo
(I feel like you probably got beat up about the sequenced keyboards, since all Ice Weasels reviews whine whenever I use any keyboard parts. But I avoided reading other reviews of other bands until posting mine.)
It was awesome until you started singing. With better singing, this song would be killer. Are you singing about New York? Do you have a karaoke version? The song wants to be free.

8. poor june
(For what it's worth, I didn't identify this as the Poor June submission until I looked em up... Either I'm bad at recognizing your stuff, or this is a slight departure from what I'm used to.)
This is a love theme from a fantasy movie about dragons. More bad singing. So painful. I don't like it. Don't imitate the singer from Creed. This is from a sad musical. No, it's from a sad montage in an 80s film. (They digressed about exactly what this montage would look like for the rest of the song.)

9. theophilius monk
Sounds like a really bad Strongbad doing King Missile. It's the Gosh Guys. It's really a lot the Gosh Guys. You clearly had more fun making it than we're having listening to it. Was it made in the living room? Fake ending! You're Trackstar! Trying to sound like the Pixies? (?) This is the worst one.

10. ice weasels
(Most people recognized this instantly as being mine.)
I was unimpressed before, but having listened to the other ones, I'm impressed now. I like the theme, it's not just repeating "Block City!" over and over. More bad singing which ruins an otherwise good song. Is that a sequencer?? Reminds me of Simian, "The Wisp".
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I'm betting the VW commercial those people were thinking of is that really old cabriolet ad featuring Pink Moon by Nick Drake. The keyboard part really reminded me of that song.
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ice weasel wrote:5. david 'over
This was recorded in your dorm room. It's trying too hard. Kinda sounds like a non-produced Violent Femmes. It's catchy despite itself. Not that catchy. Possibly a different singer would make this song. You need more instruments: Make friends!
Thank you for reveiwing my song, please allow me to reveiw your reveiw.
I'm not a student, this was not recorded in a dorm. It was written in under an hour with the guitar, vocals, tambourine and whistling recorded on their first takes, is that trying too hard? Also I have many friends, thanks for asking.
Apart from these points you reveiw was adequate.
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Note: I am in a particularly good mood today, so it might be advisable to adjust your score to compensate for the fact that I'm being nice.

<b>carol cleveland sings</b>: Atmospheric. <b>[good]</b>

<b>David `Over</b>: I like guy and guitar. Sing more normally, though. <b>[good]</b>

<b>Historyman</b>: Some neat sounds, some not so neat sounds. <b>[okay]</b>

<b>Ice Weasels</b>: Neat synth. Sine wave? That's what the patch on my keyboard that sounds like that is called. This is too long. That's excusable, though. <b>[good]</b>

<b>Leablit</b>: Great for what it is. Too heavy for my tastes. Rock, though. <b>[okay]</b>

<b>Level Nivelo</b>: Happy! Better vocals would have added a lot. <b>[okay]</b>

<b>Likely Lads</b>: Mellencamp would be proud. <b>[okay]</b>

<b>Luke Henley</b>: This is quiet. Guy and guitar, sure, but too much guy and not enough guitar. Work on your recording a bit, because this is almost good. <b>[okay]</b>

<b>Poor June</b>: Your voice doesn't really work with me. Nice piano, though. <b>[okay]</b>

<b>Theophilus Monk</b>: You should have entered this. I wouldda voted for it. <b>[good]</b>

Instead, my vote goes to <b>Carol Cleveland Sings</b>.
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Post by Sober »

I briefly listened to all the songs, and Leablit (Hoblit and Leaf?) struck me as awesome. CCS was good as usual.

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mkilly wrote:man. anybody else want to review my song? eh?
No, would appear to be the resounding reply :(
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j$ wrote:
mkilly wrote:man. anybody else want to review my song? eh?
No, would appear to be the resounding reply :(
Ok. Where is this song?
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Leaf wrote:
j$ wrote:
mkilly wrote:man. anybody else want to review my song? eh?
No, would appear to be the resounding reply :(
Ok. Where is this song?
http://www.songfight.net/forums/viewtop ... 2848#12848

The song is here
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over wrote: Thank you for reveiwing my song, please allow me to reveiw your reveiw.
I'm not a student, this was not recorded in a dorm. It was written in under an hour with the guitar, vocals, tambourine and whistling recorded on their first takes, is that trying too hard? Also I have many friends, thanks for asking.
Apart from these points you reveiw was adequate.
I knew that would be a confusing way to do reviews. :-) The comments are from my friends, who were feeling kinda snarky. I was doing a "Jukebox Jury" thing: You play the songs without attribution to a group of listeners and get blind taste-test feedback. None of these people have ever submitted to songfight so their criticism is worth only its entertainment value.

My personal feedback is the Violent Femmes comparison, and that it's pretty obvious you recorded it quickly. But the underlying song is one of the catchier ones from the fight. If you'd spent more time on it, you would've been up there with CCS and Leafblitter.
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Leablit - Heavy rock, not really my thing. The bit when you try and get a bit more poppy with the breakdown and harmonies doesn't sound all that great because the pitch of the vocals isn't very strong. Well recorded and tasty drumming, but about as far from my cup o tea as can be...

Luke Henley - I liked what you were doing with the piano and the guitar, but your singing isn't all that great throughout the whole song I'm afraid, you're flata lot in the first verse which is accentuated by the quietness of the song at that point, and when the harmonies arrive in the first chorus they're too loud and off kilter. the backing in the second verse doesn't work either as someone else said - the tonality of the voices wavers, and often you accidently sing the main vocal for a note or note. Cut the backing to key melody moments and practice to get it spot on.

Poor June - dodgy singing but lush instrumentation - really like the section after the singing, it's pretty and well executed, you can play really well and build a melody but unfortunately the vocals on this are really sub par and ruin the song slightly.

Carol Cleveland Sings - Nice name, and a nice hook there. I like the production on this and everything sounds really nice, except maybe for the oompa loopmpas who come in half way through, nice mandolin though. Interesting stuff. Just the right length for that amount of sonic madness.

David Over - Pinball Wizard Intro! A nice melody and song, but your voice sounds really fake and horrible when you gruff it on purpose like that, stop trying to change your voice and just sing normally and it won't grate so much. Perhaps try and flesh it out with some more instrumentation, an augmentative guitar, maybe bass and drums? This doesn't really hold my attention all that well for the length of time. Nice whistling though.

History Man - Randomness in the intro, ouch some of those sfx are a little loud! Get rid of those horrible trebby ice block hits. Odd monkesque vocals. God this is strange, not what I'd really class as a song as much as a sonic experiment. Not really my thing at all I'm afraid.

Iceweasel - I quite like this one, the vocal melody has a very Indian feel in the scale in the verse, which is pretty cool and interesting. I like the main motif sample and the production overall. Some hamonies would really set this apart, as well as a little tidying up of some of those vocal mistakes. The toy piano riff is nice enough but the song never really gets out of second gear which is a shame.

Level Nivero - This is quite a breezy ditty, drop the vocals down like a ton in the mix though, they're crazy loud, it's nice and short which is nice as otherwise my ears would be in a lot of pain.

The Likely Lads - I wrote the main song and Gareth added the augmentative guitar sections, I played drums and guitar and sang the main vocal in the Chorus, while Gareth played bass, guitar and sang verse lead and chorus harmony vocals. I wrote this mainly after reading One Flew Over The Cuckoo's Nest, and G fixed some of my more clunky lyrics, I know the recording is rough in places, but I really quite like this one, it's grown on me. I'll reply to the comments now. By the way I don't know who John Mellencamp is or what he sounds like, I hope it's good.

CCS probably gets my vote.

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Post by j$ »

ice weasel wrote:None of these people have ever submitted to songfight so their criticism is worth only its entertainment value.
Here, I think this dollar belongs to you ...

Actually that's a horrible thing to say (or maybe just horrid, who's to say.) I think a 'blind' listener is the most helpful critic of all. just my opinion though.
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Miss Emerald wrote:Likely Lads: Mellencamp/Springsteen vox meet mid90's Empire Records Soundtrack slo-jam feel (sort of Gin Blossoms/Innocence Mission type pop). I wish there was a little keyboard part. A simple one. This song seems like the type to rely on its lyrics so I feel they could be a little fresher. We're all lost in this maze? hmmmm.....
Thanks for the pop comparison, I'm an old skool writer in that I always try to make things quite hooky, sometimes for good and sometimes for bad I'm told! I agree with you that a keyboard part would be nice, unfortunately when I played the drum track earlier in the week I wasn't thinking about structure too much and I should have realised it would be slightly cramped. The lyrics might seem a little dodgy, but read them in the archive and consider the source (Cuckoo's Nest) and they might make more sense, and I like Gareth's Mice in the maze line with the cheese, it wouldn't be us without some dodgy line in there....
j$ wrote:Likely Lads - This needs some serious production on the individual tracks. Country rock needs to be practically over-produced to make it really work, in my opinion. Very Badfinger I guess. A bit plodding. A bit of variety to the drums might cure that. The vocals wander off the melody at times. No, sorry, I have to stop it now. There's nothing wrong with it I guess, but there's nothing that great about it either.
Yeah I agree that we could have sit the tracks better with more EQ and compression work, it's something we're still trying to learn properly, and I apologise for my poor drumming, I'm no drummer, I just like to get live drums on our tracks sometimes and often the easiest way is to play them ourselves, our live drummer would cringe at that results. I don't see how we're country though, there's a big fat distorted guitar in the chorus and there's no fiddle or lyrics about cousins and freeways... sorry you couldn't make it all the way through, your loss - there's dancing girls and free beer in the last 20 seconds.
the human cello wrote:The Likely Lads*: This is pretty charming. You've got a great vibe going in your music. It always hooks me right in. Some of those harmonies sound off (intentional clashes) but if it isn't intentional, it's still pretty good.
Maybe even better. Gets a little boring. You should add a guitar solo or a bridge. 3 and 1/2 stars
Thanks very much, you're charming yourself. The harmonies are a little rough yeah, but you get the idea. Thanks for listening and thanks for the stars, i agree that another section would be a good addition. And Thank you for saving the song.
WeaselSlayer wrote:The Likely Lads: I really like these kind of intros, the sort of indie rock roadtrip riff. I'm enjoying this a lot. The harmonies in the chorus have a great simplicity to them, very stable and rich. This seems very marketable.
Thank you. Thanks a really nice review.
fried wrote: The Likely Lads: The instruments are pretty good. Love the feel. I can't say I am a fan of the vocals. They are pitchy at spots. The lyrics don't make much sense too me. Grade B+
Cheers, glad you like the mood and yeah the vocals could do with a rerecord, such are the pressures of writing and recording all the parts in a week! thanks for listening
historyman68 wrote:The Likely Lads
Wow. sounds like some classic rock band I don't know, but don't know too well. then you kind of ruin it with the chorus. It also has a little Modest Mouse feel to it, esp the beginning music and voice. The lyrics are appropriately grungy. Really, the only thing really wrong with this song is the harmony on the chorus. It is less professional and authentic than the rest of the song. Is this based on Bubba Ho-Tep? The ending is a little anti-climactic. I was almost hoping for a fade out or something. Or maybe a blistering guitar solo. Or a leisurely guitar solo. Though I suppose no guitar solo is better than some lame-ass guitar solo that completely takes me out of it. Not to say that's what you'd do. But if that's what you were gonna do, thanks for not doing it. Ooh, maybe a nice little slow fiddle solo might do the trick...
Thanks very much for the great detailed review. I love Modest Mouse so that's a great compliment, and yeah the harmonies are a little rough, I don't know Bubba Ho tep though, what
s that? haha
caravan ray wrote:Likely Lads: Very dull. I know you blokes can do a lot better than this.
Yikes, sorry to disappoint. haha
HeuristicsInc wrote:likely lads - i enjoyed this.
Cheers
Mostess wrote:The Likely Lads entry sounds real, like a live band at an outdoor concert. I like that here. The guitar work is gentle but full. The parallel perfect intervals of the vocals bugs me, but that's no deal breaker. A darned good song.
thanks very much!
TheHipCola wrote:The Likely Lads
how is this not likeable? it isn't. What a great vibe.. the drums could be a smidge louder/beefier...but I really like the guitar sounds..they work well for this mix. this is well crafted. dontcha love when you hear a sf track and it makes you go to check the archives for more? Sweet, possible vote.
Thank you very much, nice review. I agree with you on the drums, we were wrestling with them for a while. That's a really great thing to say, i hope you liked the other tracks. You made me smile a heap!
Leaf wrote:The Likely lads this reminds me of Gabe Lee. I'm sure only one ofther person on here knows who Gabe Lee is/was....anyway, Gabe Lee reminds me of John cougar or John Hiatt.... anyof you dudes a john? ...ummm...I mean by name. Sorry. This is groovy bar rock, and I'm diggin it. Yeah. My head is bobbin, shoulders slightly hiked up... one thing is for sure, this is way better than modest mouse. haha. I liked that, nice vibe, well recorded.
Thanks very much.
Jim Of Seattle wrote:Likely Lads
A nice solid song, performed well. The bass and the chord progression give the song a faint Motown aroma, but with Springsteen doing the lead vocal. Perhaps re-record the vocals with a little more attention to perfection and it's ready for pressing. Nice work.
hey thanks very much, we actually realised during recording that the E/F#/A/B chorus I'd written was the bridge to 'My Girl' Whoops! Nice spot.
iceweasel wrote:6. the likely lads
It's John Mellencamp. (Two people said that.) This one is pretty good! Singing lessons would help. I want to fix my car to this music. "Take it to the bridge!" I don't mind this one.
Cool idea to grab some buddies and review. Who's John Mellencamp though haha?
feldspar wrote:Likely Lads: Mellencamp would be proud. [okay]
I'm gonna assume that's a good thing and say Thanks!

Thanks for all the reviews guys!
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Theophilus Monk Reminds me of a Will Ferrall skit. Meanders. When it started, I was immediately interested, but that interest kinda wanned as the song progressed. It sounds like (this is not an accusation.. this is merely what I get out of it) like an exploration in Attention Deficit writing. A bit of a wrekdom vibe. I enjoyed most of it, but I wouldn't vote for it. I did appreciate the vibe of a gang of people having fun and getting silly. I think that someone may have some Oedipus complexes though. Guitar is nice. Shame on you for having the wrong title. It evokes a camp fire/pot smoking circle vibe. end of my review. Which isn't much of a review, more like impressions...
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I'm just gonna poke my nose in for mister likely mike - Bubba Ho-Tep is a movie wherein an aging Elvis Presley battles an undead mummy. Also JFK, maybe kinda sorta. You Decide! Great movie anyway.
http://www.imdb.com/title/tt0281686/
Let cake eat them.
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